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In fragility of dreams,
winds weep with weeping willows.
Fate mimics a melancholic melody -
pain only piano keys can portray.

Each note tempts this tired mind,
to move in slow motion -
a dispirited dance for a misunderstood heart,
mourning the surreal silence of her absence.  

Sanity deceives like twilight,
clementine embers scorch the sky.
As shadows create silhouettes -
darkness does not reveal my star.

Breathing alone at the beloved's bridge,
reminiscing brown eyes and secret smiles,
echoes of her voice tingle -
lonesome soul shivers.

Here I remain,
an unfinished painting -
aching for her palette.

Sunday Simple Musings
Silent One
17 May 2020

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Angela Crabtree

Date: 12/1/2020 7:31:00 PM

Very descriptive write, Silent One. I think there's always someone that remains in the depths of our mind. Hope you have a great night :)

Eric Boddie

Date: 6/29/2020 1:10:00 PM

longing for the one Love that can never be forgotten....at times can leave you feeling rotten....bestowing an insatiable urge....rendering you as helpless as an unused verb....drowning within your own heart....thats the most difficult part....truly amazing my friend....

Funom Makama

Date: 6/25/2020 3:16:00 PM

Great write.. I wrote one for your contest but by the time I wanted to submit it, it was too late. This is absolutely brilliant

Robert Lindley

Date: 6/2/2020 3:27:00 PM

A mist finely crafted piece my friend. Truly a pleasure to read and know it gifts so very much. Definitely a fav and a gem.. God bless...

Gail Debole

Date: 5/31/2020 7:07:00 AM

Your descriptive phrasing is superb.

Phyllis Babcock

Date: 5/30/2020 10:19:00 PM

You can feel the ache of the heart in this poem. A gem. love phyl

Joe Dimino

Date: 5/28/2020 7:49:00 AM

"Here I remain, an unfinished painting - aching for her palette." Exquisite writing! The entire poem a true work of art.

Paghunda Zahid

Date: 5/27/2020 2:43:00 PM

Impressive, love the imagery... Your words are truly magical!!

Janice Canerdy

Date: 5/27/2020 8:18:00 AM

Lovely, emotional, expressive piece, S.O. Janice

Besma Riabi Dziri

Date: 5/26/2020 1:15:00 AM

"an unfinished painting"! an insatiated thirst.. a throbbing ache.. an unattainable dream.. that's what keeps the flame of life igniting our souls.. ever yearning for fulfillment and contentment.. deep thoughts into so wonderful poetry that inspires the soul.. a great pleasure to read! Best regards and blessings.

Harry Horsman

Date: 5/24/2020 11:59:00 PM

Sheer magic in your pen, and heart S.O

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 5/24/2020 2:41:00 AM

A poem that tore at my heartstrings - awesome poetry Silent One written with longing and a kind soul. Enjoy this Sunday. Blessings, Jennifer.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 5/22/2020 12:31:00 PM

God can lead to a spirited dance and a healed heart. Still I must say this is beautiful, although sad poetry.

Mike Gentile

Date: 5/19/2020 2:02:00 PM

I am so impressed with your writing! I can clearly feel the ache in a dreamlike quality. Aspirational for sure. Hope you are having a great day !!

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 5/18/2020 6:38:00 PM

oh WOW, Silent..so beautifully poignant! You have given us great inspiration for your contest. Hugs, Rhonda

Brandy Nicole

Date: 5/18/2020 3:35:00 PM

What is unfinished shall be finished, when the time is right. No need rushing tender moments. This holds beauty and a sweet ache. A deep longing. ~ Brandy

Arturo Michael

Date: 5/18/2020 12:00:00 PM

Great idea..."an unfinished painting - aching for her palette."

Nette Onclaud

Date: 5/18/2020 11:24:00 AM

S.O., your pen bleeds with languid thoughts and bewtching imagery...i am much better now!...thanks for the inspiration to write for you...huggs!

Winged Warrior

Date: 5/18/2020 6:31:00 AM

You're getting better at this poetry stuff lol...ps love the music choice...all the best my Silent friend ^WW^ :o)

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 5/18/2020 3:22:00 AM

The combination of this haunting music and your words touch a poets soul Silent! Stunning! Blessings xxoo

John Hamilton

Date: 5/17/2020 9:47:00 PM

Wonderfully mournful but hopeful, I love your writing style, simple musings...I think not!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/17/2020 9:02:00 PM

Breathtaking gem, Silent One. I love this kind of writing!

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 5/17/2020 5:57:00 PM

Only poetry can give you the colors that you need, you write like an artist, and a warm hearted human being, Thank you for sharing , this. Beautiful, like you xo