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~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ flowers fold in the field, for freshness has failed on their forms with their faces fallen to face the field’s floor, their fate is to fade into forgetfulness

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Paige Hind

Date: 4/26/2024 7:48:00 PM

Bittersweet, but beautiful

Hilo Poet

Date: 4/23/2024 10:53:00 PM

Ah, an alliteration beheld, except for, Line 2, the others favor All Fours--not the game, in the key of 'f'-major, "you're promoted in the ranks to, Col. Sara in the RAF." Pardon, I'm giddy today, just off the phone with my son, cpl of hrs--methinks, Aloha, William

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/24/2024 4:11:00 AM

thanks for noticing the alliteration, Williams. Thanks for the promotion. Wow, fabulous that you talked with your son for a couple of hours. I can imagine how soulful and thrilling that must have been. Happy for you...thanks for sharing & have a lovely Wednesday, Sara

Sotto Poet

Date: 4/23/2024 12:43:00 PM

The poem beautifully captures the rhythm of life's ebb and flow, dear Sara. It is truly heart-wrenching to witness the loss of petals. Your ability to participate in these contests and stay faithful to the guidelines is impressive. Your writing is truly impressive, with a captivating use of alliteration and a profound emotional impact.

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/23/2024 5:03:00 PM

Hi Sotto! I agree with you...gut wrenching to see a flower lose its petals...always speaks to be of something bigger at hand that I recognize at a soul level. (If that makes sense.) I am humbly grateful with your words and observations about my entering contests. I enjoy the challenge as well as the learning that's taking place. Grateful for you and your expertise. Have a wonderful evening, your poetess friend in Texas, Sara

Silent One

Date: 4/23/2024 12:02:00 PM

Nicely done.. I enjoyed your thoughts..

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/23/2024 5:00:00 PM

thank you, Silent One! Appreciate you dropping by & enjoy your evening, Sara

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 4/23/2024 4:07:00 AM

Sadness at the wilting of one flower. How we relate it to the death of each life. The contrast between the multitude of lives lived and the depth each human brings. Love the alliteration and the beauty of your poem’s poignancy. You indeed are one of my fave poets. Faving this one, Sara! ~ Kim

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/23/2024 4:52:00 AM

awww, thank you, Kim. I agree - we do relate the wilting flower to the death of one life--insightful words on your part. Thanks for sharing them. I'm humbly grateful for the fave. More importantly, I'm deeply grateful that I've become one of your favorite poets. That means a great deal to me. Have a pleasant day, hugs & blessings, Sara

Ink Empress

Date: 4/23/2024 2:34:00 AM

Loving the alliterations in this and the evocative touch of your words truly is so very moving! Especially “ freshness has failed on their forms with their faces fallen to face the field’s“ so poignant and powerful! Pleasure always reading your work

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/23/2024 4:50:00 AM

aww, thank you, Ink, for your kind words. Glad you found my poem poignant. Appreciate your visit. Have a wonderful day, hugs, Sara

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 4/23/2024 1:42:00 AM

You are very adept at entering these contests and sticking to a particular letter. Lovely poem though. Best for a win.

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/23/2024 4:49:00 AM

thank you, dear Victor, for your encouraging words. Those mean a great deal to me. Glad you liked the poem. Wishing you a pleasant day, Sara

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 4/22/2024 6:48:00 PM

Poem brings to memory the cycle of life. It is especially sad when petals fall off.

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/23/2024 4:49:00 AM

thanks for your observations about my poem. Yes, I agree--always sad when petals fall off...perhaps because of the symbolism within them. Have a splendid day, hugs, Sara

Joseph May

Date: 4/22/2024 6:27:00 PM

"A fate of forgetfulness as blooms lose form", Very nicely done, best wishes

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/23/2024 4:48:00 AM

aww, thank you, Joseph! I appreciate your positive and encouraging comments. Have a great day, Sara