Gone

Your hat hangs limp and still with your loss faded and stained, every thread, precious my tears blur with silhouettes of you, dad your distinctive scent, I touch your well worn brim the hallway darkens with an approaching storm pounding raindrops pummel my grieving heart. Written on 2/20/2019

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Donna Fullerton

Date: 3/7/2022 7:39:00 PM

I really enjoyed your poem. It certainly reminded me of my feelings of loss. Nice.

Laura Leiser
Date: 3/7/2022 8:03:00 PM

Thank you, Donna. Miss my dad every single day!

Laura Leiser
Date: 3/7/2022 8:01:00 PM

Thank you, Donna. Miss my dad every single day!

Kai Michael Neumann

Date: 6/10/2019 9:31:00 AM

Great story. I can see him sitting there. Kind wishes and memories, Kai

Laura Leiser
Date: 6/10/2019 11:25:00 AM

Thank you, Kai. It was a hard loss last year...how I miss my dad so..

Robertina B.

Date: 3/13/2019 1:34:00 PM

Congratulations on your gold metal, Laura.. An emotional and beautiful free verse.. Your Dad 's love for you is eternal.. As he is always with you.. Blessings to you!

Laura Leiser
Date: 3/13/2019 2:27:00 PM

Thanks so much for your kind comments, Robertina..I truly appreciate them :)

Sandra L. Weiss

Date: 3/7/2019 3:54:00 AM

An emotional verse, feeling your sadness. And seeing the well worn brim. Take strength from that well loved hat. A blue fishing hat, that I had bought, hung for years after my dad was gone. It was the blue of his eyes. Your dad is with you always, and as close as your next thought of him.

Laura Leiser
Date: 3/7/2019 10:46:00 AM

Thank you for your kind comments, Sandra...it was a hard loss..

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 3/4/2019 6:35:00 PM

Hello Laura, your dad will always be in your heart,He will guard you through life protecting you from above.

Laura Leiser
Date: 3/4/2019 7:08:00 PM

Thank you, Darlene..you are so kind! :)

Line Gauthier

Date: 2/25/2019 6:46:00 PM

Congrats on your gold medal win with this gem, Laura.

Laura Leiser
Date: 2/25/2019 8:32:00 PM

Thank you, Line! It was a real shock to get top spot...! :)

Andrew Fairchild

Date: 2/24/2019 1:13:00 AM

You have just penned a wonderful piece! I especially identify with the line about the hat. I used to, on occasion, wear my grandpa's old Stetson cowboy hat, with great pride, as a way to honor him, after he died. Such a wonderful use of all the external things and factors, reflecting what you are feeling. Very Moving, too! Congratulations on your very much deserved first place win!

Laura Leiser
Date: 2/24/2019 8:44:00 AM

Thank you, Andrew! Dad’s hat was truly a part of who he was. We will definitely keep it. Glad you could wear your Grampa’s hat..how wonderful. :)

Jack Webster

Date: 2/23/2019 9:02:00 PM

Congratulations, Laura!

Laura Leiser
Date: 2/23/2019 10:53:00 PM

Thank you, Jack! :)

Susan Ashley

Date: 2/23/2019 7:32:00 PM

The poignant beauty of the intimate portrait of you and your Dad, expressed through your exquisite emotions, moves me deeply, Laura. Your love and your grief for him is tenderly felt. This gem will live in my heart and is a big fav! I'm so sorry for your loss. Congratulations on your well deserved trophy win, my friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Laura Leiser
Date: 2/23/2019 10:53:00 PM

Thank you so much for your warm words of encouragement and condolences, Susan! I am honored that you enjoy this poem so much! :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/23/2019 11:41:00 AM

sorry for your loss. Mine is hanging by a thread right now in a hospital far from my state. We were never close but I feel a bit guilty not able to see him.

Laura Leiser
Date: 2/23/2019 3:08:00 PM

I’m sorry to hear about your dad, as well, Andrea. I hope you can see him soon...

Sherilynn Kucharek

Date: 2/23/2019 11:28:00 AM

Congratulations on your win! I just lost my father recently, and this really resonated all the love and warmth and sadness that I feel. Great poem!

Laura Leiser
Date: 2/23/2019 12:32:00 PM

Thanks for commenting, Sherilynn, and I’m sorry for your loss, as well...

Peter Hackwell

Date: 2/23/2019 11:04:00 AM

Hi Laura, thank you for your kind comments. I like your poem too. It speaks from the heart. That emotion is so real. Hang on to that hat. You may find it gives you more than just words. x

Laura Leiser
Date: 2/23/2019 11:09:00 AM

Thank you, Peter..good advice! I appreciate your kind comments. :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/23/2019 9:48:00 AM

What an awesome trophy win, Laura. Congratulations. I liked your focus on mainly one prop and how it related so well to your dear dad.

Laura Leiser
Date: 2/23/2019 10:52:00 AM

Thank you, Andrea. I'm glad the emotions came through well on this poem...I truly miss dad..

P.S. Awtry

Date: 2/23/2019 9:35:00 AM

I too lost my Dad some months ago and your poem speaks eloquently of that loss. Congratulations on your trophy honors <3

Laura Leiser
Date: 2/23/2019 10:52:00 AM

Thank you, P.S. My condolences on the loss of your dad, as well. I appreciate your kind comments.. :)

Alexis Y.

Date: 2/23/2019 9:13:00 AM

Hi Laura, I can really relate to this touching write. I lost my dad 12 years. It's not a day that goes by that I don't miss him. You caputured the emotions of grief and missing a loved one very well. Congratulations on your 1st place win. It was well deserved:-) Alexis

Laura Leiser
Date: 2/23/2019 10:50:00 AM

Thank you, Alexis...I know we never truly get over the loss of a loved one. Sorry for your loss, as well.

Janice Canerdy

Date: 2/23/2019 9:10:00 AM

CONGRATULATIONS on your well-deserved win, Laura! Janice

Laura Leiser
Date: 2/23/2019 9:15:00 AM

Thanks so much, Janice! I’m thrilled with the results, of course!

Nette Onclaud

Date: 2/21/2019 12:34:00 PM

such angst expressed in a most languid way...your beautiful figures of speech touch me, laura... my condolences and huggs

Laura Leiser
Date: 2/21/2019 1:50:00 PM

Thanks, Nette..it’s such. hard loos for me...

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 2/21/2019 12:51:00 AM

Ah, this is poignant and truly heartfelt. It sounds like your father is recently gone. You have prayers from Kansas, Laura.

Laura Leiser
Date: 2/21/2019 1:12:00 AM

Yes, he died last year... the grief is still palpable. Thanks for your comments, Caren