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Safely stowed feelings keep the peace Adrift with all of this, unheard Forget myself, desist and cease Truly my concerns should decrease Perhaps my sanity is blurred Safely stowed feelings keep the peace Love of mine you cannot police For on dark nights my soul is stirred Forget myself, desist and cease Play deaf when I plead for release Wind please carry away my word Safely stowed feelings keep the peace Eyes closed, sedate, reject caprice All dreams for today are deferred Forget myself, desist and cease At journeys end no golden fleece As I lay dead and am interred Safely stowed feelings keep the peace Forget myself, desist and cease

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Shadow Hamilton

Date: 1/12/2024 9:13:00 AM

well done on placing in my contest Dilly Hugs Shadow

Di11y Da11y
Date: 1/12/2024 3:03:00 PM

Thank you shadow, it was a challenging form x

Lin Lane

Date: 12/17/2023 5:43:00 AM

Great rhyming with the difficult words you chose, Dilly.

Lin Lane
Date: 12/17/2023 6:33:00 AM

I think your method is the right one to use, Dilly. I’m staring at a list I just made of rhyming words that could work cohesively. 7 of one and 6 of another that will gel throughout and at the end… a daunting challenge, to be sure.

Di11y Da11y
Date: 12/17/2023 5:45:00 AM

Honestly Lin, I was determined to finish once I'd got so far in... I almost considered writing to the dictionary publisher's and requesting some new words to help me out :) I'm not a fan of picking my words first, but yes indeed - I made this one hard for myself haha

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 12/14/2023 6:24:00 PM

This was a poem of intricate weaving. I loved how the repetition added another dimension. It gave such a strong feeling of being trapped that I truly commiserated with you.

Di11y Da11y
Date: 12/15/2023 10:03:00 AM

Thank you Hilda, it's for a contest and quite a tricky form as I started with limited rhyme options. I appreciate you sharing your enjoyment of it, thank you

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 12/14/2023 2:24:00 PM

the repetition of the two refrains added passion and depth to your words, Di11y. I especially liked the last verse..as I lay dead and am interred...stunning. Well done...have a great evening, Sara

Di11y Da11y
Date: 12/14/2023 3:06:00 PM

Many thanks Sara, I doubt I'll be trying this form again but I'm glad I managed to finish it. It was a lot of rhymes to keep going and to stay in sync with! Glad you for your kind words, appreciated! :)