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From My Diary: Nature

I celebrate the nimbus clouds
     stealthly gathering in a silent sky.
No great claps of thunder to shock
     my senses, no lightning bursts,
As the rain begins like tender tears
     then cascades in stormy sheets.

Let the rain seep deep into my cells, 
     into my serene soul.
Let my passion grow until petrichor
     is all that I breathe.
Radiance of the sun soon filters 
     through colored cotton clouds

Creating a rainbow in cool mist as,
     diamond drops dazzle
my adoring eyes, mirrors my joys,
     stills my hopeful heart.
My senses are glorified in the 
     aftermath of the sudden storm.

Rivulets from tiny pools run free, 
     sharing their sweet abandonment...
imbued and autumn hued.
     Winds morph into balmy breezes
and all is at equanimous ease
     except my heart yearning for more.


10-30-17

*Note: We seldom have any thunder or lightning in our tropical storms which makes them pleasant encounters. Some of us dance in the rain because it isn't cold.

TITLE: Hawaiian Storm
From My Diary: Nature - 5th Place

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Schneiter Avatar
February 28, 2018 at 7:04 PM
Wow! A composition that is a model of poetic excellence. Such imagery! Such flow! Such a message! And such closing two lines. Masterfully done, Connie. It's enough to find me guilty of covetousness. Hugs, always, Paul
Scars Avatar
January 9, 2018 at 10:57 AM
wow lovely imagery! congrats ;)-luloo
Gauthier Avatar
January 6, 2018 at 6:42 PM
Beautiful imagery. Congrats on your fine win, Connie.
Hamilton Avatar
January 6, 2018 at 8:56 AM
Winds morph into balmy breezes, so many wonderful lines, congrats Connie on a wonderful write, and win!
Marcum Wong Avatar
January 6, 2018 at 12:40 PM
Thank you very much John for my third placement! I think you could tell how much I love rain! : )
Anish Avatar
December 13, 2017 at 7:54 PM
Nice analogy from nature here - as outside - so inside. Peace & Love Matthew Anish
Breedt Avatar
November 30, 2017 at 12:25 AM
I hearfelt connect with you and the wonderful rain. I am much pleased that both you and Cay Cay are featuring in the top 10 here. Wonderful .
Marcum Wong Avatar
December 9, 2017 at 7:44 PM
You are such a dear Jannie! Thank you. I hope things down your way are peaceful? Hugs, Connie : )
De Beaulieu Avatar
November 28, 2017 at 8:02 PM
Connie this is a lovely poem.You paint a beautiful picture with your words. have a nice evening my friend.
Marcum Wong Avatar
November 29, 2017 at 3:21 PM
Thank you very much Darlene. Happy holidays! ; )
Ashley Avatar
November 25, 2017 at 8:25 PM
Connie, such beautiful appreciation of Nature expressed in your superb write. Your poem is enthralling with enchanting imagery and wondrous joy at what you're experiencing. Gorgeous poetry especially your third stanza 'diamond drops dazzle' - poetic bliss!
Marcum Wong Avatar
November 28, 2017 at 9:49 PM
Thank you very much Susan. I adore the rain. : )
Dietrich Avatar
November 14, 2017 at 7:23 PM
Connie, I am just here to say hi. Joe is in the driveway and I need to get off pronto! Time eludes me.
Godwin Avatar
November 14, 2017 at 4:48 PM
So full of feel and emotion. Another 'pausing' for me, some poems are so imagery, beauty and meaning loaded that I must let it seep into me. This is one such. Your imagery is spectacular, yet it is minimized in line length which makes it especially admirable. Hugs ... CayCay
Marcum Wong Avatar
November 15, 2017 at 12:57 AM
Your comments are so genuine and sincere CayCay. I thank you so much for them. They truly mean a lot to me my friend. I am so upset that I can't leave messages for your poems. I hope they fix the problem soon. Hugs, Connie : )
Downing  Avatar
November 13, 2017 at 4:56 PM
Being from the pacific islands myself, I know exactly what's you're beautiful diary described... so beautiful and sweet!
Marcum Wong Avatar
November 13, 2017 at 5:08 PM
Thank you very much Akkina. Nice to meet you! : )
Chakrabarty Avatar
November 13, 2017 at 7:42 AM
Nature is the best healer.You have diarized your honest feel.Loved it Connie.Regards.
Daniel Avatar
November 13, 2017 at 7:00 AM
Ah! Sounds enchanting, Connie, congratulations:)
Murray Avatar
November 12, 2017 at 5:07 PM
Dancing in the rain...I would love that Connie. We have "soft rain" here, but not often warm enough to dance it.
Sathasivam Avatar
November 12, 2017 at 5:54 AM
Excellent. Great imagery write with well penned. Thanks for sharing it.
Chan Avatar
November 12, 2017 at 4:54 AM
This is enchanting, Connie. Your imagery and descriptions throughout are simply gorgeous. An inspired meditation on the beauty all around us. Fills one with a new appreciation for nature. I guess living in Hawaii will do that to you. Aloha! :)
Horsman Avatar
November 12, 2017 at 4:33 AM
There is so much to ponder on here, Connie, Amazing poetry
Callus Avatar
November 9, 2017 at 4:51 PM
Your diary must be a joy to read, Connie, if it contains beautiful extracts such as this poem! Storms without lightning and thunder don't sound at all bad, and I love the petrichor smell. ~ Regards // paul
Wigley Avatar
November 8, 2017 at 10:42 PM
A lovely piece, Connie, and you are blessed to have such scenery to frame it all with. Well done! Viv x
Delaney Avatar
November 8, 2017 at 7:12 PM
Congratulations on your lovely nature musings. If I had entered I would have chosen nature.....it is such a solace.
Dietrich Avatar
November 8, 2017 at 5:41 PM
So happy you are a winner. I need to see the list again to know if you scored high. I sure do hope so. Congrats, my friend.
La France Avatar
November 8, 2017 at 12:32 PM
Connie, congratulations on your win in my contest with this lovely page from your diary !
Marcum Wong Avatar
November 8, 2017 at 1:05 PM
Thank you very much Constance. I am eager to read all the poems in your contest. My daughter and boyfriend were visiting the past week from no. Calif. so I have missed being online. I enjoyed entering your contest. : )
Lamoureux Avatar
November 8, 2017 at 8:11 AM
A tremendous and worthy winner. I enjoyed reading this one again Connie.
Warrior Avatar
November 8, 2017 at 5:21 AM
Beautifully executed my friend...just beautiful...god bless...^WW^
Nusker Avatar
November 7, 2017 at 10:37 PM
Connie, each and every line is flawlessly constructed and imbued with the beauty of nature. So beautiful!! Congratulations! A fav.
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