Fulcrum of a Rose?

To be fair, Shakespeare 
got the jump on roses,
used up all the best descriptions.
It's bad enough we're out here 
pretending to be Ada Limón and Billy Collins,
only to wax about the break
of a clichéd organ
in relation to a common flower.

A flower I can't keep alive 
in the backyard
but that somehow persists
in the collective consciousness—
hardy in symbol, finicky in soil—
for more than a millennia.

My first husband used to say
I had a parts-per-million nose,
could sniff out a broccoli lunch
from two weeks ago, 
if I kissed him.
I rarely did, 
which is how I met my second one—
the one who said I smelled like garlic
before a storm, and meant it
as a compliment.

I used to believe there was something
to be learned from that.

But the point is, the guts of a thing—
what makes it beat, or bloom,
or cling to a wooden stick—
is as a god, 
or how corndogs are made: 
it is ineffable.

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Date: 6/15/2025 6:31:00 AM
Best of luck with your entry or another version of it. I saw your comment about possibly heading into some other rosebeds of exploration. This piece is more modern than traditional. I peeked at the prompt, and I got classical vibes straightaway, but your voice is strong and clear. It's good to mix things up.
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Jaymee Thomas
Date: 6/19/2025 10:53:00 AM
Thanks for commenting, Trina. I reread the prompt after I saw this and I think you're right. Maybe I'll try a more traditional take--although those often go sideways pretty quickly for me, and Seeker's a tough judge lol
Date: 6/14/2025 4:21:00 PM
bravo! this is the opposite of a cliche - my vote for first place and very amusing. I think that you are kind of lucky in a way, in that your husbands all say funny things, but I would give roses, this - in the flower world, they are no slouches.
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Jaymee Thomas
Date: 6/14/2025 8:14:00 PM
Haha! Everyone is interesting if you're interested, even husbands. Although I have been exponentially lucky in that regard. Both amazing humans and the funniest people I know. Be well :)
Date: 6/13/2025 1:33:00 AM
Engaging read! I enjoyed your unique approach to the contest! Best wishes!
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Jaymee Thomas
Date: 6/13/2025 5:40:00 AM
Aww, thanks, Karen. I'm not sure if I'll enter this version though. The prompt is really interesting and has made me think of a lot of ways to take it. I think I'll explore for a bit before deciding lol. Have a wonderful weekend and thank you for taking the time to read and comment on my work. I really appreciate it.
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