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Falling Back

I can't keep up. I'm just a kid, but I won't give up. You can't get rid of me. I'm fallin' behind, fallin' back. Myself I find behind the pack -. that's me. I can't keep up. I'm an old man, but I won't give up. Look in your rearview, man. That's me.

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Kim Rodrigues

Date: 11/9/2024 3:38:00 PM

Saw you were featured. Read again…did not disappoint!

David Crandall
Date: 11/10/2024 1:01:00 PM

Thanks Kim :-)

Mark Toney

Date: 11/9/2024 8:42:00 AM

Thank you for supporting my Flash Poetry Challenge, David. Your poem was randomly chosen to feature in my 'Results' blog, which is now up and running. I can't help but feel you've summed up my life in three stanzas! ;-)

David Crandall
Date: 11/9/2024 11:00:00 AM

Great! Haha, it's good to know someone else is in the same boat :-)

Lin Lane

Date: 11/4/2024 3:06:00 AM

You just sailed through your life in three verses, David. lol

David Crandall
Date: 11/4/2024 7:30:00 AM

That's pretty fast when you come to think of it - lol

Ink Empress

Date: 11/3/2024 10:49:00 AM

Very lyrical poem dear david, i love it and made me wonder what the opening line meant or what you had in mind when you wrote that, i love the ending too, made me sing somehow as i read these words. Hope you are feeling better. Sending you light always~

David Crandall
Date: 11/3/2024 11:01:00 AM

Thanks for your compliments and interest, Ink. I was listening to a doo-wop show on public radio when I wrote it, but about that first verse, I just had a picture of a kid, struggling to keep up with his mom or dad, as you often see. I also, sometimes think of how I tried to keep up with my older brothers as a kid. Something about trying so hard to keep up, when one is challenged. Working on my cornbread and ginger tea breakfast now.

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 11/2/2024 10:25:00 PM

I like the steady rhyme. I fall back every November. The days are too short to stay ahead.

David Crandall
Date: 11/2/2024 10:26:00 PM

Thanks Hilda!

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 11/2/2024 2:55:00 PM

Love this, David! Could read again. Fave

David Crandall
Date: 11/2/2024 5:46:00 PM

Thanks Kim - glad to hear that you like it! One of my favorite stories is the one about the tortoise and the hare.