Goodbye Daddy

An unseasonably warm November day
In my yard the unsuspecting kids play
Left in my loving care with words unsaid
Unaware of the tears they would shed

Future's written, words are hurled
Only eight but a girl of the world
Hair of gold, no worries, no cares
Not ready for what life would bear

Where's daddy?, He didn't say goodnight
It's not like him, it doesn't seem right
Something's wrong, I need him now
Take me to him, take me right now

My tears did fall that very night
My brother walked into the light
Taken too soon, no chance to fight
A child's nightmare, an uncles fright

Fourteen years and the tears still fall
His life was perfect, he had it all
A wife, two kids, God his right hand man
Succumbing to the fate of His master plan

My heart still bleeds for my sweet little niece
Goodbye my daddy, may you rest in peace
Copyright © | Year Posted 2014

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Guzzi Avatar
May 7, 2015 at 3:47 PM
Such a sad happening! Tim, chose whether to write from YOUR point of view or your neices. If you do not want to punctuate for a reason Tim? then you should not capitalize. If you wish to capital you should only do it for the beginning of a sentence BUT at least DO use periods IF you capitalize. You are rhyming (end rhyme) using quatraines SO evening out the syllable count would improve the rthyme.
Smith Avatar
May 7, 2015 at 4:08 PM
Thanks Debbie...I will have time to work on it this weekend....I will let you know when I make changes...Tim
Vaso Avatar
November 21, 2014 at 11:35 PM
Tim you make it very hard for me to defend the notion that men dont cry. I will have a drink and pretend I spilled some, before asking a tissue! This is very very beautiful.
Jones Avatar
November 21, 2014 at 5:47 PM
No words...just sending huggs
Callus Avatar
November 21, 2014 at 12:39 PM
So beautiful....touching...and sad. At 8 years it must have been such a terrible tragedy for his daughter. It was terrible for you too, Tim. Memories like these never fade. // paul
Chakrabarty Avatar
November 20, 2014 at 10:39 AM
My heart aches and melts. So powerful poem. God bless you and give you much strength to endure. Hugs Tim!...RAJAT
Ellison Avatar
November 20, 2014 at 7:38 AM
A sweet and tender but very sad remembrance, Tim!
Yvonne Avatar
November 19, 2014 at 9:22 PM
A brave write Tim. I am speechless here. love you.
Nance Avatar
November 19, 2014 at 1:57 PM
Very heartbreaking. :(
Manassian Avatar
November 19, 2014 at 8:04 AM
This touched me deeply, Tim. How difficult that must have been for you to lose someone so dear and to see the pain on the faces of those who loved him. There is a better day coming....we believe and hold on. Hugs
Smith Avatar
November 19, 2014 at 11:52 AM
Thanks Eileen... I do believe there is a better day ahead as well..I can not stop welling up each time I read this...I must be crazy but I always reread my poem before responding to a comment... I like to be in the mind frame of when I wrote it....hugs Tim
Meade Avatar
November 18, 2014 at 9:02 PM
Your words captured the spirit and the moment -- it touched my heart -- I call these heart-poems -- nothing to add. light and love my friend.
Smith Avatar
November 18, 2014 at 10:33 PM
Thank you David my friend.
Gibson Avatar
November 18, 2014 at 7:05 PM
Tim, one of my favorites of your poems. Well done.
Smith Avatar
November 18, 2014 at 7:09 PM
Thank you Faye...It was a heartbreaking experience..hugs Tim
Allison Avatar
November 18, 2014 at 7:05 PM
simply heartbreaking Tim -a parent dying must be so so hard for a child to come to terms with let alone for an adult:-( Hugs Jan xxx mum lost her mum she was 8 or 9 she has never got over it and still talks about 'mummy'
Smith Avatar
November 18, 2014 at 7:11 PM
Thanks Jan...I know you are feeling some of the same things in your life...hugs Tim
Chircop Avatar
November 18, 2014 at 7:08 PM
Tim,We all shall meet again in a better time ,in a better place ,in a better world.Till then He will protect you and his family,He is your guardian angel.The soul never dies Tim..He must be closer than you think. Xx
Chircop Avatar
November 18, 2014 at 6:58 PM
Heart-breaking!!This poem made me feel, Coach.Its so hard to say goodbye,but its even worse to see tears in the innocent eyes of a child.Those so dear We never forget,and those still here,God will protect.You touch me in so many ways Tim ..Hugs
Smith Avatar
November 18, 2014 at 7:12 PM
Thanks sweetie :.)
Chircop Avatar
November 18, 2014 at 7:11 PM
Sorry..My reply to your reply went in Jan's reply (box ) ..Smile :.)
Smith Avatar
November 18, 2014 at 7:03 PM
Thank you my dear Charma...I was brought to tears looking at their picture today...hugs Tim
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