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He was an unpopular celebrity who enjoyed his liquid food Acting weirdly normal when he was in a happy mood He’d been on a heavy diet and was eating lots of jumbo shrimp They were disgustingly delicious with hot chili and on his diet he won't skimp His stomach was growing smaller and now looked awfully pretty I hear his dieting was an open secret and not virtual reality Once a star of film and stage he could stand out in a small crowd His face was pretty ugly but his quiet presence was quite loud This was his goodbye reception for he was now a failing star Now his full time job in his retirement is propping up the bar! 08~20~16 Contest - Oxymoronic Obsession Sponsored by David Lindsay Stanza 1 unpopular celebrity, liquid food, weirdly normal. happy mood Stanza 2 heavy diet, jumbo shrimp. disgustingly delicious, hot chili Stanza 3 growing smaller. open secret, virtual reality, awfully pretty Stanza 4 small crowd, pretty ugly, Stanza 5 goodbye reception, failing star, full time job in his retirement

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Seosamh De Burca

Date: 9/9/2016 9:39:00 AM

Congrats on you winning poem well done.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/11/2016 5:42:00 PM

Thanks Seosamh:-) hugs Jan xx

Ralph Sergi

Date: 9/8/2016 1:30:00 PM

Hi Jan: You never fail to impress me with your poetry. Great Oxymoron approach. An italian hug.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/11/2016 5:42:00 PM

Thanks Ralph I had fun with this contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Afzal Nusker

Date: 9/7/2016 11:18:00 PM

Congratulations, Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/8/2016 1:30:00 AM

Thanks Afzal:-) hugs Jan xx

Joseph May

Date: 9/7/2016 8:28:00 PM

Congrats on a great win Jan

Jan Allison
Date: 9/8/2016 1:31:00 AM

Thanks Joseph:-) hugs Jan xx

John Hamilton

Date: 9/7/2016 7:07:00 PM

Great job, so many oxymorons, a real fun read.Congrats on a fine win! Look no N/A! woo hoo!

Jan Allison
Date: 9/8/2016 1:32:00 AM

Thanks John I was delighted to place so well:-) hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 9/7/2016 6:24:00 PM

A wonderful winning entry Jan. Congratulations on your second placement! 7 ; )

Jan Allison
Date: 9/8/2016 1:33:00 AM

Thanks Connie I really enjoyed the challenge:-) hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight

Date: 9/7/2016 1:37:00 PM

Great selection of 'oxymorons', Jan. Congratulations on your podium win. Hugs, Sandra

Jan Allison
Date: 9/7/2016 2:58:00 PM

Thanks Sandra hugs Jan xx

Lu Loo

Date: 9/7/2016 1:13:00 PM

Jan, congrats on your placement! very clever and funny :)-luloo

Jan Allison
Date: 9/7/2016 2:58:00 PM

Thanks Luloo hugs Jan xx

Joanna Daniel

Date: 8/26/2016 1:30:00 AM

Great write, Jan:)

Jan Allison
Date: 9/7/2016 2:57:00 PM

Thanks Jo hugs Jan xx

Afzal Nusker

Date: 8/22/2016 4:23:00 AM

Wow, wonderfully written oxymoron with very good choice of words. Enjoyed it very much. Best wishes, Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/23/2016 1:57:00 AM

Thanks Afzal-) hugs Jan xx

Vladislav Raven

Date: 8/21/2016 4:30:00 PM

Hi Jan, excellent work again. I always enjoy the fun Jan. This one is filled with such wonderful content. I like the concept of the whole write. Never heard of this format before. You write it very well though Jan. I always enjoy the lightness and laughter that comes from your writes. Another new form, to me, you have found. This has to be a seven Jan. Hugs....Mike. XX

Jan Allison
Date: 8/21/2016 5:09:00 PM

I was aware of the oxymoron term ... googled to find some examples and made up a few of my own and had fun writing the poem Mike:-) hugs Jan xx

Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/21/2016 1:53:00 PM

Jan, I have found that great minds work in the same direction..LOL..Thanks for the visit to my page..I am looking forward to a great entry..You probably could change what you have written to suit either of the forms accepted..Sara..Enjoyed reading this contest entry..Clever oxymoron...

Jan Allison
Date: 8/21/2016 1:57:00 PM

I have written the poem for you Sara - I will work on the other poem I have started and post it another day:-) hugs Jan xx

Barry Stebbings

Date: 8/21/2016 7:46:00 AM

Clever, Jan. Love the title. Good luck with the contest. Barry.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/21/2016 8:07:00 AM

I amended the title this morning ... I'm glad you liked it:-) hugs Jan xx

Fiona Callaghan

Date: 8/21/2016 2:45:00 AM

Such fun to read Jan. Best of luck in the competition. Fiona

Jan Allison
Date: 8/21/2016 3:49:00 AM

Thanks so much for dropping by Fiona:-) hugs Jan xx

Viv Wigley

Date: 8/20/2016 4:48:00 PM

Terribly good, Jan, will do well x

Jan Allison
Date: 8/20/2016 5:48:00 PM

ha ha ha great one Mr Viv:-) hugs jan xx

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 8/20/2016 2:12:00 PM

I do like your poetry Jan I read it several times and enjoyed every time. you picked a good subject.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/20/2016 5:48:00 PM

Thanks so much for the lovely comment Darlene:-) hugs jan xx

Lynn Marie

Date: 8/20/2016 9:09:00 AM

This is fantastic Jan..I really like the subject matter, so original and so fun to read.:-) There were so many oxymorons it was great to try to spot them all, as I was thoroughly entertained. Terrific writing...My very best to you in the contest.:-) blessings, lynn

Jan Allison
Date: 8/20/2016 9:26:00 AM

Thanks Lynn it was fun to write:-) hugs Jan xx