Debbie Guzzi Poet Concrete

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Greater Consciousness

From this aqueous orb   flows   joy, sorrow, and all recall.
Sunshine makes the lid              close, and long lashes fall
Darkness makes                                     .the small pupils grow
Sadness and                laughter                 can make tears flow 
A lie can                  not be hidden               by the darkest eye.
Love abides              in a colored            hue of a true sigh.
Delight of                                             consciousness arise
within the purple                               iris of a lovers surmise.
Buddha’s all seeing eye watches over all large and small 
From theses aqueous orbs flows joy, sorrow, and all recall.



*Testing Concrete verse using both positive and negative space.
*Rhyme in a concrete form.

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Caryl Muzzey October 14, 2009 at 3:00 PM Excellent writing and an excellent job with the concrete style. Very creative indeed. LOL Caryl

Elaine George October 13, 2009 at 1:14 PM Awesome, Deb. Re: Umberella : I am deleting it. It looked exactly like an umberella when I posted it, but when I go back and view it, it is scattered all over the place. I triws clicking the centre tab, but it doesn't seem to work. I don't want to post it unless it is shaped properly. bfn. Love, Lainie

Heather Andersen October 12, 2009 at 1:37 PM Wonderful poem. It is a good visual that as I read each line the whole poem forms the shape of an eye... Very creative :)

Yoni Dvorkis October 12, 2009 at 6:16 AM Awesome. Really gives a creepy image that the poem is watching me as I read it:) Aqueous orbs is an awesome phrase. I have no idea what it means and am too lazy this morning to look it up. I get it though, the all knowing eye sees through every soul directly to the heart of creation that lies in all of us. apologies for my innattention wise one, been a bit busy with wedding plans lately. love you -birthday boy.

Douglas Ace October 12, 2009 at 4:17 AM Such varied description about an indispensable part of us. Very engaging and nicely done.

Robin L. Gass October 11, 2009 at 8:41 PM This is wonderful, Deb! Your words and use of space are picture perfect. A beautiful test pattern in my eyes! Love ya GF!

Iolanda Scripca October 11, 2009 at 3:39 PM Beautiful and interesting concrete, Deborah. Blink, blink :) Thank you for your comment on my "Brancusi" Love, Iolanda

Doris Culverhouse October 10, 2009 at 6:53 PM great one!! thanks for your comments on my works.

Carrie Richards October 10, 2009 at 4:12 PM Great job, Deborah!! A wonderful example... now...if only we can create and master this technique !! :)

Carolyn Devonshire October 10, 2009 at 1:51 PM Excellent concrete poetry, Deborah. Love the way you describe the way joy and sorrow flow from the "aqueous orbs." And thank you for taking the time to show some support for Rhonda. This is such a tight community here; I hope many others will send prayers and positive thoughts her way. Love and blessings, Carolyn

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen October 10, 2009 at 8:19 AM Nice Job, Deborah. I've been thinking, but nothing great, yet. I hope I come up with something new to enter. Thanks for your comments. It's always nice to see you on the soup. Love, Dane (Soup mail soon.)

Michael White October 9, 2009 at 5:24 PM This is wonderful I would love to do one of these. I read the comment you left about me polishing up a little. I am rarely here but thank you and no I never mind any help that would help me better my self.

Charmaine Chircop October 9, 2009 at 4:43 PM Your eyes have it for sure,the imagination to create anything you want,,i love each verse sadness and laughter can make tears flow so true..a gem going to my favs.. and Deb im catholic but how i love the Buddhas, i have a collection of twenty little ones.. so very sweet --A GEM.a fav..Charma

Gert W. Knop October 9, 2009 at 3:23 PM You've got the "Third Eye", Deborah! Godd space-work here. And thanks for your comments...Love, Gert

Tim Ryerson October 9, 2009 at 2:56 PM Debeee...very niceee... good flowww....now I gonna' go study concreeet... when is your conteeeest... Blessings as always my good friend - Tim

Sara Kendrick October 9, 2009 at 2:45 PM Interesting form and write. Keep writing. Sara