Flying Kites

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Coarse sand / tight brown rills Hard scree / furled green trails Fine clouds / light hued kite Gull squawks / young man vail

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Gary Radice

Date: 11/1/2023 7:01:00 AM

I just love this Suzette. The form is alien to me but even putting that to one side the descriptions, the comparisons, the nature..love it. Am I right in thinking that 'vail' applies to the young man ducking / lowering of head? Cheers - Gary

Suzette Richards
Date: 11/1/2023 7:06:00 AM

To vail is ato show a mark of respect - an old English word similar to doffing one's hat. I like your description better. Gary. Thank you for your kind comment.