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Frost Like Filigree

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Jack Frost arrives Feather like patterns have appeared all over my bedroom windows My frozen fingers trace the swirling fern like patterns as I gaze intensely at the sparkling crystalline formation on the window panes Warm breath melts a small section of filigree ice Rivulets of icy water trickle down the glass. I wipe away condensation and peer out onto my lawn, which is scintillating with delicate crystals of ice I step onto frosted grass and can hear it crunch with each stride I make on the lawn Low winter sun is shining and I am enchanted by a delicate gossamer spider’s web glistening with beads of ice white diamonds Each stanza 54 syllables checked with how many syllables The Magic of Three Contest:- Sponsored by Broken Wings 01/27/18

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D.W. Rodgers

Date: 3/17/2018 12:11:00 PM

From one Fiber to another congrats on your opus.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/17/2018 12:13:00 PM

Thanks so much DW:-0 hugs Jan xx

Keith Osborne

Date: 3/16/2018 4:30:00 PM

Beautiful imagery in your piece! Finally someone who takes the time to get the sequence positively correct. Thank you so much for producing a flash of promise for writers of the form. Wonderful work!

Jan Allison
Date: 3/17/2018 12:13:00 PM

thanks so much keith for the wonderful comment:-0 i am amazed how i have come to adore writing poetry since i first picked up my pen in Nov 2013:-0 hugs jan xx

Constance La France

Date: 2/13/2018 8:57:00 AM

Jan, congratulations on your win in my contest with this wonderful poem, winter can be so beautiful!

Jan Allison
Date: 2/13/2018 10:17:00 AM

Thank you so much Constance I had such fun writing this challenging form:-) hugs Jan xx

Viv Wigley

Date: 2/13/2018 12:24:00 AM

Nailed the Fibonnacci, Jan, superb, me duck. Congrats! Viv x

Jan Allison
Date: 2/13/2018 10:16:00 AM

Thanks Mr Viv i hope folks can see there is more to me than a humourist i can write the occasional decent poem lol:-) hugs jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 2/12/2018 10:47:00 PM

Congratulations on your win, Jan ! Great poem. Hugs Eve ~`*

Jan Allison
Date: 2/13/2018 10:15:00 AM

Thanks so much Eve:-) hugs jan xx

Tom Cunningham

Date: 2/12/2018 9:31:00 AM

Congratulations Jan a well deserved win. Regards Tom

Jan Allison
Date: 2/12/2018 1:14:00 PM

Thanks Tom:-) hugs Jan xx

Gershon Wolf

Date: 2/11/2018 10:13:00 PM

Gorgeous poem, Jan! I loved the build-up in each stanza, crescendoing "on cat's feet" toward each climactic line. Bravo!! Well-deserved winner! Warmest wishes, Gershon

Jan Allison
Date: 2/12/2018 1:14:00 PM

Thanks Gershon I am so delighted with the way the poem turned out:-) hugs jan xx

Mick Talbot

Date: 2/11/2018 10:05:00 PM

Most definitely a worthy winner, nice one Jan!

Jan Allison
Date: 2/12/2018 1:13:00 PM

Thanks Mick:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/11/2018 6:59:00 PM

Jan, you did SO beautifully with this one. It required imagery , that type of theme, and wow, you really aced it. Congrats on a most well deserved win.

Jan Allison
Date: 2/12/2018 1:15:00 PM

Thanks so much Andrea hopefully people will be able to see there is a little more to me than just a humourist:-) :-) hugs Jan xx

Line Gauthier

Date: 2/11/2018 5:40:00 PM

Beautiful imagery. Congrats on your 1st place finish, Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 2/12/2018 1:12:00 PM

Thanks Line:-) hugs jan xx

Lewis Raynes

Date: 2/11/2018 4:52:00 PM

a beautiful description about such a quiet thing, congratulations on ur first placement :)

Jan Allison
Date: 2/12/2018 1:12:00 PM

Thanks so much lewis:-) hugs jan xx

Kevin Shaw

Date: 2/11/2018 4:25:00 PM

Another Winner Jan and well deserved, nice form and even nicer words. No frost here in Lanzarote, regards, Kevin xx

Jan Allison
Date: 2/11/2018 4:32:00 PM

I hope folks can see there is more to me than just a humourist kevin:-) i thoroughly enjoyed the challenge and was delighted ti place so well:-) Enjoy your holiday hope it is a touch warmer than the uk! hugs jan xx

Joanna Daniel

Date: 2/2/2018 9:13:00 AM

Lovely, Jan, I too wish to write on this theme, just hope my muse would return from wherever she has gone...

