First Cherubic Chance

This road is snake-like except
for the crusty scales of an intestinal
late dusk. A boy treaded on the 
lane tracks lean and nomadic...
burnt shoulders grilled and toasted by
the sun, as if his coal skin sparked like
burning diamond weeds. In a flash, a tender
sorcery poured in my veins. There and then,
I longed to whisper a tune, play the tambourine or
partake of the loaf in my sack with him.
But he waited for paper clouds to ruffle his hair,
seemingly undisturbed by pilgrims like me 
holding unto holy relics and bones of night. The gauze
shirt as his frock winged with the silver winds,
windblown stroking my ebony tresses with a whisper
hushed by his delicate omnipresence.

In a dimly lit bus, sand wheezed tribal notes
moist on my eyelids uprooted by uncontained
temples of longing, now becoming thick
as woolen destiny. If only for a flicker of time,
his eyelids met mine so briefly... parting saline dust
of sacred, smiling gazes. I was inside a cell 
of a wombed bus. He was outside enlarged by a
hundred stars exploding dewdrops, inviting eternity.
For a fraction of silence, we met somewhere
between the fluorescent of our twin eyes. He, the angel 
first fondly encountered ; I, the dreamer ever bewildered…
I remember...I was five.  
                             
                           ---oooo----oooo---

(( P.D.'s " your Own Favorite Poem
by nette onclaud))
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Vinson Avatar
December 7, 2016 at 3:48 PM
This mercilessly lays waste to the ordinary. Smile. How many valleys in the Baha i faith? How many lucky gods in Japan? How many dwarfs with Snow White? How many continents in the world? It's a lucky roll with dice. How many days in a week?
George   Avatar
November 21, 2016 at 9:36 PM
A magical moment in time captured so beautiful by a magical poet. Simply Sensational, dear Nette. Elaine
U.D Palawon  Avatar
September 11, 2016 at 5:24 AM
So beautiful....Congrats Sunita :)
Carter Avatar
September 10, 2016 at 1:09 PM
Brilliant. Beautiful. One of the best I've seen at the Soup, and that includes the "famous" stuff.
Callus Avatar
September 10, 2016 at 9:09 AM
Hi Nette...I just found this on Soup front page. It's beautiful and I had to read it more than once, swirling its words around, relishing this special moment in time. It's a fav for me! ~ I see that it's also a top winner, so congratulations! Hugs // paul
Gulley Avatar
September 10, 2016 at 7:24 AM
Congratulations on your awesome win and for it being featured this week on the soup. Much love, wonderful write.
Dietrich Avatar
April 15, 2013 at 6:07 PM
MY Daily Bread. That was one poem of yours I really loved and faved, Nette. If you can make it into my contest before it closes, go for it. It's my welcome to you back here at Soup. Where WERE you?
Brown Avatar
December 28, 2010 at 6:38 AM
Congratulations on your win in Frank Herrera's "Fondest Memory" contest . Love, Carol
Johnson Avatar
December 20, 2010 at 10:56 PM
A beautiful poem. What a dreamer you must have been at 5 years. Congratulations on a worthy win. Love, joyce
K. Avatar
December 20, 2010 at 10:30 PM
So amazing & I literally got chills with this Nette-- WOw, wow wow & definitely deserving of first place-- way to go for you! & how lucky of you to encounter your angel-- & wow you were just 5!! btw thanks for all your comments-- waaah naka-miss na ako ng dalawang simba-- sayang pero tuloy pa rin-- at least nag-try di-ba? & wow 2nd masters ka na? ano yung isa? me, nagtuturo ng mga bata edad 2-4 years old :) see you around! haha bilbil galore na nga ako :p -- COngrats again! hugs nikko :)
Mannan Avatar
December 20, 2010 at 8:37 PM
A beautiful memory honey. Many congratulations for this top notch.
Dietrich Avatar
December 20, 2010 at 8:32 PM
what did I tell you ,Nette. I just KNEW frank would love this one. It was magnificent!! congratulations!
Horsman Avatar
December 20, 2010 at 7:49 PM
This is superb, such an interesting and profound poem, well deserves its number 1 placement. Harry
La France Avatar
December 20, 2010 at 7:20 PM
Congratulations on first place with this wonderful poem~~
Devonshire Avatar
December 20, 2010 at 7:16 PM
This is first rate and so deserving of the top spot. A memorable write, Nette. Congratulations! Love, Carolyn
Richards Avatar
December 20, 2010 at 7:10 PM
Wow....once again, you wow me with your excellent poetry!! Well done, Nette!!! :) Congratulations! Love, Carrie
Mehta Avatar
December 20, 2010 at 6:55 PM
Congratulations on the well deserved first place in the contest of frank, nette
Johnson Avatar
December 20, 2010 at 6:46 PM
What a lovely memory. Well worth the first it received. congratulations. Love, Joyce
Sweetheart Avatar
December 20, 2010 at 6:44 PM
Congrats Nette on your number one poem in the Fondest Memories contest my friend with this superb write and entry .. enjoy another win at the top of the list with luv tonight..
Babcock Avatar
December 13, 2010 at 6:00 AM
What a wonderful poem you have penned and what an awesome memory if you were five. Good luck in the contest. God Bless Phyl
Dietrich Avatar
December 13, 2010 at 12:01 AM
Oh, my gosh, Nette, I can see that Frank is gonna rank this one HIGH. And deservedly so!!! What an awesome memory. LUv, Andrea
Kendrick Avatar
December 12, 2010 at 11:25 AM
Good luck in the contest woth this very expressive work that reads like a true winner..I especially like fifth line from the end..Your presence at my work expressing your understanding of the emotion lifted my spirits..Sara
Sweetheart Avatar
December 12, 2010 at 11:15 AM
Simply beautiful Nette... u can check the winners list now posted for Holiday Home... all your efforts were not in vain... congrats luv..
Devonshire Avatar
December 12, 2010 at 9:08 AM
Gee, Nette, this young man made quite an impression on you as he rode past your bus. Incredible descriptions from the memories that were created when you were just five years old! Best wishes in Frank's contest. Love and blessings for the holidays, Carolyn
Mac Donald Avatar
December 12, 2010 at 8:55 AM
Looks like a winner to me Nette, though all who will enter this contest are winners by their own rights. This truly is special. Amazing what children attain and maintain. Best to you and yours, Mikki
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