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Your hat hangs limp and still with your loss
faded and stained, every thread, precious 
my tears blur with silhouettes of you, dad
your distinctive scent, I touch your well worn brim
the hallway darkens with an approaching storm
pounding raindrops pummel my grieving heart. 







Written on 2/20/2019

Copyright © | Year Posted 2019




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Date: 6/10/2019 9:31:00 AM
Great story. I can see him sitting there. Kind wishes and memories, Kai
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Laura Leiser
Date: 6/10/2019 11:25:00 AM
Thank you, Kai. It was a hard loss last year...how I miss my dad so..
Date: 3/13/2019 1:34:00 PM
Congratulations on your gold metal, Laura.. An emotional and beautiful free verse.. Your Dad 's love for you is eternal.. As he is always with you.. Blessings to you!
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Laura Leiser
Date: 3/13/2019 2:27:00 PM
Thanks so much for your kind comments, Robertina..I truly appreciate them :)
Date: 3/7/2019 3:54:00 AM
An emotional verse, feeling your sadness. And seeing the well worn brim. Take strength from that well loved hat. A blue fishing hat, that I had bought, hung for years after my dad was gone. It was the blue of his eyes. Your dad is with you always, and as close as your next thought of him.
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Laura Leiser
Date: 3/7/2019 10:46:00 AM
Thank you for your kind comments, Sandra...it was a hard loss..
Date: 3/4/2019 6:35:00 PM
Hello Laura, your dad will always be in your heart,He will guard you through life protecting you from above.
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Laura Leiser
Date: 3/4/2019 7:08:00 PM
Thank you, Darlene..you are so kind! :)
Date: 2/25/2019 6:46:00 PM
Congrats on your gold medal win with this gem, Laura.
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Laura Leiser
Date: 2/25/2019 8:32:00 PM
Thank you, Line! It was a real shock to get top spot...! :)
Date: 2/24/2019 1:13:00 AM
You have just penned a wonderful piece! I especially identify with the line about the hat. I used to, on occasion, wear my grandpa's old Stetson cowboy hat, with great pride, as a way to honor him, after he died. Such a wonderful use of all the external things and factors, reflecting what you are feeling. Very Moving, too! Congratulations on your very much deserved first place win!
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Laura Leiser
Date: 2/24/2019 8:44:00 AM
Thank you, Andrew! Dad’s hat was truly a part of who he was. We will definitely keep it. Glad you could wear your Grampa’s hat..how wonderful. :)
Date: 2/23/2019 9:02:00 PM
Congratulations, Laura!
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Laura Leiser
Date: 2/23/2019 10:53:00 PM
Thank you, Jack! :)
Date: 2/23/2019 7:32:00 PM
The poignant beauty of the intimate portrait of you and your Dad, expressed through your exquisite emotions, moves me deeply, Laura. Your love and your grief for him is tenderly felt. This gem will live in my heart and is a big fav! I'm so sorry for your loss. Congratulations on your well deserved trophy win, my friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Laura Leiser
Date: 2/23/2019 10:53:00 PM
Thank you so much for your warm words of encouragement and condolences, Susan! I am honored that you enjoy this poem so much! :)
Date: 2/23/2019 11:41:00 AM
sorry for your loss. Mine is hanging by a thread right now in a hospital far from my state. We were never close but I feel a bit guilty not able to see him.
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Laura Leiser
Date: 2/23/2019 3:08:00 PM
I’m sorry to hear about your dad, as well, Andrea. I hope you can see him soon...
Date: 2/23/2019 11:28:00 AM
Congratulations on your win! I just lost my father recently, and this really resonated all the love and warmth and sadness that I feel. Great poem!
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Laura Leiser
Date: 2/23/2019 12:32:00 PM
Thanks for commenting, Sherilynn, and I’m sorry for your loss, as well...
Date: 2/23/2019 11:04:00 AM
Hi Laura, thank you for your kind comments. I like your poem too. It speaks from the heart. That emotion is so real. Hang on to that hat. You may find it gives you more than just words. x
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Laura Leiser
Date: 2/23/2019 11:09:00 AM
Thank you, Peter..good advice! I appreciate your kind comments. :)
Date: 2/23/2019 9:48:00 AM
What an awesome trophy win, Laura. Congratulations. I liked your focus on mainly one prop and how it related so well to your dear dad.
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Laura Leiser
Date: 2/23/2019 10:52:00 AM
Thank you, Andrea. I'm glad the emotions came through well on this poem...I truly miss dad..
Date: 2/23/2019 9:35:00 AM
I too lost my Dad some months ago and your poem speaks eloquently of that loss. Congratulations on your trophy honors <3
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Laura Leiser
Date: 2/23/2019 10:52:00 AM
Thank you, P.S. My condolences on the loss of your dad, as well. I appreciate your kind comments.. :)
Date: 2/23/2019 9:13:00 AM
Hi Laura, I can really relate to this touching write. I lost my dad 12 years. It's not a day that goes by that I don't miss him. You caputured the emotions of grief and missing a loved one very well. Congratulations on your 1st place win. It was well deserved:-) Alexis
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Laura Leiser
Date: 2/23/2019 10:50:00 AM
Thank you, Alexis...I know we never truly get over the loss of a loved one. Sorry for your loss, as well.
Date: 2/23/2019 9:10:00 AM
CONGRATULATIONS on your well-deserved win, Laura! Janice
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Laura Leiser
Date: 2/23/2019 9:15:00 AM
Thanks so much, Janice! I’m thrilled with the results, of course!
Date: 2/21/2019 12:34:00 PM
such angst expressed in a most languid way...your beautiful figures of speech touch me, laura... my condolences and huggs
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Laura Leiser
Date: 2/21/2019 1:50:00 PM
Thanks, Nette..it’s such. hard loos for me...
Date: 2/21/2019 12:51:00 AM
Ah, this is poignant and truly heartfelt. It sounds like your father is recently gone. You have prayers from Kansas, Laura.
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Laura Leiser
Date: 2/21/2019 1:12:00 AM
Yes, he died last year... the grief is still palpable. Thanks for your comments, Caren