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As human beings, we are set a trust

          Dominion over all such lesser things

                    Yet it's axiomatic that we turn to dust

                              The best of what our erudition brings



We take a fertile clay in hand to mold

          The asseveration of our bright intents

                    To throw upon life's wheel and thus behold

                              The magic that our work and will relents



But much of what we strive for falls away

          Our altruistic hopes and aims devoured

                    By all that glitters gold with glut and pay

                              The milk of our accomplishment so soured



Perhaps if we'd first taste that bitter cream

                              We'd shape a world more fit ... our childrens' dream.




~ 2nd Place ~  in the "Late April Standard Any Form" Poetry Contest, Brian Strand, Sponsor.

~ 2nd Place ~  in the "Triple A Challenge - 14 Lines Maximum" Poetry Contest, Robert Haigh, Sponsor.
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Duet Avatar
May 2, 2018 at 10:00 PM
What a wonderfully deep and true poem, Gregory. Congrats on your win too.
Barden Avatar
May 29, 2018 at 12:22 AM
Thank you so much, Carole - so appreciated! :-) <3
Gentry Avatar
April 24, 2018 at 7:54 PM
Another congratulations!
Barden Avatar
April 30, 2018 at 6:08 AM
Many kind thanks, Susan! :-) <3
Gauthier Avatar
April 24, 2018 at 7:05 PM
Back with more congrats, Gregory.
Barden Avatar
April 30, 2018 at 6:08 AM
Thank you very much, Line! :-) <3
George   Avatar
April 23, 2018 at 7:36 AM
The metaphor you have used to convey this life lesson and journey is simply...MAGNIFICENT! Sincerely, Elaine
Barden Avatar
April 23, 2018 at 8:35 PM
That's very kind of you, Elaine, and I'm so pleased you found this one so worthwhile! Blessings and thanks to you, my friend - you are always so kind! :-) <3
Poteet Avatar
April 21, 2018 at 8:43 PM
Nice work, Greg. Salutations and honors to the poet, great expression, bitter cream, soured milk.
Barden Avatar
April 22, 2018 at 6:48 AM
Many kind thanks to you, RAP - blessings! :-)
Richards Avatar
April 21, 2018 at 11:00 AM
This was an amazingly wonderful poem using unusual words so perfectly. Well done.....molded into a piece of artwork itself!
Barden Avatar
April 22, 2018 at 6:47 AM
That's very kind of you to say, Carrie - thank you SO much, my friend! :-) <3
Rodrigues Avatar
April 21, 2018 at 9:35 AM
So apt! A fave! I had just commented on Sandra’s and you spoke my mind but in a much more articulate and artistic way! Great including the photo! Congrats, Greg! <3 Kim
Barden Avatar
April 22, 2018 at 6:47 AM
Thank you very much, Kim - so pleased you enjoyed it, friend! :-) <3
Pigeon Tart Avatar
April 20, 2018 at 5:40 PM
Fantastic piece Greg! Congratulations on your win :) xomo!
Barden Avatar
April 20, 2018 at 10:41 PM
Thank you so very much, Mo - blessings! :-) <3
Warrior Avatar
April 20, 2018 at 5:06 PM
Superbly done my friend...Congrats on 2'nd place Gregory...stay in the light...^WW^
Barden Avatar
April 20, 2018 at 10:40 PM
Many kind thanks to you, W@ - I greatly appreciate the wonderful comments! :-)
Gauthier Avatar
April 20, 2018 at 4:41 PM
Back with congrats on your well deserved silver medal. I really like where you took this challenge, Gregory.
Barden Avatar
April 20, 2018 at 10:40 PM
Very kind of you, Line - thank you so much! :-) <3
Gentry Avatar
April 20, 2018 at 4:16 PM
Excellent. Great message... congratulations again on your win.
Barden Avatar
April 20, 2018 at 10:39 PM
Thank you very much, Susan! :-) <3
Ligon Avatar
April 18, 2018 at 10:43 PM
Your presentation is beautiful and your words are for musing!
Barden Avatar
April 19, 2018 at 2:38 AM
Very kind of you, Juliet - thank you! :-)
Gauthier Avatar
April 18, 2018 at 10:28 PM
Beautiful, Gregory. Well done.
Barden Avatar
April 19, 2018 at 2:38 AM
Thank you, Line!
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