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Famous Last Line

STAND BY ME Oh my darling the news is so bleak I saw the consultant only last week Think we better start making plans See the vicar; hear the wedding banns All I’ve ever wanted was to be your wife For better for worse, through trouble and strife The consultant confirmed I’ll not last the year Oh kiss me my darling; just hold me so near Wedding plans float around in my head My dying wish is that we should wed Time is running out so we mustn’t linger I want your wedding ring upon my finger A simple ceremony, just as quiet as can be All I ask my darling is that you stand by me SIDE BY SIDE All I ask my darling is that you stand by me My life is slowly ebbing away you see We always dreamed that one day we’d wed I don’t have long on this earth, and soon I’ll be dead I know our hasty wedding is not the way we planned Having spoken to the vicar, I know he understands We talked about our future, but now our plans must change Today we’ll be declared man and wife with gold rings exchanged We had so many plans of how our lives would be Sadly god has a very different plan for me Tears flow down our cheeks, as we become man and wife I will love you my darling for the rest of my life My dying wish was to be your bride Now I can face my fate with you close by my side Contest: Famous Last Line: Sponsored by Laura Loo 02~28~16

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/20/2016 11:47:00 PM

Hi Jan, I meant LINDA, not Lina. LOL... PD

Jan Allison
Date: 3/21/2016 3:11:00 PM

LOL:-) hugs jan xx

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/20/2016 11:39:00 PM

Jan, Congratulations on your awesome "Famous last line win." ~LINA~

Jan Allison
Date: 3/21/2016 3:10:00 PM

Thanks so much Linda:-) hugs Jan xx

Winged Warrior

Date: 3/19/2016 8:42:00 AM

Wow! double sonnets...double wins...congrats on wins...^WW^

Jan Allison
Date: 3/19/2016 8:51:00 AM

Thanks so much ^WW^ hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 3/18/2016 6:47:00 PM

Congratulations on your win!!!!! Hugs Eve

Jan Allison
Date: 3/18/2016 6:49:00 PM

Many thanks Eve:-) hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 3/18/2016 3:52:00 AM

Jan, your moving poems really touched me deeply. A childhood friend knew she was dying of Hotchkns but was able to marry her dream man when she was eighteen. I was at her wedding and so happy for her. Next time I went to see her a year or so later I was told she had died. It still saddens me. Congratulations on your first placement with this fine offering! #7

Jan Allison
Date: 3/18/2016 8:44:00 AM

Oh Connie what a sad story - sadly I hear of this more and more these days:-( The original poem was such an emotinal writel and I was so pleased for the opportunity to continue the story with this contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Seren Roberts

Date: 3/17/2016 11:26:00 PM

Jan this is brilliant, big big congrats...... Seren

Jan Allison
Date: 3/18/2016 8:42:00 AM

Thanks so much Seren:-) hugs Jan xx

Anisha Dutta

Date: 3/17/2016 11:23:00 PM

Congrats JAN to win on two most beautiful poems. Love. Anisha D

Jan Allison
Date: 3/18/2016 8:42:00 AM

Thanks Anisha:-) hugs Jan xx

Joanna Daniel

Date: 3/17/2016 11:01:00 PM

A heart touching and a heart wrenching write:) congratulations on your well deserved win. A 7.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/18/2016 8:41:00 AM

Many thanks Jo:-) hugs Jan xx

Joyce Johnson

Date: 3/17/2016 10:57:00 PM

Such sad writing, but it is a winner. Congratulations. love, Joyce

Jan Allison
Date: 3/18/2016 8:41:00 AM

Many thanks Joyce the original poem is a favourite of mine:-) hugs Jan xx

Brian Mcclain

Date: 3/17/2016 5:36:00 PM

Hi Jan, Heart-wrenchingly sad and beautiful poem. What else can I say?--other than congratulations on your win. Cheers, Brian

Jan Allison
Date: 3/17/2016 7:51:00 PM

Many thanks for your lovely comment Brian:-) hugs Jan xx

Laura Leiser

Date: 3/17/2016 5:31:00 PM

Such a sad, but beautifully expressed poem, Jan. Congrats on your win :)

Jan Allison
Date: 3/17/2016 7:51:00 PM

Thanks Laura I was so glad to have the chance to continue the original poem:-) hugs Jan xx

Charlie Smith

Date: 3/17/2016 5:01:00 PM

Great going, congratulations Jan...

