Eyes Closed

I close my eyes Feel deep inside My wakened heart A brand new start Because your eyes Have me beguiled. The sheer presence Of your essence So close to mine As if entwined My spirit light And I can fly. Fly over lake And mountain range Over valleys And hills so green Over meadows Where the sheep roam. If it's a dream Don't wake me please Let me fly more Our souls to soar Till when I wake The dream remains. By CarolineCecile Copyright © 05.19.10 (In this poem, I wanted to keep the four syllable count in each line. Thanks for reading, Caroline.)

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Harry Horsman

Date: 5/31/2010 2:38:00 AM

awesome poem, say everything, very much a 'Heartfelt write' harry

Brian Strand

Date: 5/25/2010 12:51:00 AM

You have succeeded Caroline.Makes for a pacy read.Perhaps a little punctuation here and there will help the reader.Nice original form.Rgds Brian

David Byrne

Date: 5/24/2010 6:25:00 PM

I love the sincerity of this........well done!

Gert W. Knop

Date: 5/20/2010 9:26:00 AM

Very good write, Caroline! Well, sometimes it is hard to wake up from nice dreams, but no petry without our dreams!...Keep your creative pen flowing und danke für Deine Kommentare!...All the best, Gert

Doris Culverhouse

Date: 5/19/2010 5:20:00 PM

good job, enjoyed

Skat A

Date: 5/19/2010 5:14:00 PM

VERY ENJOYABLE READ

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 5/19/2010 3:36:00 PM

When we have dreams like this, we never want to wake, Caroline. I often dream of flying and am always sad when I open my eyes and realize it was just a dream. The four syllable lines work well in this poem! Love, Carolyn

Sara Kendrick

Date: 5/19/2010 2:07:00 PM

Sometimes it is not easy to do those short syllable counts...Keep the creative pen flowing..Sara