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Giving Thanks


The water rushed by pulling at me as I struggled to hold onto the moss covered
rocks, but they were slippery and my hands to not grasp them.  I was getting
tired and the water was numbing cold, it seemed to want me.  Was I to die today,
to be washed away in this fast moving stream and down the rapids.  The sound
of the water was a roar.  I could scream, but I would not be heard in this ravine.

It was a beautiful day for a walk in nature and looking down at the sparkling
water I had thought it seemed so lovely.  I wanted to get some photographs so,
I made a decision to take what appeared to be a path down to the stream. I 
stepped onto it and it seemed fine, so I began the descent.  It was a bit steeper 
than it had appeared and I found myself holding onto branches.  I noticed the 
ground was wet and soggy and suddenly I was falling, tumbling, crashing
through the lush foliage and coming to a stop in the water.

It was deep and the current was strong and I knew that I only had moments.
"Dear Lord, I don't want to die today, not today, not like this!"  In my mind,
I saw myself floating with my beautiful hair flowing around me and my eyes
staring up, unseeing, at the Lord's painted sky. "Dear Lord, help me, help me!"
It was then, that I noticed a branch hanging out over the water and I grabbed 
it, and pulled and pulled myself up onto the rocks.  Why had I not noticed that 
branch before?  I climbed up the slope on my hands and knees to the top.

I was covered in mud and leaves as I staggered home, and still I had not seen
a single person in the park.  At home I stripped off my muddy clothes and put
on my nightgown.  I climbed into bed and pulled up the covers and I wept and 
wept.  I gave thanks to the Lord for being there for me in my terrible time of 
need.  He gave me back my life, that branch was his helping hand.  The Lord
has a plan for me and it was not written that I was to die this day.  I am so
thankful for this chance and for the important lesson learned.

Nature can be both beautiful and deadly, it must be respected, for it can
be cruel and unfeeling.

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September 14, 2015


Narrative

For the contest, Giving Thanks, sponsor, Edward Ebbs

Third Place
Copyright © | Year Posted 2015

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A  Avatar
October 27, 2015 at 9:30 PM
Wonderful win. SKAT
La France Avatar
October 28, 2015 at 8:23 AM
Thank you Skat ~
Godwin Avatar
October 26, 2015 at 10:01 PM
Congratulations! CayCay
La France Avatar
October 27, 2015 at 1:04 PM
Thanks Caycay ~
Cheema Avatar
October 26, 2015 at 8:04 AM
Wings, too emotional! I felt I was with you in your struggle. You have that power to keep the reader engrossed! A beautiful gratitude to the Lord!
La France Avatar
October 27, 2015 at 1:06 PM
Balveen thanks for the compliment ~
A. Sharma Avatar
October 26, 2015 at 1:23 AM
Congrats on ur exquisite winning work Broken!
La France Avatar
October 26, 2015 at 7:46 AM
Thanks Upma for your forever support ~
Roper Avatar
October 25, 2015 at 9:19 PM
:'( tears ! Very inspiring Our saving Grace ! Congratulations on your win!
La France Avatar
October 26, 2015 at 7:47 AM
Thanks Eve for the sweet comment and congrats ~
Haight Avatar
October 25, 2015 at 7:42 PM
Such a miraculous story, Broken Wings, and so beautifully expressed. Your experience with the power of prayer deep thankfulness is strongly felt. Congratulations for your amazing podium win. 7, Hugs, Sandra
La France Avatar
October 26, 2015 at 7:48 AM
Thank you Sandra, yes I truly believe God saved me that day and I learned a valuable lesson to respect the nature I love ~
Dietrich Avatar
October 25, 2015 at 4:59 PM
wow, what a story and what an honor to have placed in his contest. He is so difficult to win with!! Congratulations, Constance. I also love how you made your theme on nature. Nature can be so cruel and in an instant, your life could be ended!
La France Avatar
October 25, 2015 at 7:06 PM
Thank you Andrea for the compliment and it is a true story ~
Allison Avatar
October 25, 2015 at 11:23 AM
what an incredible story Broken Wings congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
La France Avatar
October 25, 2015 at 7:07 PM
Thanks Jan for the congrats ~
Ebbs Avatar
October 25, 2015 at 11:19 AM
Congrats on your 3rd Place win Broken, we share a very similar experience...different time, different place, thank you :)
La France Avatar
October 25, 2015 at 7:08 PM
Thank you so much Edward, that was such a horrible experience, it taught me to respect nature ~
Boddie Avatar
September 16, 2015 at 11:33 AM
what a powerful testimony you have here....The Power Of Prayer is indeed sincere....it was not meant for you to perish that day....therefore this had to be a moment to Solidify your Faith....;)
La France Avatar
October 25, 2015 at 7:09 PM
Eric, so many times I have stood at the gates of heaven only to be turned back, thanks for the visit ~
Laurie Avatar
September 15, 2015 at 8:32 PM
Nicely written BW. Had a similar experience years ago and can truly relate to your narrative - thank you - Lindsay
La France Avatar
October 25, 2015 at 7:10 PM
Lindsay, I never take chances in nature, I like to hike and visit parks and such but I am very careful not to get in dangerous situations anymore, no picture is worth my life ~
A  Avatar
September 15, 2015 at 8:31 PM
this is deep and beautiful. SKAT
La France Avatar
October 25, 2015 at 7:10 PM
Thanks for the visit Skat
Muideen Avatar
September 15, 2015 at 5:14 PM
Wow!!!! I love how this was constructed BW. Your is beautiful and eloquent..... Excellent write for the truth within.....the last is extreme lovely........A.M.
La France Avatar
October 25, 2015 at 7:11 PM
Thank you Afolabi for the compliment ~
Tor Avatar
September 15, 2015 at 1:20 AM
Exciting and dangerous. Jesus was there for sure. What a recovery. Excellent write Broken Wings. I felt that you took me on your Journey and I was you. This will finish high in the contest.
La France Avatar
October 25, 2015 at 7:14 PM
Thanks for the visit Michael you predicted my win in the contest ~
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