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Farewell, Mom's Worn Out Slippers

“We made the spring cut!” Said Rose the tattered gown. “I was worried for a while, till she pulled me from the toss pile.” “You’ve still a lot of wear left.” Said Bea the threadbare robe. "She likes how soft you have become, so you’re nowhere close to done.” “I’m glad you made the cut too.” Said Rose the tattered gown. "You were a gift from her mother, she’d part first with the others." “I wasn’t really worried.” Said Bea the threadbare robe. “Though I think I’ll get some patches, and maybe new elastic.” “I’m a little frayed at the hem.” Said Rose the tattered gown. “A few stitches here and there, I’ll be in good repair.” “I feel sad for the slippers.” Said Bea the threadbare robe. “I’d say they served her well, but were too worn out to sale.” “Yes, I glimpsed them in the bag.” Said Rose the tattered gown. “She was reluctant to make the toss, but new one’s will fill the loss.” “One day that will be us.” Said Bea the threadbare robe. “I vow to go quietly, and keep a little dignity.” “I hope I can be brave then.” Said Rose the tattered gown. “I’ll have to wait and see, when that time comes for me.” “Farewell, worn out slippers.” Said Bea the threadbare robe. “Yes, farewell old friends.” Said Rose the tattered gown. Personification: Robe (Bea) and Gown (Rose) and Owner (Mom)

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Date: 6/1/2012 6:40:00 AM
I just love this one. I think it's so unique and fun! Thanks for stopping by to read mine also!
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Date: 5/25/2012 10:31:00 AM
Congratulations on the win. Very creative!
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Date: 5/25/2012 2:46:00 AM
debra, this is amazing in style and concept.. congrats with huggs! :)
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Date: 5/24/2012 6:31:00 PM
Debra, very touching, congratulations In Debbie, Fairy Tail Contest"' it was an amazing hit ;-) have yourself a good one~PD
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Date: 5/24/2012 5:14:00 PM
Wonderful piece,Debra.Congratulations on your well deserved win..
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Date: 5/24/2012 6:44:00 AM
Congratulations Debra on your well deserved win. Love, Carol
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Date: 5/24/2012 2:19:00 AM
DEb congrats on your great 1st place win..David
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Date: 5/23/2012 5:57:00 PM
Congratulations on an imaginative write. And on yur win.
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Date: 5/15/2012 11:45:00 AM
Absolutely fantastic..may I suggest you please name the characters..the owner, the slipper & the gown [an A can always become an A+!] Light & Love PS. Please make normal line breaks..single spaced except between verses? HUGS!!
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Date: 5/15/2012 11:42:00 AM
Absolutely fantastic..may I suggest you please name the characters..the owner, the slipper & the gown [an A can always become an A+!] Light & Love PS. Please make normal line breaks..single spaced except between verses? HUGS!!
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Date: 1/23/2012 12:20:00 PM
Congratulations, I am so happy to see you on the winners list Debra. Love, Carol
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Date: 1/23/2012 4:00:00 AM
rooting for this one, debra... wowie congrats! :) huggs!
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Date: 1/22/2012 8:50:00 PM
Congratulations on winning in the contest. A lot of imagination here as articles of clothing are given the magical ability to talk.
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Date: 1/21/2012 4:30:00 PM
That was very smart of you thinking to do a conversation between inanimate objects. Why didn't I think of that?? Congrats. I enjoyed this.
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Date: 1/21/2012 1:46:00 PM
congrats Debra on a fantastic win for a grand conversation piece luv.. awesome..
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Date: 1/20/2012 9:44:00 AM
This is really cute. I think it would be a good one for a childrens book. Love the way you give them personality. I know favorite comfy things do have a way of becoming like good friends. We hate to give them up. God Bless, JB
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Date: 1/19/2012 8:39:00 PM
i love the way this was woven like a cut from a child's book or a fairy tale.. imaginative and compelling.. a winner for me, dear debra! :) huggs
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Debra Squyres
Date: 1/20/2012 5:47:00 AM
Thank you, Nette Onclaud. Light poetry form seems to fit it better. God Bless.
Date: 1/19/2012 2:49:00 PM
Okay..everyone else felt as good about this lil hit as I did...u are so imaginative..Hey, Soup mail Nette Onclaud and ask her if you have the right form..narrative..she is my expert reference poet here on the Soup. She is a wise wise gal. I will stop back by to see what she says..she's busy busy...give her a few days to get back with you. High 5 girlie. Gwendolen
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Debra Squyres
Date: 1/19/2012 4:58:00 PM
Thanks Gwendolen...I sent her some soup mail. I'm in no hurry. I hope she won't mind and...thank you for your comments !!
Date: 1/19/2012 2:45:00 PM
Debra Debra Debra...Have you been snooping in my closet? ha ha..all my clothes are worn out and this is probably what my apparel discusses when I am in the shower...haha..The idea behind this narrative is superb..I loved the conversation over the lil things in life which brings this piece such magic..I can see this as an additional act in Cinderella as she tosses out her old slippers for the Prince's..I really love this one..Gotta read what others have wrote..sometimes gems like these are missed on the soup.
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Debra Squyres
Date: 1/20/2012 5:51:00 AM
I hate throwing things away !! Especially if I can see some more use in them. I will wear things out comepletly before I replace them. I wrote this after sorting through some old clothes for a garage sale.
Date: 1/19/2012 5:44:00 AM
I had a good laugh from this. I have sometimes considered actually standing my slippers vertically in the garden to create some sort of Stonehenge for people to speculate the meaning centuries from now. ;-)
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Date: 1/17/2012 7:46:00 PM
lol... and here i wrote a poem about shoes... and failed to mention slippers... i love the narrative poem.. love it..always..p.d.
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Date: 1/17/2012 2:08:00 PM
Love it - love the originality - love how, at 82, I can identify. Love, Old daver
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Date: 1/17/2012 12:43:00 PM
sad but true, they walk all over you and then they're through
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Date: 1/16/2012 2:35:00 PM
Its hard to come up with something new...but you sure did...I will never feel the same about throwing out old clothes..lol. I sure enjoyed this. BG
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Date: 1/16/2012 10:51:00 AM
This is really cool Debra. Talk about personification! Talking clothes// You having Martinis for breakfast? : ) Hey isn't there a conversation contest going on?
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Debra Squyres
Date: 1/16/2012 11:15:00 AM
Yes, I entered it in the conversation contest and thank you. No Martinis lol....don't think I've ever had one. Rarely drink alchohol at all...sometimes on special occasions I may have a glass of wine or a margarita...one only lol .
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