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Fancy Light (COLLAB) Dr Ram by~ DR RAM: Once her tumbled hair was bright with flame That her eyes sapphire with twinkling stars And her lips were never to be missed to kiss. She accepted a man who offered her bounty Knowing there was a beast in him though. She thought he is a changed man now And he has sloughed off the skin he wore. As the time passed when her beauty faded...... by~ POET D: She became one again, no longer a pair Two strangers all over again, Walking a path alone in her hall way. Pleasure in the dark * alone * tonight! A beast she became in her own world Wakening to the morning bells of Spring Unchained from a bounty without promise Removing all doubt, the milk on her face begun to gain color. A Collaboration with *Dr Ram ~MY COLLABORATION CONTEST~

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 2/4/2016 10:59:00 PM
love ya **SKAT**
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Date: 9/18/2014 5:36:00 PM
A lovely collaboration.
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Date: 10/27/2011 10:19:00 AM
you give people a chance to collab with you and this is what you get .... great job!!!
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Date: 8/27/2011 7:27:00 AM
This is a lovely poem, by two of my most beloved author's. I am green with envey,I you don't do it with me! I know that it is hard, but is can be fun...It's you and me now baby, let the writing begun/(began really) You and DR. RAM Complement's each other! Love your's especially....this is a favorite, to beat all favorite's!!!!!! Your friend in the pen/G.FIELDS Keep the write-up, Up. Kiss>Kiss/Kiss-up.....
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Date: 7/28/2011 5:05:00 AM
A real interesting creation from you both well worth the readP D}, & thank you for your comments, i am really busy at the moment, also i am having trouble getting service on my computer..i tried for 2 hrs last night! so i hope all my friends on the soup will be patient with me.!
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Date: 7/25/2011 11:35:00 AM
"The milk of her face begun to gain color" I love this expression. Nice collaboration with Dr. Ram :)
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Date: 7/20/2011 10:14:00 PM
well, it's a bit hard for me to understand, but I really like the feeling of it, PD. Once again you matched him in style. I think you are very good at matching styles. soupmail.
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Date: 7/20/2011 9:44:00 PM
Very nice tale you weave here. Filled with longing and disillusionment and just a touch of mystery. Nice job. God Bless, JB
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Date: 7/20/2011 5:51:00 PM
this was penned beautifully !
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Date: 7/20/2011 5:10:00 PM
You did a good job of blending, I like to do one with you too but not for the contest I don't think it's good form to judge your own verses. I am glad it's inspiring you. light & love
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Date: 7/20/2011 8:24:00 AM
oh how lovely u two teamed up PD my BFF.. wonderful words stirring and inspiring much.. good luck with this lovely piece.. far as mine ..breaks can be after every fourth line or put all 13 together as one.. I think better as one luv.. whatever u decide just let me know ..then we will post the finished product.. OK.. glad u liked the lines luv..your BFF forever..
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Date: 7/20/2011 6:01:00 AM
Interesting work..I especially liked the last three lines of Dr. Ram..Sad this does happen so many times today..The way that the shunned handled the rejection was excellent.Thanks for stopping by, reading and giving a kind review of my work...Sara
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Date: 7/20/2011 5:59:00 AM
I have read your poetry today and in my mind it is an interesting and awesome piece P.D. I will return again soon to read more of your writings. Love, Carol
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Date: 7/20/2011 5:55:00 AM
hmm interesting collab and well done in keeping with the thoughts expressed. Just good literature in my understanding. Nicely done together. I can see where this could get your creative juices flowing for sure
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Date: 7/19/2011 11:19:00 PM
Ps. Smile, *^_^* “Just Wished to Stop Back By & Say Thank You *^_^* My Dear for The Visit & Kind Com & Yesss, I Shall Take Care As Also Your Beauties Self, Beautiful LeeAnn.” === My Love to You As Always, Jasper *
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Date: 7/19/2011 9:55:00 PM
Smile, *^_^* “I Really Love The Depth Found Within These Wonderfully Expressed & Spoken Words = My Dear Precious & Priceless, Blessed & Beautiful LeeAnn == To Bring to Life A Canvas & Allow Another to Step Into The Beauty of Anothers Deepest Heart *^_^* As A Viewer Tis What One Searches for To Be Touched & To Touch, The Spirit of Another *^_^* Entwined Amid A Moment In Time With, Something Very Beautiful *^_^* Just Like You &, Tis A Fave.” === My Love to You Always & Forever, Jasper *
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Date: 7/19/2011 8:40:00 PM
Great Collaboration PD and Dr. Ram. Lainie
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Date: 7/19/2011 6:44:00 PM
well that was a great collaboration you two
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Date: 7/19/2011 6:37:00 PM
a breast? this reminds me of two of my favorite heroines. one hester pryne of the scarlett letter and the other joan of arc. both knowing their place in society followed their destinies each to her own. i loved both pieces. and perhaps i'll join in. johnny
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Date: 7/19/2011 6:30:00 PM
PLEASE EVERY ONE ENJOY ,, EACH AND EVERY ONE OF MY COLLABORATIONS. HOPEFULLY I ACCOMPLISH ALL 35..LOL.. TAKE CARE..X-X-X-X-X-X HUGS,, P.D.
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Date: 7/19/2011 6:22:00 PM
this is awesome nicely done.. Soup Mail I sent it to you in a previous email.. cory
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