Eyes Closed

I close my eyes
Feel deep inside
My wakened heart
A brand new start
Because your eyes
Have me beguiled.

The sheer presence 
Of your essence
So close to mine
As if entwined
My spirit light
And I can fly.

Fly over lake
And mountain range
Over valleys
And hills so green
Over meadows
Where the sheep roam.

If it's a dream
Don't wake me please
Let me fly more
Our souls to soar
Till when I wake
The dream remains.

By CarolineCecile
Copyright © 05.19.10

(In this poem, I wanted to keep the four syllable count in each line. Thanks for reading, 
Caroline.)
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Horsman Avatar
May 31, 2010 at 2:38 AM
awesome poem, say everything, very much a 'Heartfelt write' harry
Strand Avatar
May 25, 2010 at 12:51 AM
You have succeeded Caroline.Makes for a pacy read.Perhaps a little punctuation here and there will help the reader.Nice original form.Rgds Brian
Byrne Avatar
May 24, 2010 at 6:25 PM
I love the sincerity of this........well done!
Knop Avatar
May 20, 2010 at 9:26 AM
Very good write, Caroline! Well, sometimes it is hard to wake up from nice dreams, but no petry without our dreams!...Keep your creative pen flowing und danke für Deine Kommentare!...All the best, Gert
Culverhouse Avatar
May 19, 2010 at 5:20 PM
good job, enjoyed
A  Avatar
May 19, 2010 at 5:14 PM
VERY ENJOYABLE READ
Devonshire Avatar
May 19, 2010 at 3:36 PM
When we have dreams like this, we never want to wake, Caroline. I often dream of flying and am always sad when I open my eyes and realize it was just a dream. The four syllable lines work well in this poem! Love, Carolyn
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May 19, 2010 at 2:07 PM
Sometimes it is not easy to do those short syllable counts...Keep the creative pen flowing..Sara
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