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On tiny wheels it rolled on rails. It shook the boards and loosed the nails of shed-on-platform near the green, and from a hillock could be seen and heard by all, for measures round the square. I saw it go--and so it went with clash and clatter as it bent and heaved and chugged as light shone through. Small creatures ran; the sparrows flew; the leaves all quaked and settled on the grass. It all went up with crack and roar. This brand new toy, my ga'rage door went up as dark-at-dawn fed 'way. My better mood, a brighter day-- and so it went with "click" and flick of wrist. [For a March 3rd Brian Strand Contest] Won a First Place in this contest, 2021

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Date: 3/3/2021 8:26:00 AM
Carol, congratulations on your win in Brian's contest with your wonderfully penned Rhyme poem, well done _Constance
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Carol Louise Moon
Date: 3/3/2021 3:22:00 PM
Thank you, Constance. I'm glad you liked my poem. God bless you.
Date: 3/3/2021 3:21:00 AM
Congratulations on the win. I really like the rhyme scheme and the story that had me guessing. I actually thought you were talking about a train set at the beginning of the poem..but then I would..I've never grown up :) Cheers - Gary
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Carol Louise Moon
Date: 3/3/2021 3:22:00 PM
Thank you, Gary. I'm glad you liked my poem. God bless you.
Date: 3/2/2021 5:39:00 AM
I love this! Cacophonous and visual and at last we find out what was responsible! Well done, Carol Louise!
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Carol Louise Moon
Date: 3/2/2021 6:38:00 AM
Thanks, Kim, and God bless you.

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