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Growing Old and Brittle

To wake up with the rising sun
Wishing me old bones stay in bed
No longer do I feel to run
Life is all but over and done

I look in the mirror feeling blue
Front teeth no more, leak like a canoe
Getting old, this is no fun
Spending my days inside, away from the sun

Ricky called, hey Arty lets go out
Sorry Ricky, I am too old for that
Ah come on Arty lets go to the park
Leave me alone Ricky I am staying right here in the dark

Ricky was persistent, come on arty the park the park the park
Art replied, I am old now I don’t do parks!
Why not? It’s a sunny day; we always have fun at the park
Cant, Stevie told me, I am too old to go out and play

Why he said I am too old for toys and my trucks
I am too old to play even with the ducks
I didn’t wanna be old but there you have it
Stevie says I am one big sissy with my toys!

Ricky, not to be deterred
Come on man, I love toys too 
Lets go the park, come on come on
You are only seven years old Arty!

I feel older Ricky and missing all these teeth
No one will want to play with me, no one at all
I do Arty! lets go, besides haven’t you heard the news?
Seven years old why that’s the new five!
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016


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Date: 4/2/2016 9:09:00 PM
Great fun write my friend. Old as dirt myself and damn glad to have made it this far. Each new day is a great gift--I pray every night for a few thousand more! a7 + A FAV...
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Date: 3/17/2016 7:02:00 PM
just came here to say hello. Let me check in your oldie poems and see if I missed anything. I will take a quick look and hope I find one new to read.
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 3/25/2016 8:16:00 PM
Thanks Andrea! :)
Date: 3/11/2016 2:52:00 PM
Just when I was feeling sorry for you....you devil!
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 3/25/2016 8:15:00 PM
LOL thanks!!!!!
Date: 3/9/2016 8:03:00 PM
LOL! This is great! Talk about perspective. I was wondering what the picture had to do with this as I was reading through ... "Mr. Serious" in a little frame. I remember thinking how LONG, just a 24-hour day felt ... now a year goes by far too quickly. Funny stuff there Arty ... you sure got a sense of humor on ya.
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Date: 3/9/2016 7:22:00 PM
Ha ha, this is fun. Well done my friend!
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 3/25/2016 8:15:00 PM
Thanks Richard! :)
Date: 3/9/2016 4:21:00 PM
Come on Art, let's go to the park, for a lark, maybe we'll find a spark of fresh energy! I'm not far off from joining the 7 year olds!! Enjoyed your delightfully pleasant poem:) // paul
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 3/25/2016 8:14:00 PM
Thanks Paul!!!
Date: 3/7/2016 7:43:00 PM
Thank you sweety! hugs :)
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 3/7/2016 7:43:00 PM
ops wrong window
Date: 3/7/2016 6:56:00 PM
Dear Arthur You'll always be young to me my friend, this is a funny arthur, but your just a kid in the hearts of all of us whom love your work, inspiration man, you have a great night tonight and do everything we wouldn't do lol love ya kiddo, cheri
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 3/7/2016 7:42:00 PM
Thank you sweety! hugs :)
Date: 3/7/2016 4:11:00 PM
hahaha, you are so funny, ARty. Just a young'un you are!!! Loved this.
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 3/7/2016 7:42:00 PM
As we all are! Thanks Andrea!
Date: 3/7/2016 3:52:00 PM
Come spend the day with my 6 year old. You'll feel 90....lol....great story
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 3/7/2016 7:39:00 PM
I might feel tired but never 90, kids is what keeps us all young at heart! :)
Date: 3/7/2016 3:02:00 PM
Very cute! Loved this, Arthur! Made me smile, big and wide :D
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 3/7/2016 7:38:00 PM
That was the goal, especially when one has all their teeth! :)
Date: 3/7/2016 11:07:00 AM
Clever write, my dear. :) Very clever....Something to cling on to as I age.... ;) Hugs
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 3/7/2016 7:38:00 PM
Are you aging? You sure fooled me beautiful!
Date: 3/7/2016 11:00:00 AM
Been there Arthur, and feeling the words, you describe so superbly.
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 3/7/2016 7:36:00 PM
Thank you Harry, I put a tooth under my pillow on the weekend, so far nothing!
Date: 3/7/2016 10:42:00 AM
youth is all in the mind, arthur... greeat word weaver you are!.. huggs
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 3/7/2016 7:36:00 PM
Thank you Nette! I do try! :)
Date: 3/7/2016 10:13:00 AM
Like. 70 is the new 50..Thats what I keep telling my in-laws ,but they tell me 'Wait until you get there' . : ). I do believe We change as time goes by..but I do believe that as We age we will find our childhood again..Yes ..find that 7yr old in us.. Love your concept Arthur : ).
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 3/7/2016 7:35:00 PM
Age is just a number, or so they say! :) Thanks , hugs!
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Charmaine Chircop
Date: 3/7/2016 10:18:00 AM
A fave Arty..five or seven ..or even 70..your poetry tugs at my heart...: )
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Charmaine Chircop
Date: 3/7/2016 10:17:00 AM
A fave Arty..five or seven ..or even 70..your poetry tugs at my heart...: )
Date: 3/7/2016 7:12:00 AM
haha, seven is the new five...nice. You are a fun storyteller, I enjoyed this.
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 3/7/2016 7:34:00 PM
Thanks Cas after all the serious and dark ones thought I come up with some light hearted ones!
Date: 3/7/2016 6:10:00 AM
Arthur, this write was delightful, and sad at the same time, I work with the frail elderly and some have alzeimers and they often think they are young, if you ask them how old they are they say things like 16 or even younger, that is where their mind is dwelling, and that is okay, we do not push that, we just go there with them... wonderful, 7
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 3/7/2016 7:34:00 PM
Thank you Broken Wings, it must be difficult to care for them day in and day out like that, you have a very kind heart! Hugs
Date: 3/6/2016 11:37:00 PM
Made me smile but made me sad- getting old is no fun - mum lost teeth last week and I'm walking with a stick at the moment because of my back issue - she's more sprightly than me ... but I still have my own teeth lol:-(
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Jan Allison
Date: 3/7/2016 4:32:00 PM
my hubby remains at 10 and he is doing far better than me lol - got some great pics of me on the kiddies playground taken a few years back lol:-) hugs Jan xx
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 3/6/2016 11:54:00 PM
and if you think is bad now, wait till you reach 10 !!!!!
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 3/6/2016 11:45:00 PM
ah cone on come on, lets go to the park!!!!
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