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Haiku 11

mist fills the meadow darkness and gloom rule the sky songbirds drift away

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017


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Kabuteng P.Ink K.
Date: 4/1/2017 12:39:00 PM
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Really enjoyed the scene you've depicted here with your words, Tim.... I enjoy stormy weather and I think you captured it well in 3 lines... Thanks again for passing by my posts :)
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Lisa Ricci
Date: 3/31/2017 12:24:00 PM
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Hello Tim. I hope this is your creative poetic expression at work and not anything serious. This entry is in perfect form voice and tone. The theme allows the reader to pause. May the songbirds never drift away. Well done
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Sara Ella
Date: 3/31/2017 8:51:00 AM
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This is a sad one Tim and yet the image is painted so clear that it is beautiful. <3
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White Wolf
Date: 3/31/2017 4:53:00 AM
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A really good haiku, Tim! I enjoy the mist, but you can keep the gloomy skies!
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John Lawless
Date: 3/30/2017 9:06:00 PM
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the dark side of the Haiku....kinda melancholy .... yet grabs the reader..
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 3/30/2017 7:32:00 PM
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A little melancholic, but lovely Tim. 7 ; )
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Lynn Marie
Date: 3/30/2017 4:29:00 PM
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...Beautiful words sad to read. great imagery... describes our weather :-) blessings xx
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Ilene Bauer
Date: 3/30/2017 3:18:00 PM
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you've created such a vivid mood in your poem, tim, that i can picture it perfectly...
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Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 3/30/2017 2:45:00 PM
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- Lovely ... but, sad Tim - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Seren Roberts
Date: 3/30/2017 1:58:00 PM
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aw hope a pill helps.....Seren
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Tim Smith
Date: 3/30/2017 2:26:00 PM
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I need that big pill in the sky to offer up some vitamin D...thanks
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Heidi Sands
Date: 3/30/2017 1:07:00 PM
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A powerful Haiku , Tim. Portraying the sadness and pain , well written.
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Tim Smith
Date: 3/30/2017 1:33:00 PM
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Thanks Heidi
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Jan Allison
Date: 3/30/2017 12:01:00 PM
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the imagery is so sad in all three lines - very descriptive haiku Tim:-) hugs Jan xx
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Tim Smith
Date: 3/30/2017 12:06:00 PM
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Thanks Jan...How's the footle judging going?
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Charmaine Chircop
Date: 3/30/2017 11:38:00 AM
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Great Haiku .Songbirds always return.
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Tim Smith
Date: 3/30/2017 12:05:00 PM
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Hopefully sooner than later...I do feed them daily ...You should see my neighbors yard it is flooded from all.the rain
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Chris Green
Date: 3/30/2017 11:24:00 AM
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This is a sad one Tim. Three lines, incredibly sad. It feels like more than just songbirds are drifting away.
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Tim Smith
Date: 3/30/2017 12:03:00 PM
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Could have been hope for the pain to drift away as I wrote this while at therapy.
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Darren White
Date: 3/30/2017 11:14:00 AM
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They be back soon. Wait and see. Love your haiku.
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Tim Smith
Date: 3/30/2017 12:07:00 PM
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Earliest chance I see is Sunday
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Darren White
Date: 3/30/2017 12:04:00 PM
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Then we wish for sun, for tomorrow.
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Tim Smith
Date: 3/30/2017 11:19:00 AM
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It's another rainy day here... Need sun to make me feel better

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