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Far Better It Would Be

She watched them from the terrace. Her heart reeled to see them falling, cut down by the foe. And her dear husband on that crimson field was also slain. The sun, blood red, dipped low. The months have passed. She’s not the only one of wives bereft with husbands in the ground. Their farms! How will the heavy work get done? And when again will the endearing sound of children’s laughter in the village ring? Their strongest sons and some young daughters too were snatched away from them. Great suffering is all she knows, for little can they do! Far better it would be if all the town had perished when their men had been cut down. Jan. 13, 2019 for Mark Massey's War Sonnet Poetry Contest Now for John Hamilton's 2019 Best Sonnet Poetry Contest

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Date: 1/2/2020 11:22:00 PM
Congratulations on your win in John Hamilton, Best Sonnet Contest. Hugs Eve
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Date: 1/1/2020 7:18:00 PM
Beautiful, Andrea. Congrats on your win.
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Date: 1/1/2020 4:09:00 PM
A heartbreaker! "The sun, blood red, dipped low" says so much. Wonderful meter, rhyme, and enjambment, as always, true sonneteer. Congrats! ~ John
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Date: 1/1/2020 2:01:00 PM
great sonnet lovely Andrea, congrats and Happy New Year! hugs from across the miles x:-)-luloo
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Date: 1/1/2020 1:36:00 PM
Nice sonnet Andrea, congrats on a fine placement!
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Date: 3/6/2019 1:43:00 PM
Lovely poem with express use of special symbolism Andrea..
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Date: 1/22/2019 7:28:00 AM
Congrats Andrea, as I read below you thought of centuries ago yet your write reads true through many centuries as fields and meadows became battlefields. Poignant write.
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Date: 1/20/2019 3:49:00 PM
Outstanding verse, Andrea! This could become a classic - congrats! And thx for your kind comments re my win - Bob
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Date: 1/19/2019 7:36:00 PM
Very emotional and so well-written, Andrea. You captured the pain of war with your poetic imagery. Congratulations on your podium win! Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 1/19/2019 2:33:00 PM
Yes. War is hardest on the survivors. This flows so naturally, and shows such mastery of the language -- I hope you're not tired of praise! During one of the first battles of the civil war, many of the women went to watch the Northern troops 'whup' the upstart Southerners, only to see so many good men die! Excellent! Tender,, and full of feeling! Really reaches the 'old soldier' in me.
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Date: 1/19/2019 10:56:00 AM
Andrea, awesome written poem that arouses strong emotions. Congratulations on your win!:). Hugs Eve ~`*
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Date: 1/19/2019 9:22:00 AM
Congratulations on your win, Andrea. So well-deserved! Hugs, Carolyn
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Date: 1/19/2019 8:43:00 AM
Congratulations Andrea, well done..
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Date: 1/17/2019 1:23:00 PM
My gosh, how you shine when you write sonnets! You are so good at taking on a voice and writing with such empathy and truth.
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Date: 1/16/2019 8:17:00 PM
Hello Andrea … the futility of war leaves victims dead and alive, and for what. Nicely written Andrea - Lindsay
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Date: 1/16/2019 12:39:00 AM
Very moving Andrea. War is hell and leaves lives battered. You have expressed it superbly! : ) xxoo
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Date: 1/15/2019 8:39:00 AM
Yourwrite adds a very sincere, personal touch to the tragedies our war throughout our time. Because war will always be about the ones who suffered from it not about the actual conflict itself.
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Date: 1/14/2019 4:15:00 PM
a beautiful and very powerful poem, andrea! best of luck in the contest...
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Date: 1/14/2019 11:50:00 AM
Hi Andrea, What a sad but beautiful poem you have penned my friend. I felt for all the women that lost their husbands, sons and fathers. This is a win - hope you got soup mail. Poetry hugs and wishes, Jenny
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Date: 1/14/2019 11:00:00 AM
Andrea, oh what an emotional poem, you captured the scars of war, best of luck in the contest but this will always and forever be a winner for me ~
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Date: 1/14/2019 7:56:00 AM
Your words capture the tragedy of war and its aftermath..so much pain and suffering!
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Date: 1/14/2019 4:14:00 AM
This piece was filled with great imagery and evoked emotion of sadness. Nicely done!
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Date: 1/13/2019 9:10:00 PM
Hi Andrea, You've penned such a heartfelt and moving piece on war. People often forget about the other side of war. Wives who lost their husbands and children that lost their father. Although I salute the men and women for their service, war can bring much devastation. You expressed that point very well. I hope to see you on the winners list with this well written write. Best wishes:-) Alexis
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Date: 1/13/2019 8:32:00 PM
A beautiful poem that explains so many feelings that surface only during war time.
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Date: 1/13/2019 7:46:00 PM
In those days right after World War II, there must have been a lot of single mothers struggling to raise their families after their husbands had lost their lives. You capture the feelings that tormented them so well, Andrea. Best wishes in the War Sonnet contest! I'm sure this will do well. Hugs, Carolyn
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Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 1/13/2019 10:35:00 PM
When I read "farms," I thought it might be the Civil War, which was fought in areas where people lived and farmed. Certainly the medieval times would work well too. The serfs then had nothing but small pieces of land to work on behalf of the landowners.I imagine if the women and children couldn't make their parcels profitable, they would have been cast out. Nice write, Andrea!
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 1/13/2019 8:13:00 PM
I was picturing the medieval times when they took the young as slaves. Can you imagine the horror of living in those days? thanks for stopping by. I spent the day just writing!!

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