Nette Onclaud Poet Quatrain

Finding God

He turns away from me to say goodbye
Quivering not, I felt a pinch...so damn alone
While the night raven screeches up high
As crystal tears bleed of why, down the bones.

Somehow, a dove climbs on my lap, to show
How the moon rises as new flowers glide;
While Heaven awaits starlight's afterglow
Enshrining this moment where peace abides.


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Gail Doyle's Finding God Contest
8/7/2014

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Teddy Kimathi August 15, 2014 at 9:23 AM A very wonderful write and win! Regards, Teddy.

Regina Mcintosh August 14, 2014 at 10:12 PM Congratulations on your win and I love your poem. God bless you.

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser August 13, 2014 at 7:40 AM Indeed this a wonderful write in Finding God..your two first stanza my fave..:) yet as always as each pen you have is new and the images are wow!!!KUDOS!

Dr. Upma A. Sharma August 13, 2014 at 5:53 AM Wow Nette an extremely mesmerising write, congrats on first place win!

Dr.Ram Mehta August 13, 2014 at 1:15 AM Congrats on a great win, Nette. A brilliant write

Robert Lindley August 12, 2014 at 9:08 PM Congrats on a huge win. A wonderful write it is!!

John Lawless August 12, 2014 at 6:06 PM Way to go Nette, great job, well deserved win.

Anne-Lise Andresen August 12, 2014 at 12:04 PM - Nette,congratulations on winning poem in: "Finding God" - Contest - Sponsored by: Gail Angel Doyle - Skillfully rhyme and beautifully written (you are always my number one :) - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison August 12, 2014 at 11:33 AM dropping back with my congrats:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Sidney Beck August 12, 2014 at 11:29 AM ABSOLUTE RUBBISH ! ! ................................ ............................................ best wishes and congrats......... K of C

Bl Devnath August 10, 2014 at 11:54 AM Pain and sorrow succumbs to uncertainty but there's way to God in which peace abides enshrining the sweet moments of life. Nicely done my lovely friend. Good luck in the contest. Loved always, bl

Len Gasun August 10, 2014 at 11:37 AM A very beautiful & great inspirational poem this is my very dear friend Nette. I love it so much. Finding our loving God is really enshrining in this stellar piece of yours. Thank u so much for sharing! Biggest hugs to u from me! Thank u so much as well for sharing your precious time to read and comment on one of my latest posted poems. God bless u and your loved ones. I miss you too! i love u. tc always. Love lots and many hugs, Leonora

Monterey Sirak August 10, 2014 at 8:37 AM Wow! One beautiful, peaceful, perfect moment.

Sara Kendrick August 7, 2014 at 5:45 PM Where peace abides is a wonderful place..Enjoyed reading your work today..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara

M. L. Kiser August 7, 2014 at 4:15 PM I was warmly immersed in this poem. You enshrine'd it very well. Love that last one about the dove on your lap; they are friendly creatures, indeed.

Manny Paras August 7, 2014 at 1:38 PM Woman, you just changed me into a saint with this majestic poem! From raven to dove; that's mighty transformational. Take a bow!

Carly Lalion August 7, 2014 at 11:40 AM Now this is a piece of poetry that grabs me deeply. I like how you express your thoughts with great metaphors, " breaths endure the sting." How profound and inspirational, Nette.

Jan Allison August 7, 2014 at 9:48 AM Imagery is sublime Nette - one day I hope to be able to write as creatively and beautifully as this:-) I particularly love the 4th stanza. Hugs Jan xxx

John Freeman August 7, 2014 at 8:31 AM Good to see and hear your beautiful grace in words Nette. three beautiful words... in the last stanza...three good Omens... Dove, Moon, Peace... Dove the symbol of the peace it brings.. peace in the joy of just being....As sure as the moon rises like a new flower guides a new day or way. And of course Love enshrines it all in life. Agape, Moses

Casarah Nance August 7, 2014 at 7:35 AM I love the third stanza the best, it really came to life in my mind, oh girl you have such a good way with words! :)