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Haiku Questionku

bird stands on one leg
wave almost knocks him over
wings provide escape

he works so hard
at being balanced
what will tip him over

Copyright © Richard Lamoureux | Year Posted 2016

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Marquis Mc Mills-Cooper

October 6, 2016 at 8:15 AM

I like this poem, and the title is killer! I'm still working at the Haikus...I'm getting better. You nailed it here though. Nice work! MC

July 7, 2016 at 5:18 AM

Well done. Really good imagery here. The trick to this type of poetry is to be able to say much with few words. You have done this admirably here. God Bless, JB

Richard Lamoureux

July 7, 2016 at 7:51 AM

Thanks Judy.

July 3, 2016 at 10:21 AM

I like the image in the first, and the clever play on words in the second. ~ Regards // paul

Richard Lamoureux

July 7, 2016 at 7:51 AM

Thanks Paul.

July 3, 2016 at 9:50 AM

Intersting picture you paint in verse, I like it.

Richard Lamoureux

July 7, 2016 at 7:52 AM

Thanks James.

July 1, 2016 at 9:18 AM

If, perhaps, you sneak up from behind, you migh tip it over. Haha It will flap it's wings before you come 10 Ft near. it seems as if almost everyone on this page is going to the beach, I guess I will join my family in two weeks in Corpus Christi Texas ...down mustang island;) The coast is beautiful. I see birds like this all the time ... My favorite is the crane... (flamingos at the zoo) vivid imagery. Nature is the perfect gift (balance) SKAT

Richard Lamoureux

July 1, 2016 at 9:35 AM

We mostly just have Sea Gulls here. It's a hot day so we are heading to Mckinley Beach here on Lake Okanagan. It's a spectacular day.

July 1, 2016 at 9:18 AM

Thanks for dropping by

Scott Thirtyseven

June 30, 2016 at 7:16 AM

Two very separate pieces that combine so well. Stimulates the mind.

Richard Lamoureux

June 30, 2016 at 8:56 AM

Thanks Scott, most people thought the second one was still referring to the bird.

Andrea Dietrich

June 29, 2016 at 10:56 PM

this is nice to see. I am going to be at a beach in Oregon soon to see my son a short while. I'll miss you guys. Hope I can do some Soup while there! And it would be cool if I saw a bird like this on the beach.

Richard Lamoureux

June 29, 2016 at 11:53 PM

Have fun Andrea, we will miss you. Hugs Rick.

June 29, 2016 at 10:19 AM

Love that image - the one legged bird. daver

Richard Lamoureux

June 29, 2016 at 11:54 PM

Thanks Daver.

June 29, 2016 at 3:22 AM

Thought provoking write, Richard:)

Richard Lamoureux

June 29, 2016 at 5:47 AM

Thanks Jo.

June 28, 2016 at 11:13 PM

Loved this one, I tried to think of a witty line in response, but I admit it you have me stumped!

Richard Lamoureux

June 28, 2016 at 11:19 PM

So unlike you. Feel free to think of something and come back.;0)

June 28, 2016 at 11:01 PM

The only thing that will tip him over is self-doubt (that or me breaking wind after an evening at Taco Bell) ... ;) but seriously though, a very poignant haiku moment. I know you said that you struggle with this form, so I'm happy to see you trying it in any case :)

Richard Lamoureux

June 28, 2016 at 11:20 PM

Ha ha, you and Casarah have brought a chuckle to my day.

June 28, 2016 at 4:53 PM

Wow a while since i've read a ku, and a haiku to boot. A wave of emotion, reading this, love them both...

Richard Lamoureux

June 28, 2016 at 6:34 PM

Thanks Harry.;0)

Eileen Manassian

June 28, 2016 at 4:23 PM

A broken hear will tip him over...desires unfulfilled. Great write, dear. Hope all is well. Hugs

Richard Lamoureux

June 28, 2016 at 6:35 PM

That would definitely put him off balance. Yep all is well, busy but good.

Constance La France

June 28, 2016 at 3:06 PM

Richard, I've seen that bird, lol... love your questionqu, 7 ~

Richard Lamoureux

June 28, 2016 at 6:38 PM

Thanks Constance, I appreciate the kind visit and 7.

June 28, 2016 at 9:43 AM

a bottle of rum? it is thought provoking actually... jealous of the birds and balance and how high they can fly, we work so hard to be like them and all we get is to die. We can really learn a lot from nature and the balance of it all. hugs xx

Richard Lamoureux

June 28, 2016 at 2:18 PM

Ha ha, that might work! Hugs Rick.

June 28, 2016 at 7:18 AM

unique suggestion in a beautiful parallel ...

Richard Lamoureux

June 28, 2016 at 2:21 PM

Thanks Probir.

Anne-Lise Andresen

June 28, 2016 at 6:44 AM

- Beautiful both of them, Richard :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Richard Lamoureux

June 28, 2016 at 2:21 PM

Thanks and a big hug Anne-Lise.

Demetrios Trifiatis

June 28, 2016 at 2:47 AM

Beautifully done my friend, Richard!

Richard Lamoureux

June 28, 2016 at 2:22 PM

Thanks Demetrios.;0)

June 28, 2016 at 1:05 AM

Great question Ku's I love the first one especially:-) hugs Jan xx

Richard Lamoureux

June 28, 2016 at 2:29 PM

Thanks Jan, I wrote this one for a contest at my work.

Richard Lamoureux

June 28, 2016 at 2:23 PM

Thanks Jan, I wrote this one for a contest at my work.

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