Grimms Fairy Tale Retold

GRIMM’S FAIRY TALE RETOLD

In a beautiful huge green forest,
Lived 3 honest people, Hansel and Gretal
And their father,
And two wicked women, the witch,
And a wife who was also a step-mother.
The honest three were approached by the FBI,
And told to keep a very close eye,
On these two wicked women,
Who one would hardly call human!
Their father tired about his wife
Nagging about his wonderful children,
All of their married life,
Planned a plot together with his two loves’s
Who were innocent, like 2 white doves
To catch out this horrid woman,
Who was hardly human.
The FBI, said their father, will protect
Us with drones, from above.
And we also have God,
Who is akin to having a squad
Of eternal soldiers
Our beholders!
So off Hansel and Gretal were
Taken into the forest, at the 
Stepmothers request, and at their Dad’s
Request, took pebbles and dropped 
On the track,
So that they could find their way back!
Not successful, the stepmother persuaded
Her husband to take them into the
Forest again, the father was frustrated.
His wife said they didn’t have bread to eat,
How and why should the children get,
Let’s cheat 
The wife said, take them to 
The woods to get lost
No matter the cost!
Overhearing her, Hansel took bread and let fall
Crumbs on the track, but birds ate them all!
Lost and afraid they didn’t know what to do,
But they heard a drone overhead,
And knew they wouldn’t land up dead.
They found the witches house, made
Of cookies and sweets,
Immediately the wicked old witch,
Came out and invited them in
This was her ploy all along, her unforgivable sin,
For which she would die,
And this was certainly nigh!
Unbeknown to the children, the FBI surrounded
The house and camped there for as long 
As it took,
They had this witch now, and observed every
Move, and on a computer screen,
Were so looking forward to capturing
This criminal, this crook!
The witch wanted to eat Hansel first,
And tried feeding him to become fat,
But Hansel too clever, stuck out a chicken bone,
From the cage in which he was kept
You’re too thin but I will eat you now,
Gretal, who was responsible for home chores,
Lit the oven, she had an idea how to say ciao
To this wicked witch, who bent down
To check the oven,
At which point, Gretal pushed her in and slammed
The oven door shut,
How many children had died in that oven
One, two, five or ten dozen?
She ran to Hansel and let him out,
As soon as they opened the door, soldiers
Were round and about,
They declared the old hag was dead,
No need to check,
But could the soldiers 
Please take them home instead!
Hansel and Gretal were re-united with 
Their father,
The stepmother,
Had died, no further mention was made of her.
Look Dad said the children, we found
All these stolen jewels in the witch’s chest
We can now buy a better house,
And eat like kings, not only a little
Like a mouse!

Copyright © | Year Posted 2019



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Date: 5/8/2019 2:16:00 PM
Better even than 'Fractured Fairy Tales' back in the day on 'Rocky and His Friends!' Kudos. ~ gw
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Date: 5/9/2019 1:51:00 PM
Thanks Gershon - that is a wonderful comment - I highly appreciate it - enjoy re-writing old fairy tales with a few twists on the way. Hugs, Jennifer.
Date: 5/4/2019 11:24:00 AM
Wonderfully creative tale that held its delightful rhyme and my attention throughout. Clarity and imagination both soared a rhyme worthy of reading more than one time. Children's books - you have that in you, I feel sure! I enjoyed this immensely! Poetry hugs ... CayCay
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Jennifer Proxenos
Date: 5/4/2019 11:54:00 AM
CayCay I've missed you! Thank you for a delightful comment - i have been told by many soupers, we'll see, maybe I should but it would mean I would have to choose either poetry soup or writing children's stories, and right now I love being where I am with all my new and dear friends. Hope you are keeping well, Hugs and Blessings, Jenny.
Date: 5/4/2019 3:36:00 AM
I was waiting for something horrible to happen to Hansel and Gretel, as this was a re-write. Thank you for not doing what I might have done, which would have turned this so DARK! Thank you Jennifer. Thank you! Loved it!
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Jennifer Proxenos
Date: 5/4/2019 11:57:00 AM
Hi Caren - I LOVE your dark poems but I had to more or less keep to the original tale, just with a few twists. Thanks you for a great comment, Blessings, Jennifer.
Date: 5/3/2019 8:45:00 AM
Hi Jennifer, You retold the Grimms Brothers classic very well. It was more modern and up to date. I enjoyed your version of " Hansel and Gretal. Well done my friend:-) Alexis
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Jennifer Proxenos
Date: 5/4/2019 11:39:00 AM
Thank-you Alexis, I love doing this to fairy tales - The Grimm brothers would probably turn in their graves! A lovely comment thanks Alexis, Hugs, Jenny.
Date: 5/3/2019 12:51:00 AM
Wow. The creative juices were flowing on this one. Well done. I loved it. Have a great day.
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Jennifer Proxenos
Date: 5/3/2019 2:33:00 AM
Hi David, I love taking an old story and trimming it a bit - so glad you liked it and thank you for an awesome comment! Hugs, Jennifer.
Date: 5/2/2019 9:54:00 AM
Hang on!... let me get some more popcorn lol...great take Jenn...happy endings...^WW^...{*J*}
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Jennifer Proxenos
Date: 5/2/2019 10:59:00 AM
LOL - I love your comment ^WW^ - love popcorn also, thought I would try to liven the story up a bit! Hugs, Jenn.
Date: 5/2/2019 3:16:00 AM
- I love your story, you are amazing dear soul sister :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Jennifer Proxenos
Date: 5/2/2019 7:32:00 AM
Thank-you Sunshine Smile my dear friend, that is very sweet of you to say. Hugs, Jennifer
Date: 5/1/2019 6:28:00 PM
Quite the twist. Was the step mother named Hillary? An enjoyable fun story.
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Date: 5/2/2019 1:44:00 AM
As we don't know, might be a good idea to call her that! Thank you for your comment and visit - I find fairy tales fascinating , but feel they need a modern day adaptation. Hugs, Jennifer.
Date: 5/1/2019 3:48:00 PM
ohh jen, this is a better version than the original... so fantastic is the way you weave a story... loved it!...huggs
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Date: 5/2/2019 1:47:00 AM
Thank-you Nette - you always say the kindest things. I enjoy re-adapting old fairy tales or true tales. Hugs and blessings, Jen.
Date: 5/1/2019 3:31:00 PM
You are such a good storyteller, Jennifer, love your view of Hansel and Gretel story. Thank you so very much for your wonderful compliment on my "Lion" poem. Hugs Eve
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Jennifer Proxenos
Date: 5/2/2019 1:56:00 AM
Hi Eve thank you for a lovely comment and my readaptation of Hansel and Gretal. Your lion poem was awesome - don't know if you have read my poem 'Will His Majesty become extinct' - you might enjoy it. Hugs, Jennifer.
Date: 5/1/2019 1:53:00 PM
Your creative spirit is flowing Jennifer..kudos for your imagination.
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Jennifer Proxenos
Date: 5/1/2019 2:23:00 PM
Thank-you Vijay - that is an awesome comment - I felt this fairy tale ought to be seen through a 21st century perspective! Hugs, Jennifer.
Date: 5/1/2019 10:05:00 AM
I prefer your version Jennifer, you're a good story teller. Tom.
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Date: 5/1/2019 10:43:00 AM
Hi Tom, Me and my stories - perhaps I should sign off my poems as "Story Teller" Thank-you for your support - it means a lot! Hugs, Jennifer.
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