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Goodbye Daddy

An unseasonably warm November day In my yard the unsuspecting kids play Left in my loving care with words unsaid Unaware of the tears they would shed Future's written, words are hurled Only eight but a girl of the world Hair of gold, no worries, no cares Not ready for what life would bear Where's daddy?, He didn't say goodnight It's not like him, it doesn't seem right Something's wrong, I need him now Take me to him, take me right now My tears did fall that very night My brother walked into the light Taken too soon, no chance to fight A child's nightmare, an uncles fright Fourteen years and the tears still fall His life was perfect, he had it all A wife, two kids, God his right hand man Succumbing to the fate of His master plan My heart still bleeds for my sweet little niece Goodbye my daddy, may you rest in peace

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 5/7/2015 3:47:00 PM
Such a sad happening! Tim, chose whether to write from YOUR point of view or your neices. If you do not want to punctuate for a reason Tim? then you should not capitalize. If you wish to capital you should only do it for the beginning of a sentence BUT at least DO use periods IF you capitalize. You are rhyming (end rhyme) using quatraines SO evening out the syllable count would improve the rthyme.
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Date: 5/7/2015 4:08:00 PM
Thanks Debbie...I will have time to work on it this weekend....I will let you know when I make changes...Tim
Date: 11/21/2014 11:35:00 PM
Tim you make it very hard for me to defend the notion that men dont cry. I will have a drink and pretend I spilled some, before asking a tissue! This is very very beautiful.
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Date: 11/21/2014 5:47:00 PM
No words...just sending huggs
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Date: 11/21/2014 12:39:00 PM
So beautiful....touching...and sad. At 8 years it must have been such a terrible tragedy for his daughter. It was terrible for you too, Tim. Memories like these never fade. // paul
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Date: 11/20/2014 10:39:00 AM
My heart aches and melts. So powerful poem. God bless you and give you much strength to endure. Hugs Tim!...RAJAT
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Date: 11/20/2014 7:38:00 AM
A sweet and tender but very sad remembrance, Tim!
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Date: 11/19/2014 9:22:00 PM
A brave write Tim. I am speechless here. love you.
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Date: 11/19/2014 1:57:00 PM
Very heartbreaking. :(
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Date: 11/19/2014 8:04:00 AM
This touched me deeply, Tim. How difficult that must have been for you to lose someone so dear and to see the pain on the faces of those who loved him. There is a better day coming....we believe and hold on. Hugs
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Date: 11/19/2014 11:52:00 AM
Thanks Eileen... I do believe there is a better day ahead as well..I can not stop welling up each time I read this...I must be crazy but I always reread my poem before responding to a comment... I like to be in the mind frame of when I wrote it....hugs Tim
Date: 11/18/2014 9:02:00 PM
Your words captured the spirit and the moment -- it touched my heart -- I call these heart-poems -- nothing to add. light and love my friend.
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Date: 11/18/2014 10:33:00 PM
Thank you David my friend.
Date: 11/18/2014 7:05:00 PM
simply heartbreaking Tim -a parent dying must be so so hard for a child to come to terms with let alone for an adult:-( Hugs Jan xxx mum lost her mum she was 8 or 9 she has never got over it and still talks about 'mummy'
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Tim Smith
Date: 11/18/2014 7:11:00 PM
Thanks Jan...I know you are feeling some of the same things in your life...hugs Tim
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Charmaine Chircop
Date: 11/18/2014 7:08:00 PM
Tim,We all shall meet again in a better time ,in a better place ,in a better world.Till then He will protect you and his family,He is your guardian angel.The soul never dies Tim..He must be closer than you think. Xx
Date: 11/18/2014 7:05:00 PM
Tim, one of my favorites of your poems. Well done.
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Date: 11/18/2014 7:09:00 PM
Thank you Faye...It was a heartbreaking experience..hugs Tim
Date: 11/18/2014 6:58:00 PM
Heart-breaking!!This poem made me feel, Coach.Its so hard to say goodbye,but its even worse to see tears in the innocent eyes of a child.Those so dear We never forget,and those still here,God will protect.You touch me in so many ways Tim ..Hugs
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Tim Smith
Date: 11/18/2014 7:12:00 PM
Thanks sweetie :.)
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Charmaine Chircop
Date: 11/18/2014 7:11:00 PM
Sorry..My reply to your reply went in Jan's reply (box ) ..Smile :.)
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Tim Smith
Date: 11/18/2014 7:03:00 PM
Thank you my dear Charma...I was brought to tears looking at their picture today...hugs Tim

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