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Haiku Questionku

bird stands on one leg
wave almost knocks him over
wings provide escape

he works so hard
at being balanced
what will tip him over

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Marquis Mc Mills-Cooper

Date: 10/6/2016 8:15:00 AM

I like this poem, and the title is killer! I'm still working at the Haikus...I'm getting better. You nailed it here though. Nice work! MC

Judy Ball

Date: 7/7/2016 5:18:00 AM

Well done. Really good imagery here. The trick to this type of poetry is to be able to say much with few words. You have done this admirably here. God Bless, JB

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/7/2016 7:51:00 AM

Thanks Judy.

Paul Callus

Date: 7/3/2016 10:21:00 AM

I like the image in the first, and the clever play on words in the second. ~ Regards // paul

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/7/2016 7:51:00 AM

Thanks Paul.

James Tate

Date: 7/3/2016 9:50:00 AM

Intersting picture you paint in verse, I like it.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/7/2016 7:52:00 AM

Thanks James.

Skat A

Date: 7/1/2016 9:18:00 AM

If, perhaps, you sneak up from behind, you migh tip it over. Haha It will flap it's wings before you come 10 Ft near. it seems as if almost everyone on this page is going to the beach, I guess I will join my family in two weeks in Corpus Christi Texas ...down mustang island;) The coast is beautiful. I see birds like this all the time ... My favorite is the crane... (flamingos at the zoo) vivid imagery. Nature is the perfect gift (balance) SKAT

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/1/2016 9:35:00 AM

We mostly just have Sea Gulls here. It's a hot day so we are heading to Mckinley Beach here on Lake Okanagan. It's a spectacular day.

Skat A
Date: 7/1/2016 9:18:00 AM

Thanks for dropping by

Scott Thirtyseven

Date: 6/30/2016 7:16:00 AM

Two very separate pieces that combine so well. Stimulates the mind.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/30/2016 8:56:00 AM

Thanks Scott, most people thought the second one was still referring to the bird.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/29/2016 10:56:00 PM

this is nice to see. I am going to be at a beach in Oregon soon to see my son a short while. I'll miss you guys. Hope I can do some Soup while there! And it would be cool if I saw a bird like this on the beach.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/29/2016 11:53:00 PM

Have fun Andrea, we will miss you. Hugs Rick.

Daver Austin

Date: 6/29/2016 10:19:00 AM

Love that image - the one legged bird. daver

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/29/2016 11:54:00 PM

Thanks Daver.

Joanna Daniel

Date: 6/29/2016 3:22:00 AM

Thought provoking write, Richard:)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/29/2016 5:47:00 AM

Thanks Jo.

Arthur Vaso

Date: 6/28/2016 11:13:00 PM

Loved this one, I tried to think of a witty line in response, but I admit it you have me stumped!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/28/2016 11:19:00 PM

So unlike you. Feel free to think of something and come back.;0)

Timothy Hicks

Date: 6/28/2016 11:01:00 PM

The only thing that will tip him over is self-doubt (that or me breaking wind after an evening at Taco Bell) ... ;) but seriously though, a very poignant haiku moment. I know you said that you struggle with this form, so I'm happy to see you trying it in any case :)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/28/2016 11:20:00 PM

Ha ha, you and Casarah have brought a chuckle to my day.

Harry Horsman

Date: 6/28/2016 4:53:00 PM

Wow a while since i've read a ku, and a haiku to boot. A wave of emotion, reading this, love them both...

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/28/2016 6:34:00 PM

Thanks Harry.;0)

Eileen Manassian

Date: 6/28/2016 4:23:00 PM

A broken hear will tip him over...desires unfulfilled. Great write, dear. Hope all is well. Hugs

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/28/2016 6:35:00 PM

That would definitely put him off balance. Yep all is well, busy but good.

Constance La France

Date: 6/28/2016 3:06:00 PM

Richard, I've seen that bird, lol... love your questionqu, 7 ~

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/28/2016 6:38:00 PM

Thanks Constance, I appreciate the kind visit and 7.

Casarah Nance

Date: 6/28/2016 9:43:00 AM

a bottle of rum? it is thought provoking actually... jealous of the birds and balance and how high they can fly, we work so hard to be like them and all we get is to die. We can really learn a lot from nature and the balance of it all. hugs xx

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/28/2016 2:18:00 PM

Ha ha, that might work! Hugs Rick.