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* This was inspired by one of the first short forms I ever wrote *

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* This is a rather intricate form I created called a “Torridelle” - I hope you enjoy it! * ~ My Angel, fallen ... Gossamer linen, violet lace Window-dressing body, pressing Goddess of unblemished grace Beckoning - urge reckoning Clasp me, push me ... down with you. Close, to see my eyes in yours Heart of darkness, warm and artless Measured with our carnal cores Fallowed - soon, unhallowed Pull me, draw me ... down with you. Savor sweet, your taste is mine Greedy swallows, fill my hollows Faultless form, engorged supine Whetted - blade unfettered Cut me, rend me ... down with you. Pity, fawn to take me in I, the frozen quarry chosen Bartered virtue, ceded sin Merging - madness surging Gather me, wrench me ... down with you. Each dynamic sates a thirst A darkened oath devours both Raptured screams yet unrehearsed Spasm - plunging chasm Drench me, drown me ... down with you. Painted nails to flay my frame Stripes of lust, a jealous trust Lesions roused for fervor's flame Unversed - do your worst Stain me, rake me ... down with you. Feral places, once denied Cognate parts to blackened hearts Souls and selves we can't divide Twisted - double-fisted Grind me, burn me ... down with you. Sing to me a siren's wail Rip the rhyme from all sublime Watch the frenzied portions flail Disguised - hell, improvised Smite me, drag me ... down with you. All in, My Angel ... fallen So sweetly, and So deeply Down. With. You. ~ 2nd Place ~ in the Poetry Soup "Wow Me" Poetry Contest, Nina Parmenter, Judge & Sponsor.

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Date: 8/27/2019 7:11:00 PM
Sensual lines to paint a siren's wail. Congrats on your win.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 1/21/2020 9:44:00 AM
Many kind thanks to you, Jeanne, I'm happy you enjoyed it, Friend! :o) <3
Date: 8/27/2019 8:40:00 AM
This certainly deserves a WOW Greg! Congratulations on your deserving silver medal! xxoo
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 1/21/2020 9:43:00 AM
Thank you so much, Connie - I'm pleased you liked it! :o) <3
Date: 8/26/2019 9:02:00 PM
Congrats on your high placement in Nina’s contest.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 1/21/2020 9:43:00 AM
Thank you very much, Richard - blessings! :o)
Date: 8/26/2019 5:04:00 PM
WOW sizzling Greg. Congratulations on your win.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 1/21/2020 9:42:00 AM
hank you so very much, Georgia - blessings, my friend! :o) <3
Date: 8/26/2019 4:43:00 PM
darkness calling to darkness... chilling yet alluring. As always WOW!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 1/21/2020 9:42:00 AM
Many kind thanks, PS - so pleased you enjoyed it, my friend! :o) <3
Date: 8/26/2019 10:23:00 AM
Is it hot in here or is it just me? Sizzle sizzle. Stunning piece Greg! Congratulations on your win! xomo <3
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 1/21/2020 9:41:00 AM
LOL Thank you so kindly, Mo - blessings! :o)
Date: 8/22/2019 10:49:00 AM
I remember this one, you made some changes right. Still a great write, I always enjoy the internal rhyme, it's a great poetic device, somehow I think I like the other version better, but this one will still win!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 1/21/2020 9:41:00 AM
Yes, indeed, my friend - so happy you liked this one, Brother - many thanks and blessings! :o)
Date: 8/22/2019 8:13:00 AM
forget WOW this is a phwhoarrrwow Greg, what a fabulous sensual poem! I think Nina will LOVE this one:-) hugs Jan xx
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 1/21/2020 9:40:00 AM
Thank you so kindly, Jan, I'm pleased you liked it, Friend! :o) <3