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Feel My Reprimand

This poem gives a slightly different viewpoint of the meadow in 'Two Painters,' written by Arthur Vaso. His poem can be read by visiting his site at: http://arthurvaso.weebly.com/current-poems.html


From a hill overlooking the meadow green
I watched two painters with canvas and brush
Eyes focused on each other and nature's scene
I saw when her face took on a faint tint of blush

A basket lunch was laid beneath an apple tree
Skies grew dark when the serpent slithered in
Forbidden fruit not bitten, I watched them flee
Turning away from the evil temptation of sin

The meadow is again lush with morning mist
I removed the evil one with strokes of my brush
Two painters fell in love with their first kiss
I stand at my easel listening to songs of a thrush

I created the meadow and the man with my hand
It's you, evil creature, who will feel my reprimand

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White Wolf Date: 8/27/2017 4:14:00 AM A superb sonnet, Lin! I absolutely love the line "I stand at my easel listening to songs of a thrush". And a great ending couplet too! Well done! Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 8/27/2017 1:33:00 PM Thank you very much, Rick. I appreciate that you've pointed out what you particularly like.

Robert Lindley Date: 8/25/2017 8:02:00 AM Not only is this golden but it is by any standard a wonderful top class sonnet!!!!!! Every verse a gem unto itself, the whole a massive golden treasure.... A fav.. without any doubt a ten.. Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 8/25/2017 8:24:00 AM Robert, your compliments are as dear to me as your poetry. Thank you so very much for each one.

Robert Johnson Date: 8/24/2017 10:14:00 PM Oh, if only we could change the course of reality as easy as an artist can. Love the message. Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 8/24/2017 10:19:00 PM That would be lovely. Thank you, Robert.

Jan Allison Date: 8/24/2017 10:28:00 AM Would you Adam and Eve it (believe in cockney rhyming slang) a fabulous take on Arthur's original poem Lin :-) hugs jan xx Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 8/24/2017 10:35:00 AM "Adam and Eve it" I've never heard that. Thanks for enlightening me, Jan. Thanks for liking this one. When I read Arthur's and near the end he mentioned another painter, higher in the meadow, I thought of God keeping watch over the two painters. They had more respect than Adam and Eve.

Tim Smith Date: 8/24/2017 10:05:00 AM I do love your painting that ends with love Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 8/24/2017 10:16:00 AM I have to give credit to a higher being for that, Tim. Glad you like it.

Vladislav Raven Date: 8/24/2017 9:59:00 AM Hi Lin, this is a beautiful sonnet, the imagery singing onto the canvas of my mind. An excellent piece of poetry, as always. I was drawn into the life of your words. May your pen ever run gold. Hugs....Mike. XX Has to go into my faves. Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 8/24/2017 10:15:00 AM Thanks so very much, Mike.

Cheryl Hoffman Date: 8/24/2017 9:42:00 AM Great creative write that drew me in!~Che :) Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 8/24/2017 9:45:00 AM Thanks very much, Che. Don't bite the apple ;-)