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First Date - Pathological

One guy, a few years older, out of school, had seen me where I worked and asked me out. His look was nice. His car was super cool! He took me to some big event about an hour from our town. Till late we sat on bleachers, and he had so much to say so unbelievable at one point that I had to ask myself, “was he ok?” He had a girlfriend in my PE class! I hadn’t known this. She came up to me and threatened she was gonna kick my ass! A major liar he turned out to be! Tall tales of glory on that date I heard No wonder I had found them so absurd! Feb. 12, 2018 for Brenda Chiri's "A First Date" Poetry Contest. (A true story. I was 16. I ended up dating his roommate, also an "older" man but more handsome and truthful!)

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Date: 2/15/2018 10:09:00 AM
So we may say ass on Soup! How cute this was, juvenile indeed - as a first date should be. I believe there have been other contest writes concerning this same dude??? Another contest my muse is floundering with, I can't even remember all my first, first dates. Good luck with this cutie. Love ... CayCay
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Date: 2/14/2018 8:06:00 PM
That was quite a bad experience, brought to life in your well-written Sonnet, Andrea! Congratulations on your win! Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 2/14/2018 7:45:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, Andrea!.. Happy Valentine's Day Hugs Eve ~`*
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Date: 2/14/2018 8:08:00 AM
Congrats!
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Date: 2/14/2018 6:55:00 AM
Back with congrats, Andrea.
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Date: 2/14/2018 5:13:00 AM
Congrats on your win Andrea
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Date: 2/13/2018 6:52:00 PM
Hi Andrea, This is why I didn't date much in high school. Great write for the contest. Best wishes:-) Alexis
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Date: 2/13/2018 6:29:00 PM
and all I did in high school was letter in sports and study waiting to be drafted into the military....nice story Andrea...good luck
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Date: 2/13/2018 6:27:00 PM
Andrea, great poem for the contest, there are some real losers in high school
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Date: 2/13/2018 6:10:00 PM
I enjoyed the story you told in your poem, Andrea. Good luck in the contest.
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Date: 2/13/2018 5:06:00 PM
It is too bad we have to look out for guys like this. Great tale of first date to pass down to your kids to make them aware. Happy Valentine's Day! ; )
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Date: 2/13/2018 3:32:00 PM
Ha :0 ! This is so cleverly written Andrea! And boy do I know what you mean... I've raised a discerning eyebrow at some storytellers as well. In your case it sounds like it took the frog to lead you to a prince! Happy Valentines...hope you get some Doves :)
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Date: 2/13/2018 7:57:00 AM
Giggles, this is awesome! Delicious read, and true! My best to you in the contest Andrea :) xomo!
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Date: 2/13/2018 7:41:00 AM
I knew some guys like this in high school, they would do or say anything to impress a girl...but hey, Andrea, you must have been worth trying to impress. Enjoyed reading this. John
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Date: 2/13/2018 7:19:00 AM
It sounds true...Maybe he was a storyteller sent to entertain you...The things people do... Enjoyed your poem...All the best Andrea
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Date: 2/13/2018 6:44:00 AM
I think I have heard this story before lol... Some guys would do anything to impress a girl.. Good luck in the contest..
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Date: 2/13/2018 6:27:00 AM
Many can relate to a date like yours..younger days are full of such memories..best for a win, Andrea.
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Date: 2/12/2018 10:27:00 PM
Good poem, Andrea. LOL. Enjoyable read.
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