Jan Allison
Date: 2/2/2018 9:37:00 AM

My muse is fickle Jo I never force her to write I just wait until she is ready. I've come to the conclusion she goes into hibernation during the dull winter days!:-( hugs jan xx

Sneha Rv

Date: 1/30/2018 9:41:00 AM

Wow how vivid, this is such a pretty poem! I love your start, ending and everything in between - Hope it does very well in the contest dear Jan :))

Jan Allison
Date: 1/30/2018 10:15:00 AM

Thanks so much Sneha:-) hugs jan xx

Sneha Rv
Date: 1/30/2018 9:41:00 AM

The pictures too..

Maurice Rigoler

Date: 1/29/2018 7:57:00 PM

Frost patterns or designs were a favorite boyhood experience. I have written a few poems on the subject too. We are still experiencing heavy morning frost here and will until at least March. Your poem captures your keen powers of observation and description. / M

Jan Allison
Date: 1/30/2018 2:30:00 AM

Thanks so much for the lovely comment Maurice I was always fascinated by the patterns when i was a small child:-) hugs jan xx

Edward Mccall

Date: 1/28/2018 6:21:00 PM

Another beautiful write Jan your talent as a poet never ceases to amaze. Good luck in the contest. {:-)

Jan Allison
Date: 1/28/2018 6:35:00 PM

aww thanks Edward i have learned so so much since writing my first poem in Nov 2013 and joining soup in Feb 2014:-) hugs jan xx

Mike Hauser

Date: 1/28/2018 1:22:00 PM

Beautiful!

Jan Allison
Date: 1/28/2018 4:50:00 PM

Thanks Mike I really enjoyed writing the poem:-) hugs jan xx

Lin Lane

Date: 1/28/2018 12:49:00 PM

Your fibonnaci are as delicately worded as the crystals of ice upon your window, on your lawn, and that lay as delicate icy pearls in a spider's web. Beautifully crafted, Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 1/28/2018 4:50:00 PM

I really loved writing this poem Lin hopefully people can now see there is more to me than just a humourist!:-) hugs Jan xx

James Marshall Goff

Date: 1/28/2018 11:26:00 AM

One of my favorite forms I rarely attempt...you have captured its grace 3 times in this beauty!

Jan Allison
Date: 1/28/2018 4:49:00 PM

I have only written the form twice before and loved the challenge Constance set:-) hugs jan xx

Harry Horsman

Date: 1/28/2018 10:12:00 AM

I'm still learning Jan, this another form for me to ponder, love how you filled it with your wonderful words.

Jan Allison
Date: 1/28/2018 4:48:00 PM

I love the challenges of the contests and this is only my 3rd attempt at the form. it took quite a while to write and i am delighted to have so many lovely positive comments:-) hugs jan xx

Joseph May

Date: 1/28/2018 5:33:00 AM

Beautiful write Jan...winning wishes...

Jan Allison
Date: 1/28/2018 7:03:00 AM

Thanks Joseph I hope Constance likes it:-) hugs jan xx

Jerry T Curtis

Date: 1/28/2018 5:23:00 AM

I don't really care much about the count or form but do care about how a poem makes me feel----and this is beautifully written and reminds me of the days I like in New England. Thanks Jan God Bless

Jan Allison
Date: 1/28/2018 7:02:00 AM

Thanks so much Jerry!:-) hugs jan xx

Eileen Manassian

Date: 1/28/2018 5:05:00 AM

Lovely, Jan. I do like your funny writes, but I also love it when you write on other things like nature and love. Good luck in the contest, dear.

Jan Allison
Date: 1/28/2018 7:02:00 AM

I will always prefer humour but do surprise with a more serious poem and am delighted with the way this one turned out in the end as it was quite a challenge to write to a strict syllable count:-) hugs jan xx

Carole Duet

Date: 1/28/2018 1:04:00 AM

Just great, Jan. I thoroughly enjoyed reading your poem. GL in the contest.

Jan Allison
Date: 1/28/2018 7:00:00 AM

Thanks Carole I am glad you enjoyed the poem:-) hugs Jan xx

Line Gauthier

Date: 1/27/2018 9:01:00 PM

What a successful tribute to the form. Your poem is truly magical, Jan. Superbly done.

Jan Allison
Date: 1/28/2018 6:59:00 AM

Thanks Line I enjoyed the challenge:-) hugs jan xx