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Written for the contest " Iron Maiden" sponsored by Robert James L, I chose the song " hallowed be thy name" it used to be one of my favorite songs, also my ringtone growing up too. Please do listen if you like heavy metal.

 

L i f e a prison of pretense and I still dream of walking through tempests of chaos barefoot, allowing stones and pebbles to tattoo my languid skin with love in lilac, as ashes of yesterday erase the thunder marks that struck my spine in ruthless rhythm, oblivious to the scorching solitude that swallowed the stars swaying across the heinous horizon. Trusting the tormentor, dancing with the devil, as I drink from the naive springs, like a jailed jasmine, to Stockholm syndrome. I’ve heard the crickets croon, I’ve felt the warmth of raining tears, while w a i t i n g w i s h i n g upon pirouetting peridots~ a trick played by Lucifer, as peace is a lie fed from the serpentine scent of sunlight that tastes like mists of malice… Tonight I kneel at the chapel of charades, reminiscing fragmented forests where I’ve long been a forbidden lace of Lilith, cursed by the fickle flames of the blood moon, like a tortured sin, tethered by time… O divine destiny, designed with darkness, see the angst, veiled amidst contoured clemency and manicured mercy, the beginning of an inevitable end. I fear not the hereafter~ the realm of redolence and zephyr, there phrases of regret shall be a rinsed-away garden, watered with saffron and amber… Perhaps when the last refrain of living rewinds and repeats, we’ll reflect on the circus we performed in sheer naivety… But would you then~ catch my soul, it’s willing to fly away, feel my pulse, it emanates freedom, heed my heart, it sings of love, seize my ink, it flows with faith, catch my sigh, it homes compassion, hold my hand, it seeks kindness… Hallowed be thy Name Hallowed be thy Light....

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Date: 5/12/2025 8:54:00 AM
Ink , your words are moving. “Allowing stones and pebbles to tattoo my feet surround by the scent of lilac to ease, ashes of yesterday, “wonderful lines of emotion , imagery , and feeling. Hugs and love my friend
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Date: 3/26/2025 3:00:00 AM
Dear talented soul congratulations on your trophy win! I don’t know a thing about heavy metal but this is deep! I will listen to your favorite song and broaden my horizons! Hugs love and light to you!
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Date: 3/26/2025 3:04:00 AM
Ok I listened to it on YouTube and that’s a good ringtone! I see why you like it! Catchy
Date: 3/23/2025 4:54:00 AM
Congratulations Inky as Maria calls you if I may. Amazing poetry with unique and exceptional metaphors. Congratulations...
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Ink Empress
Date: 3/23/2025 9:56:00 AM
Awn thank you yes you can always call me inky. Will visit your page soon
Date: 3/22/2025 1:31:00 AM
congratulations on your top win dear poet. dear empress, your ink doesn't flow, it sings, gifted poet. Happy writing Cheers!!!
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Date: 3/22/2025 6:42:00 AM
You are so kind and so thoughtful thank you so much truly
Date: 3/21/2025 9:52:00 PM
So happy to see one of my most FAVE poems with a trophy win. Congratulations dear Empress on your most deserved recognition.
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Date: 3/22/2025 6:41:00 AM
Awwn sweet valsa you make my heart warm! Thank you so much
Date: 3/21/2025 5:59:00 PM
"I still dream of walking through tempests of chaos barefoot..." an intrepid quintessence of pure will, which for me is the mraning of this fantastic, spiritually sentimental poem. Vulnerability meets valor herein, and achieves enlightenment Poetess...J.A.B. A FAV!
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Date: 3/22/2025 6:41:00 AM
Thank you so much dear justin, for your kind and sincere comment as well as for the fave. You have a deep understanding of poems. Sending you light always
Date: 3/21/2025 3:21:00 PM
I do like heavy metal, and yours is very heavy metal. "catch my sigh, it homes compassion, hold my hand, it seeks kindness… Hallowed be thy Name Hallowed be thy Light..." An all woman metal band should taketh...Congratulations dear Ink! ~
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Date: 3/23/2025 9:55:00 AM
Awwn you noticed that line yes… thats what stockholm syndrome means! And i am the same regarding music! Thank you so much again for your comments sweet anaya! You are truly such an uplifting soul
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Date: 3/22/2025 9:24:00 AM
You are so clever "dancing with the devil, as I drink from the naive springs, like a jailed jasmine, to Stockholm syndrome Stockholm syndrome is a psychological response wherein hostages or abuse victims develop positive feelings toward their captors or abusers, so well-done, a true psychologist and poetess, Empress.