Jan Allison
Date: 3/17/2016 7:50:00 PM

Many thanks Charlie:-) hugs Jan xx

Vladislav Raven

Date: 3/17/2016 4:17:00 PM

Hi Jan, back to give you my congratulations on your 1st place win in the contest, richly deserved. It is a seven and a fave....MIKE.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/17/2016 7:50:00 PM

Many thanks for all your support Mike :-) hugs Jan xx

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 3/17/2016 2:23:00 PM

Good for you! Well deserved. BG

Jan Allison
Date: 3/17/2016 3:35:00 PM

Many thanks Barbara I was so pleased to be able to continue the original poem:-) hugs Jan xx

Lu Loo

Date: 3/17/2016 11:35:00 AM

Jan, congrats on your top placement in my contest! I loved the emotions I felt reading it..:)-luloo *smiles*

Jan Allison
Date: 3/17/2016 3:35:00 PM

Thanks so much LuLoo - as soon as I saw the contest I knew I wanted to continue with this poem:-) hugs jan xx

Vladislav Raven

Date: 3/10/2016 2:57:00 PM

Hi Jan, an excellent piece. Your continuation is brilliant. You have written a piece with such deep emotions, two separate poems making a whole. All told Jan, this is an excellent write. I wish you well in the contest Jan. Hugs....MIKE. XX. A definite 7 and a fave.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/10/2016 5:25:00 PM

Thanks Mike the original stand by me poem was such an emotional write and when I saw the contest I knew this was the poem i wanted to continue:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/28/2016 7:28:00 PM

Jan, you were able to add on to the tale, and sad though it was, have the couple be married. A heart wrenching piece. Sure wish i could think up something for this one.

Jan Allison
Date: 2/29/2016 7:30:00 AM

As soon as I saw the contest I knew this was the poem I wanted to continue:-) hugs Jan xx

Constance La France

Date: 2/28/2016 4:16:00 PM

Jan, this is so sadly beautiful, perfectly written, a winner to me, well done ~

Jan Allison
Date: 2/28/2016 4:29:00 PM

Thanks so much Broken Wings:-) hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 2/28/2016 3:02:00 PM

Your entry melds beautifully with your first poem Jan. A sad but touching ending! I wish you good luck in the contest Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 2/28/2016 3:14:00 PM

Thanks so much Connie it is a very emotional subject and I was so pleased to have the opportunity to continue the sad story:-) hugs Jan xx

Eileen Manassian

Date: 2/28/2016 2:21:00 PM

Wow...that's quite the write, Jan. You did a great job. It is terribly sad...I'm glad it is just a fictional piece. hugs

Jan Allison
Date: 2/28/2016 2:29:00 PM

Fiction for me Eileen but its a sad reality for some:-( hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight

Date: 2/28/2016 1:57:00 PM

A lovely 'continuation' of your first poem, Jan. All the best for the contest. Hugs, Sandra

Jan Allison
Date: 2/28/2016 2:04:00 PM

Many thanks for dropping by and for your soup mail:-) hugs Jan xx

Arthur Vaso

Date: 2/28/2016 12:51:00 PM

This is so touching, that is for sure true love, even sad! Love how you did this in two!

Jan Allison
Date: 2/28/2016 12:54:00 PM

The contest is to use the last line of one poem to start the next - as soon as i saw the contest details I knew I had to do a continuation of the original stand by me poem:-) hugs Jan xx