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Fear Minichu

Heart silently shivers
when the roaring clouds burst in electrical light
mind quivers

Trembling in tears
breathlessness, as stars wane from sight
kohl fears

Inked sky
faded twilight
sigh

Heart silently shivers
breathlessness, as stars wane from sight
sigh

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Linda Alice Fowler Date: 10/11/2023 2:34:00 PM Congratulations Inky! :) Login to Reply

Karen Jones Date: 10/7/2023 9:04:00 PM Congrats on your win! Login to Reply Ink Empress Date: 10/7/2023 9:38:00 PM Thnk u

I Am Anaya Date: 10/7/2023 7:01:00 PM Congratulations on your win! Best for sure. ;) Login to Reply Ink Empress Date: 10/7/2023 7:06:00 PM Thank you sweet soul you are the best

Sotto Poet Date: 10/7/2023 9:35:00 AM Fear predominates everywhere, which is fitting given the nature of the contest. Fear causes shaking, sobbing, shortness of breath, silent shivering of the heart, and quaking of the mind. Excellent work, especially considering the complexity of the form you chose to use. Wonderful work apt for all accolades, hearty congratulations on your contest win. Login to Reply Ink Empress Date: 10/7/2023 7:06:00 PM Such a profound comment thank you so very much for your well wishes grateful

Unseeking Seeker Date: 10/6/2023 7:32:00 PM Great take on the contest, IE, superbly penned Login to Reply Ink Empress Date: 10/6/2023 10:51:00 PM Thank u seeker i tried. Appreciate ur support

Sara Kendrick Date: 10/6/2023 12:07:00 PM IE, some of those thunder and lightning storms we get are very frightening almost like a scary movie in a very scary scene when it seems something reaches out and grabs you. Thanks for sharing this one and for dropping by my page. This one reads like a good contender for the contest that is if it is an entry. Sara K Login to Reply Ink Empress Date: 10/6/2023 10:25:00 PM Where are you at sara? Thats so scary, the worst thunderstorms iv experienced ever were in Malaysia, so loud it’s deafening. My friends laugh when i cry. But seriously its so scary

Silent One Date: 10/6/2023 11:49:00 AM Wow you've really done one of the best I have read in this form... Will be surprised if this is not a winner.. i can feel the angst and pain in you words and the loneliness... fear can arise in such situations, especially when it is not our own choice.. nice rhymes and very dark imagery... your three lines in the last stanza fall togher very well... i wished i had thought of sky and sigh as a rhyme.. well done.. you do not need a mentor, you have grown poetic wings now.. fly and soar in glory.. Login to Reply Ink Empress Date: 10/6/2023 10:24:00 PM I may not be a winner but Thats okay, i accept it now, and this was inspired by your minichu, i may seem like i dont need a mentor, its not always about needing, its about wanting too. I have alot to learn befo i rest. Do i need chocolates? No! But i want them everyday for my sanity! Stay blessed. Thanks for your warm visit

Paige Hind Date: 10/6/2023 10:15:00 AM This is very beautiful. I really really liked this, it's so unusual, emotive, and original. Login to Reply Ink Empress Date: 10/6/2023 10:20:00 AM Awwn you are truly a gem

Tom Woody Date: 10/6/2023 7:08:00 AM Every dog's sentiments lol. I've never feared storms much but know some who do. You expressed the terror well Login to Reply Ink Empress Date: 10/6/2023 10:08:00 AM Haha yes im like a lil puppy when its thunderstorms hate them so much . Thank u its a bit different but i tried

Joanna Daniel Date: 10/6/2023 6:01:00 AM This is beautifully crafted, Ink:) I love that "kohl fears" line.. Simple fear etched fearlessly:) Login to Reply Ink Empress Date: 10/6/2023 10:08:00 AM Awwn thank u beautiful. I tried . Was an interesting form

Victor Buhagiar Date: 10/6/2023 5:30:00 AM You describe fear so well. Blessings. Login to Reply Ink Empress Date: 10/6/2023 10:08:00 AM That means alot thank u so much

Vijay Pandit Date: 10/6/2023 5:03:00 AM Succinctly done in this difficult to execute form, Ink. Fear reigns throughout-apt for the contest theme. Trembling in tears breathlessness--Heart silently shivers--mind quivers--Fear it is! Well done, my friend. Login to Reply Ink Empress Date: 10/6/2023 10:09:00 AM Ah Vijay u are always so kind thank u so much i appreciate ur support

The Aura Rhymes Date: 10/6/2023 4:29:00 AM Awww sweet Login to Reply Ink Empress Date: 10/6/2023 10:09:00 AM Awwn how sweet lol

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 10/6/2023 2:45:00 AM - Feelings like the worst thunderstorm ... a deep poem, Ink - hugs Login to Reply Ink Empress Date: 10/6/2023 10:10:00 AM Any sort of thunderstorm scared me to death thank u beautiful

Lioness Onpaper Date: 10/6/2023 1:30:00 AM when the roaring clouds burst in electrical light..mind quivers..mmmm..Inked sky faded twilight sigh.. look these lines … damn papi., like a cat that jumps out of fear aeee… XD.. Heart silently shivers breathlessness, as stars wane from sight... love that ending .. gorgeous piece Login to Reply Ink Empress Date: 10/6/2023 10:10:00 AM Papi how gorgeous of u thank u so much

Hiya Sharma Date: 10/6/2023 1:08:00 AM Woah, the way you've described fear in a very creative and evocative way is truly heartfelt and poignant! I marvel at your wonderful talent of expressing such deep & aching emotions within such few words, that too, so poetically.."roaring skies burst in electrical light" Ahh, the vulnerability associated with it and the texture of angst, really are visible in a soul stirring dimension here.."breathlessness, as stars wane from sight" "Kohl fears", "Trembling in tears", " Inked sky" Wow, love this Login to Reply Ink Empress Date: 10/6/2023 1:14:00 AM Lol its quite restricted form but I wanted to give it a go, probably mine is awful, thank u sweet angelic soul, u are truly a gem u see beauty in everything i weave u are truly too kind: bless u