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Date: 3/22/2025 9:17:00 AM
oh I too move in different circles and love music, we'd train our ears to classical music on Sunday mornings, hence the guitar wizards of metal, but I'm all around--hip hop, soul, anything that moves me! ha I have the ballad "Runaway" by Jeferson Starship looped right now! ha ha
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Date: 3/22/2025 6:02:00 AM
Thank you so much sweet soul anaya, you are truly such a supportive ray of poetic light here and im grateful for all that you are! What other bands do you like? I do love heavy metal but im more of a mix of everything. Appreciate always your kindness truly
Date: 3/21/2025 11:09:00 AM
Wonderfully written! Congratulations on the top win dear Inky!
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Date: 3/22/2025 5:55:00 AM
Thank you dear karen, i hope you do know how grateful i am for your unwavering support truly! You are always quick to congratulate so many. A beautiful and kind soul you are ! Thank you
Date: 3/21/2025 10:09:00 AM
I truly love your poem… congrats on the trophy. The last stanza is brilliant!!!
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Date: 3/22/2025 5:54:00 AM
Thank you so much for the placement and inspiration and i do love iron maiden so this is an honour truly! Grateful! Appreciate it. Sending you light always
Date: 3/20/2025 5:47:00 PM
Dear Ink, your lovely poem touched me deeply. I enjoyed its exquisite imagery. I also enjoyed the song and its haunting theme. Good luck in the contest. :)
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Date: 3/21/2025 2:17:00 AM
Thank you so much dear evelyn so kind of you! Im grateful
Date: 3/20/2025 6:38:00 AM
IE, in this entry there’s a certain amount of fatalism. I liked it, since we’re ultimately not making that large an impression on the universe. At least it’s possible to end with a good feeling. In the meantime, we can read and share your poetry and feel pretty darn good about just taking it all in. Smiles, along the way and always!! BTW, I see you have a lot of comments. I know you’re reading them all and I’m not expecting a response as critical. Just keep doing what u do!!
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Date: 3/21/2025 2:17:00 AM
I do read all the comments dear duke, and i read all your comments too, sometimes it is hard to respond so i always respond on last poem comments so soupers know i do appreciate comments. They help me keep sharing. Thank you so much for taking time to read every comment! You are a very generous soul
Date: 3/20/2025 5:55:00 AM
Dear Empress, Your ink left me absolutely awestruck. Very Iron Maiden with such raw emotion through every line. It’s haunting, beautiful, and deeply profound all at once. I felt like I was walking barefoot right alongside you, through the chaos, through the pain, and yet somehow finding glimpses of light and hope along the way. You have an extraordinary gift, my friend. Spring Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel
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Date: 3/21/2025 2:15:00 AM
Thats a massive compliment to be told its very iron maiden. Thank you so much dear daniel. I always appreciate your kindness and poetic presence. Sending you light always
Date: 3/20/2025 3:45:00 AM
I can only make an exclamation of 'Wow' ! No words are enough to say about the beauty and depth of your poem. The last few lines are like the lovely dessert we savor after a ceremonious banquet. I could feel the full tension of the introspective odyssey you have undertaken and got soaked in the rain of tears. Absolutely brilliant and a sure winner.
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Date: 3/21/2025 2:14:00 AM
Thank you so much for your kindness always and for leaving such enthusiastic comments that inspire me to keep sharing. Sending you light always
Date: 3/20/2025 2:11:00 AM
Dearest Inky.Wow, your poem is incredibly powerful—haunting yet beautifully lyrical. The imagery is rich and evocative,delving into a deep, introspective journey through pain, resilience, and a longing for freedom. I love how it weaves themes of suffering and hope together, especially with lines like “catch my soul, it’s willing to fly away”—such a poignant and heartfelt plea. Truly a Gem, good luck in the contest...Hugs
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Date: 3/21/2025 2:00:00 AM
Dear beautiful maria, thank you so much, for your kindness , always grateful
Date: 3/19/2025 9:22:00 PM
I am a loss here, wish to comfort you...you write sometimes of the Almighty, sometimes of Lucifer and the darkness...it's not my place to judge,...it has one beautiful ending.
