Fallen Leaves

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Humans are quite a deciduous lot. It's our nature, but not Mother's motif. We fall from grace without faith and belief when fleshly flaws make us stumble, besot. Tousled emotions are tied in a knot as though weatherbeaten, love ends in grief. Reddened eyes, the shade of a cast-off leaf from tears spilled and splattered like an ink blot. We fall in and out of love. It's a chance taken, like planting trees for greenery. Then, we watch deciduous leaves perish, borne on blustery winds in one last dance. Windswept limbs despoil Winter's scenery. Love and lush foliage, we should cherish.

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Date: 9/5/2024 7:20:00 AM

The beginning of your sestet reminds me of planting trees four different times in our yard with no results. After discovery that we are sitting on a base of slate (hope it holds,) we are happy there are no leaves to rake. Your piece is a worthy write and deserves being read more than once. As for winning contests, hosts' tastes vary greatly. When you don't win, hope for another contest.

Lin Lane
Date: 9/7/2024 3:45:00 PM

Thank you very much for being so supportive of my poem . I appreciate your time. ;-)

Daniel Caplin

Date: 8/29/2024 12:30:00 AM

Hi Lin , this is a wonderful sonnet, and Karen is right , these are so difficult to write but it's superbly written , with so many well crafted lines "Reddened eyes, the shade of a cast-off leaf " and "borne on blustery winds in one last dance. Windswept limbs despoil Winter's scenery". We are in so many ways just like a tree. Good luck in the contest , Danny

Lin Lane
Date: 8/29/2024 4:37:00 AM

Hi Daniel and thank you for offering your supportive comments on this one. I always appreciate reviews that let me know which lines a reader most enjoyed, so I thank you again for do so. ;-)

Karen Jones

Date: 8/26/2024 11:29:00 AM

I like this poem and the form is not one I can do! Bravo

Lin Lane
Date: 8/27/2024 6:02:00 AM

Don't doubt yourself, Karen. Give it a go and thanks for the kind comment.

Jan Allison

Date: 8/26/2024 11:01:00 AM

Ive never tacked this from Lin, i think you have written a superb poem:-) hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane
Date: 8/27/2024 6:02:00 AM

It's the first I've used it, and it's not my favorite. It's a Craig contest, so I have little confidence of placing. Thanks, Jan.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 8/26/2024 10:09:00 AM

as though weatherbeaten, love ends in grief… Windswept limbs despoil Winter's scenery. Love and lush foliage, we should cherish…Very nice, Lin! We all have our thoughts in the season.

Lin Lane
Date: 8/27/2024 6:01:00 AM

Thank you very much for the many comments you leave for my poetry, Kim. I appreciate all of them.