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Golden Shovel Poetry Contest Sponsored by Craig Cornish

09/25/23

Golden Shovel

Gloria is the lass all the college boys fancied. In fact, she
was the one they dreamed of marrying. Yet, when she walks
through the door at the reunion, she’s unrecognizable! In
truth, she looks like a wrinkled drag queen. A ravishing beauty,
she is no more. Her once pert breasts now hang down like
spaniel ears. Seeing her makes me glad I’ve kept in shape! The
hours spent working out in our private gym and spa each night
have paid off.  Marrying a successful surgeon has its perks! Of
course my tan is from weeks aboard our yacht, ‘Cloudless.’
We escape bitterly cold weather by sailing to sunnier climes.
The Caribbean is where we always celebrate Christmas and
New Year. We sip champagne as fireworks explode in starry
streams of gold and silver sparkles in dark inky blue skies.
The room falls silent, all eyes on me as I sashay to Gloria and
we embrace, kissing the air as we did when we were young. All
evening we reminisced. I'm glad I was an ugly duckling. That’s
how I met, Max. My facial reconstruction proved he was the best
plastic surgeon in the world.  He performed with the skill of
an haute couture designer and lifted me from depths of dark
depression. I was totally transformed into a catwalk model and
when we married, I knew my future would always be bright.

She walks in beauty, like the night
Of cloudless climes and starry skies;
And all that’s best of dark and bright

Lord Byron – She Walks in Beauty
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Cornish Avatar
October 7, 2023 at 11:14 AM
Jan, there was no other write for the contest that was quite as creative and truly fun!
Richards Avatar
October 3, 2023 at 10:32 PM
Congratulations on your placement, Jan, with this prose. Quite the tale :)
Watts Avatar
October 3, 2023 at 3:47 PM
Hi Jan Well done and congratulations on your place in the contest. I found your poem the most readable. Good use of the quote words Cheers Christine x
Lane Avatar
September 28, 2023 at 3:55 AM
You don’t fill poetic lines with powder puff fluff. Never beat around the bush when you write about a tush. But you can pen great story lines, too. I’ll refrain from rhyming that sentence and just say, Jan… I’m proud of you. Ok, I couldn’t help it. Hugs!
Lane Avatar
September 28, 2023 at 6:44 AM
Jan, you have nothing to prove to anyone.
Allison Avatar
September 28, 2023 at 6:38 AM
aww thanks Lin, i teared up at that comment - you know how difficult things are for me at the moment and i appreciate your support both on and off soup. I tried hard to prove to some i am a 'real' poet and at least I post stuff that is all my own work. hugs jan xx
Hamilton Avatar
September 27, 2023 at 3:37 PM
Much enjoyed Jan you sure tipped the scales on gloria and got a perfect partner too well written 7 hugs Shadow
Allison Avatar
September 28, 2023 at 6:36 AM
Thanks Shadow, I hope Craig likes it:-) hugs jan xx
Bowring Avatar
September 26, 2023 at 11:10 PM
This is a wonderful, well written verse dear Jan. Vey entertaining- and you can write- and wonderfully too! Your vivid imagery makes it easy for the reader to see before them the scenes being played out. I love the line with the fireworks in particular. Beautifully poetic. Thank you for sharing not just your wonderful poetry but your wonderful self too and all the support you give to others. I’m a big fan! Hugs and smiles to you xx
Allison Avatar
September 27, 2023 at 9:17 AM
Thanks for dropping by with your lovely comment Christina:-) hugs jan xx
Curtis Avatar
September 26, 2023 at 5:09 AM
You Jan have more of whatever it takes to write this kind of masterpiece that I could muster. Hope you WIN!!!
Allison Avatar
September 26, 2023 at 1:54 PM
aww Jerry that is the sweetest comment. I have come a long way since I joined in 2014 but some still don't think I can write 'real' poetry. never mind, its their loss. Hugs jan xx
Buhagiar Avatar
September 26, 2023 at 3:02 AM
Absolutely gorgeous dear Jan. Great poetry. Hugs my friend and you will always be welcome in my flock. Thanks for reading my poem.
Allison Avatar
September 26, 2023 at 3:14 AM
Thanks Victor, think I am a lost black sheep to be honest:-) hugs Jan xx
Vaso Avatar
September 25, 2023 at 9:55 PM
Beautiful Poetry Jan
Allison Avatar
September 26, 2023 at 2:51 AM
thanks Art, it was challenging to write 'real' poetry for a change! hugs Jan xx
Kauffman Avatar
September 25, 2023 at 12:48 PM
Well done Jan. Your story brings to light the ironies of life! Best wishes for the contest. So glad you gave it the old college try! Blessings and many hugs!
Allison Avatar
September 25, 2023 at 1:37 PM
thanks Sam, I gave it my best shot I hope Craig likes it:-) hugs Jan xx
Lawless Avatar
September 25, 2023 at 12:06 PM
an ingeniously unique take on the contest theme Jan. And I'll bet her poop don't stink either.
Allison Avatar
September 25, 2023 at 12:16 PM
lol thanks John, bearing in mind I just write poop I thought it was beyond my skills but i did give it a try.. hugs jan xx
Andresen Avatar
September 25, 2023 at 11:24 AM
- The golden or the rusty... avoid it like poison... beauty comes from within... - Bought beauty, no thanks - Great written, Jan :) - hugs
Allison Avatar
September 25, 2023 at 11:27 AM
Thanks, that is so true Anne-Lise:-) hugs Jan xx
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