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Ink Empress
Date: 3/21/2025 1:59:00 AM
Awn dear sweet Paige, i write of the Almighty as i am Muslim. And I write of Lucifer as a metaphor for other things in life such as darkness etc. i appreciate your kindness
Date: 3/19/2025 7:47:00 PM
Absolutely brilliant poetry, IE, penned as only you can, poignantly painting the anguish of a soul identified with form navigating the dream realms, where … if but silence be embraced, the truth shines forth. I’m not familiar with the song but nevertheless simply marvel at the journey you take the reader on. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
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Date: 3/21/2025 1:51:00 AM
That is so kind of you and yes thats what the poem eventually means, all that we see now is a dream and illusion within a dream. Thank you so much for your kind comment i always appreciate your support truly
Date: 3/19/2025 12:38:00 PM
Omg one of my faves toooo cradle of filth!!! Mmmmm!!! stones and pebbles to tattoo my languid skin… mmmmm love that imagery! oblivious to the scorching solitude that swallowed the stars swaying across the heinous horizon. Yaaaaazzz papi!!! Look u goooo!! jailed jasmine,to Stockholm syndrome. Mmm the heavinesss!!! Is gorgeous!!! fed from the serpentine scent of sunlight that tastes like mists of malice…oo alliteration!!!!! forbidden lace of Lilith . cursed by the fickle flames of the blood moon, dayum . Freaking stunning aeee!!! In love with the last stanza!!! N the ending Hallowed be thy Name Hallowed be thy Light.... CHILLS!
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Date: 3/21/2025 1:21:00 AM
Papi ur comments give me chills lol thanks
Date: 3/19/2025 12:37:00 PM
oh wow, I really loved that last stanza in Italics. Kind of like list poetry. really nice lines, dear Ink. You need have no fear of the hereafter. I was reading Jan's comment below. I also liked those lines that she pointed out a lot!
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Date: 3/21/2025 1:16:00 AM
I know you have no fear sweet andrea, your way of thinking of the hereafter is calming to the soul and mind as if that is where we will find true love and peace. Thank you so much always
Date: 3/19/2025 10:19:00 AM
I read each line slowly so as not to miss one single expression of the emotions you wrote. I had so many comments to write, but they'd be longer than your lines. Ink, the dancing devil takes great joy in tormenting us, always trying to discover that little unprotected part of us that he can sink a claw into. Dry your tears and rinse away his iniquity with the watered saffron and amber. Be aware of Satan's machinations and turn away from him. Your last verse is omnipotent.
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Date: 3/21/2025 1:15:00 AM
Dear Lin, your comment comforted my heart as i read, and its amazing how you felt the emotional depth of the poem, as if you know exactly what satans machinations are like.. i often use them as metaphors for other things and i see youv felt that; thank you so much for being so kind and empathetic
Date: 3/19/2025 10:18:00 AM
wow Ink you certainly don't mince words here - I love the fact you chose this track for so many reasons but especially for the title and this stanza in particular' "I’ve heard the crickets croon, I’ve felt the warmth of raining tears, while w a i t i n g w i s h i n g upon pirouetting peridots~ a trick played by Lucifer, as peace is a lie fed from the serpentine scent of sunlight that tastes like mists of malice… such amazing lines ink. I hope this is a big winner in the contest! hugs jan x
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Date: 3/21/2025 1:13:00 AM
Thank you so much dear jan, this song was not easy to write for as the melody is too familiar as its one of my favorite songs from the band, so i had to think of the meaning of the song to be able to write, i appreciate always your kindness and support, grateful truly
Date: 3/19/2025 9:22:00 AM
A prison of pretense … interesting
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Date: 3/21/2025 1:12:00 AM
Thank you dahlin

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