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From this aqueous orb flows joy, sorrow, and all recall. Sunshine makes the lid close, and long lashes fall Darkness makes .the small pupils grow Sadness and laughter can make tears flow A lie can not be hidden by the darkest eye. Love abides in a colored hue of a true sigh. Delight of consciousness arise within the purple iris of a lovers surmise. Buddha’s all seeing eye watches over all large and small From theses aqueous orbs flows joy, sorrow, and all recall. *Testing Concrete verse using both positive and negative space. *Rhyme in a concrete form.

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Caryl Muzzey

Date: 10/14/2009 3:00:00 PM

Excellent writing and an excellent job with the concrete style. Very creative indeed. LOL Caryl

Elaine George

Date: 10/13/2009 1:14:00 PM

Awesome, Deb. Re: Umberella : I am deleting it. It looked exactly like an umberella when I posted it, but when I go back and view it, it is scattered all over the place. I triws clicking the centre tab, but it doesn't seem to work. I don't want to post it unless it is shaped properly. bfn. Love, Lainie

Heather Andersen

Date: 10/12/2009 1:37:00 PM

Wonderful poem. It is a good visual that as I read each line the whole poem forms the shape of an eye... Very creative :)

Yoni Dvorkis

Date: 10/12/2009 6:16:00 AM

Awesome. Really gives a creepy image that the poem is watching me as I read it:) Aqueous orbs is an awesome phrase. I have no idea what it means and am too lazy this morning to look it up. I get it though, the all knowing eye sees through every soul directly to the heart of creation that lies in all of us. apologies for my innattention wise one, been a bit busy with wedding plans lately. love you -birthday boy.

Douglas Ace

Date: 10/12/2009 4:17:00 AM

Such varied description about an indispensable part of us. Very engaging and nicely done.

Robin L. Gass

Date: 10/11/2009 8:41:00 PM

This is wonderful, Deb! Your words and use of space are picture perfect. A beautiful test pattern in my eyes! Love ya GF!

Iolanda Scripca

Date: 10/11/2009 3:39:00 PM

Beautiful and interesting concrete, Deborah. Blink, blink :) Thank you for your comment on my "Brancusi" Love, Iolanda

Doris Culverhouse

Date: 10/10/2009 6:53:00 PM

great one!! thanks for your comments on my works.

Carrie Richards

Date: 10/10/2009 4:12:00 PM

Great job, Deborah!! A wonderful example... now...if only we can create and master this technique !! :)

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 10/10/2009 1:51:00 PM

Excellent concrete poetry, Deborah. Love the way you describe the way joy and sorrow flow from the "aqueous orbs." And thank you for taking the time to show some support for Rhonda. This is such a tight community here; I hope many others will send prayers and positive thoughts her way. Love and blessings, Carolyn

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen

Date: 10/10/2009 8:19:00 AM

Nice Job, Deborah. I've been thinking, but nothing great, yet. I hope I come up with something new to enter. Thanks for your comments. It's always nice to see you on the soup. Love, Dane (Soup mail soon.)

Michael White

Date: 10/9/2009 5:24:00 PM

This is wonderful I would love to do one of these. I read the comment you left about me polishing up a little. I am rarely here but thank you and no I never mind any help that would help me better my self.

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 10/9/2009 4:43:00 PM

Your eyes have it for sure,the imagination to create anything you want,,i love each verse sadness and laughter can make tears flow so true..a gem going to my favs.. and Deb im catholic but how i love the Buddhas, i have a collection of twenty little ones.. so very sweet --A GEM.a fav..Charma

Gert W. Knop

Date: 10/9/2009 3:23:00 PM

You've got the "Third Eye", Deborah! Godd space-work here. And thanks for your comments...Love, Gert

Tim Ryerson

Date: 10/9/2009 2:56:00 PM

Debeee...very niceee... good flowww....now I gonna' go study concreeet... when is your conteeeest... Blessings as always my good friend - Tim

Sara Kendrick

Date: 10/9/2009 2:45:00 PM

Interesting form and write. Keep writing. Sara