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~~+~~ Cold was the night as the snow fell, drifting on the street and on the paths; where I wandered and struggled to walk, weary and homeless, sleepwalking. Oh, I was a lost runaway from home, cold was the night and cold was my fear; No place to go and I had left love behind, I had no shelter from the cold. People walked by fast not even seeing me, help me, feeble and weary I called out; help me, help me, I am cold and hungry, and slowly I struggled on and on. When I could not walk anymore I sat down, and from the gathering snow I whispered; but the loud wind sent my words drifting, so, I just waited in the snow to die. Then, I saw a building and crawled to the doors, it was lit by candles and Christmas decorations; and I lay down in front of a statue of Jesus, I was found by a priest, gone. "God took me home." ____________________________ November 2, 2019 Poetry/Narrative/God Took Me Home Copyright Protected, ID 19-1193-270-19 All Rights Reserved. Written under Pseudonym. Written for the Premiere contest, Anything You Want sponsor, Chantelle Anne Cooke Second Place

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Date: 11/3/2019 2:34:00 PM
wow! so powerful, and man that ending! Outstanding and deserving placement, congrats sweet Dear Heart x:)-luloo
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Date: 11/4/2019 12:58:00 PM
Lu thank you so much for the compliment and sweet comment !
Date: 11/3/2019 1:31:00 PM
Constance, what a great write! It's good to see you in the winner's circle. I have not fared as well in any of Chantelle's contests. All I get from her is N/A. I'll stick with contest sponsors who appreciate my work at least enough to give it HM if nothing more.
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Date: 11/3/2019 1:39:00 PM
Curtis thank you for the visit. Don't get discouraged just keep writing and entering because each theme and form is a learning experience!
Date: 11/3/2019 7:55:00 AM
- Congratulations on your wonderful and moving poem, D.H. - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 11/3/2019 10:16:00 AM
Anne-Lise, thanks for visiting my poem and for the congrats !
Date: 11/3/2019 2:36:00 AM
This is a wonderful write. I love it... so sad, but so entirely good. Blessings - Gina
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Date: 11/3/2019 10:17:00 AM
Gina, thanks for the wonderful comment !
Date: 11/2/2019 9:07:00 PM
Laced with palatable emotion the poetically rocked me - great poem. blessings ... CayCay
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Date: 11/3/2019 10:17:00 AM
CayCay, thanks for the lovely comment !
Date: 11/2/2019 7:12:00 PM
Powerful piece written here!!! Your imagery expressed here is captivating! INK
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Date: 11/3/2019 10:18:00 AM
Ink, thanks for visiting my poem and for the compliment !
Date: 11/2/2019 4:39:00 PM
Wow, this is excellent Dear Heart and yes, you have a loving heart! Well done :)
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Date: 11/2/2019 6:22:00 PM
Heidi, thank you for the visit and the compliment, it means a lot to me !
Date: 11/2/2019 3:37:00 PM
Hi friends, of course this is fiction, for I am here with you still. I wrote this because I am so sadly touched by the homeless in my city especially the kids roaming the streets lost and alone.
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