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Example for my contest. A new form I invented...hoping you like it :)

From Nest To Nest

Dandelions and daffodils 
Baby's Breath and violets, mix
 
In flowerpots on window sills 
A sparrows nest built broken sticks
 
Cracked open shells, first flights from chicks 
Testing their wings and flying skills

One day they'll learn to make their fix 
A nest for chicks, up in the hills

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Anisha Dutta

Date: 1/26/2020 1:01:00 PM

NICE. Trying.

Heidi Sands

Date: 1/21/2020 8:48:00 AM

A sweet poem and also a nice form you have created. Well done :)

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 1/21/2020 5:26:00 AM

- A wonderful example of your contest, Charlie ... my head is "empty" ... but will try ... at least have it in my mind ... :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Reason A. Poteet

Date: 1/20/2020 5:19:00 PM

always looking for new forms. Hope to get an entry ready for this contest.

Eve Roper

Date: 1/19/2020 10:45:00 PM

I like, Charles has a rhythmical beat to it ..Great example.

Lindsay Laurie

Date: 1/19/2020 6:31:00 PM

G'day Charles … beauty all around Mate - thank you Charles - Lindsay

Jan Allison

Date: 1/19/2020 7:02:00 AM

what a sweet poem Charlie, I will see if I can rise to the challenge of your new form, I love the way you amend known forms and give it a Charlie twist to them:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/18/2020 6:18:00 PM

ahh, this is sweet. I can just picture those cute little birds. Do you like your form done as couplets then? Not in quatrain form? I see the lines are done as couplets in this example. I love this invented form.

Charles Messina
Date: 1/18/2020 9:15:00 PM

Hi Andrea, Thank you for your lovely comments. I prefer the form done as couplets I think it reads better. But I am open to whatever you prefer. As long as the rhyme pattern and the syllable count is up to par that's all that really matters. Thank you also for liking this new form. Have a nice weekend. Hugs Charlie

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 1/18/2020 3:19:00 PM

Wonderful imagery, Charlie, and I like the unique rhyme form. Excellent example for your contest. My sister-in-law tells me NJ is bracing for snow tonight. Hope you stay warm and comfy. Hugs, Carolyn

Charles Messina
Date: 1/18/2020 9:21:00 PM

Thank you so much for your kind words, Carolyn. I sent an email to administration hoping to get this form recognized. Yes, we have received an un-welcome visit from Old Man Winter today here in NJ. Thankfully the warm weather rolled in and melted the snow and Ice. I will be snuggled 'neath the covers tonight for sure (lol) Thank you for your thoughts. Hugs always, Charlie xx

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 1/18/2020 8:20:00 AM

Hi Charlie, Congratulations for your new form of poetry you invented. I'll try it myself sometime. Great example, terrific poem! Blessings, Jennifer