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The water rushed by pulling at me as I struggled to hold onto the moss covered rocks, but they were slippery and my hands to not grasp them. I was getting tired and the water was numbing cold, it seemed to want me. Was I to die today, to be washed away in this fast moving stream and down the rapids. The sound of the water was a roar. I could scream, but I would not be heard in this ravine. It was a beautiful day for a walk in nature and looking down at the sparkling water I had thought it seemed so lovely. I wanted to get some photographs so, I made a decision to take what appeared to be a path down to the stream. I stepped onto it and it seemed fine, so I began the descent. It was a bit steeper than it had appeared and I found myself holding onto branches. I noticed the ground was wet and soggy and suddenly I was falling, tumbling, crashing through the lush foliage and coming to a stop in the water. It was deep and the current was strong and I knew that I only had moments. "Dear Lord, I don't want to die today, not today, not like this!" In my mind, I saw myself floating with my beautiful hair flowing around me and my eyes staring up, unseeing, at the Lord's painted sky. "Dear Lord, help me, help me!" It was then, that I noticed a branch hanging out over the water and I grabbed it, and pulled and pulled myself up onto the rocks. Why had I not noticed that branch before? I climbed up the slope on my hands and knees to the top. I was covered in mud and leaves as I staggered home, and still I had not seen a single person in the park. At home I stripped off my muddy clothes and put on my nightgown. I climbed into bed and pulled up the covers and I wept and wept. I gave thanks to the Lord for being there for me in my terrible time of need. He gave me back my life, that branch was his helping hand. The Lord has a plan for me and it was not written that I was to die this day. I am so thankful for this chance and for the important lesson learned. Nature can be both beautiful and deadly, it must be respected, for it can be cruel and unfeeling. ______________________________ September 14, 2015 Narrative For the contest, Giving Thanks, sponsor, Edward Ebbs Third Place

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Date: 10/27/2015 9:30:00 PM
Wonderful win. SKAT
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Constance La France
Date: 10/28/2015 8:23:00 AM
Thank you Skat ~
Date: 10/26/2015 10:01:00 PM
Congratulations! CayCay
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Date: 10/27/2015 1:04:00 PM
Thanks Caycay ~
Date: 10/26/2015 8:04:00 AM
Wings, too emotional! I felt I was with you in your struggle. You have that power to keep the reader engrossed! A beautiful gratitude to the Lord!
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Date: 10/27/2015 1:06:00 PM
Balveen thanks for the compliment ~
Date: 10/26/2015 1:23:00 AM
Congrats on ur exquisite winning work Broken!
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Date: 10/26/2015 7:46:00 AM
Thanks Upma for your forever support ~
Date: 10/25/2015 9:19:00 PM
:'( tears ! Very inspiring Our saving Grace ! Congratulations on your win!
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Date: 10/26/2015 7:47:00 AM
Thanks Eve for the sweet comment and congrats ~
Date: 10/25/2015 7:42:00 PM
Such a miraculous story, Broken Wings, and so beautifully expressed. Your experience with the power of prayer deep thankfulness is strongly felt. Congratulations for your amazing podium win. 7, Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 10/26/2015 7:48:00 AM
Thank you Sandra, yes I truly believe God saved me that day and I learned a valuable lesson to respect the nature I love ~
Date: 10/25/2015 4:59:00 PM
wow, what a story and what an honor to have placed in his contest. He is so difficult to win with!! Congratulations, Constance. I also love how you made your theme on nature. Nature can be so cruel and in an instant, your life could be ended!
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Date: 10/25/2015 7:06:00 PM
Thank you Andrea for the compliment and it is a true story ~
Date: 10/25/2015 11:23:00 AM
what an incredible story Broken Wings congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 10/25/2015 7:07:00 PM
Thanks Jan for the congrats ~
Date: 10/25/2015 11:19:00 AM
Congrats on your 3rd Place win Broken, we share a very similar experience...different time, different place, thank you :)
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Date: 10/25/2015 7:08:00 PM
Thank you so much Edward, that was such a horrible experience, it taught me to respect nature ~
Date: 9/16/2015 11:33:00 AM
what a powerful testimony you have here....The Power Of Prayer is indeed sincere....it was not meant for you to perish that day....therefore this had to be a moment to Solidify your Faith....;)
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Date: 10/25/2015 7:09:00 PM
Eric, so many times I have stood at the gates of heaven only to be turned back, thanks for the visit ~
Date: 9/15/2015 8:32:00 PM
Nicely written BW. Had a similar experience years ago and can truly relate to your narrative - thank you - Lindsay
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Date: 10/25/2015 7:10:00 PM
Lindsay, I never take chances in nature, I like to hike and visit parks and such but I am very careful not to get in dangerous situations anymore, no picture is worth my life ~
Date: 9/15/2015 8:31:00 PM
this is deep and beautiful. SKAT
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Date: 10/25/2015 7:10:00 PM
Thanks for the visit Skat
Date: 9/15/2015 5:14:00 PM
Wow!!!! I love how this was constructed BW. Your is beautiful and eloquent..... Excellent write for the truth within.....the last is extreme lovely........A.M.
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Date: 10/25/2015 7:11:00 PM
Thank you Afolabi for the compliment ~
Date: 9/15/2015 1:20:00 AM
Exciting and dangerous. Jesus was there for sure. What a recovery. Excellent write Broken Wings. I felt that you took me on your Journey and I was you. This will finish high in the contest.
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Date: 10/25/2015 7:14:00 PM
Thanks for the visit Michael you predicted my win in the contest ~

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