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Everlasting Love

Her coffin slowly drops into the ground, the little group of mourners huddles there, all standing pokerfaced, without a sound, the vicar speaks his lines without a care... I watch and gulp the frosty morning air. Although I hadn't been there when she died, my heart is breaking, overflowing grief; it's been so many years now since she'd lied - and yes, although our love had been so brief, our feelings never died (that's my belief). And as the rest depart, I stand alone to wonder if she somehow knows I'm here. My ear detects a sudden muffled moan - has she been buried still alive? I fear, or is she telling me: 'I know you're near'? written 22nd July for Constance's Q contest - Death

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Date: 8/8/2022 3:13:00 PM
Your poem is so sweet, Jack. I bet she was telling you that. There always seems to be one love we can't forget. Congrats for your win!
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Date: 8/8/2022 3:12:00 PM
Your poem is so sweet, Jack. I bet she was telling you that. There always seems to be one love we can't forget. Congrats for your win!
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Date: 8/5/2022 5:46:00 AM
Jack, congratulations on your win in my contest with your emotional and beautiful Quintain, excellent writing, blessings ~ Constance
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Date: 8/4/2022 9:35:00 AM
This poem has the ability to reach right into the heart and give it a twist Jack. The emotions of sadness and regret stir deep within each line. Love ever faithful yet lost. Congratulations on your win. We feel our own experiences through your words. Blessings.
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Date: 8/1/2022 5:55:00 PM
Dear Jack, your poignant potent pen is brilliant! Mournful emotions so tenderly expressed with an end twist that's so amazing! I adore your style and finesse, my inspiring friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Date: 7/24/2022 7:45:00 PM
Oh wow, Jack, love this so powerful the emotion the feeling.
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Date: 7/23/2022 12:20:00 PM
Imagination going in the fast lane. Creative way to go for the contest. Reads like a good contender to me. Way to go. Thanks for the visits to my page. Sara
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Date: 7/22/2022 8:37:00 PM
hmmm, is this imagining you know who?? I really enjoyed this, Jack.
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Date: 7/22/2022 8:42:00 AM
You describe a serious moment in time with a pinch of black humour, Jack. Even a funeral can end up being pleasant, in a way! ~ Regards // paul
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