Nette Onclaud Poet Haibun

Eulogy In My Heart

Out in the middle of a large farmland, I become a girl of old charm and unexpected songs again. Past the flanks where cluttered rows of hyacinths and ferns quiver, disarranged huts begin to shake as the rough wind wheezes. And on this late July, mounds of dust remind me of summers back in my grandfather’s hometown. Yet, a different vanishing overtakes me.

a season passes…
carrying all its flowers
to emerge as buds




11/19/2015
Creative Haibun Contest
For Charlotte Jade Puddifoot

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Jessica Renee Dawson December 15, 2015 at 12:09 AM This piece is too beautiful for me to analyse with my mortal thoughts... this is absolutely breathtaking ~ J.R.

CayCay Godwin December 1, 2015 at 9:02 PM I could cry ..."..need to inhabit this space, it no longer belongs to me..." Oh, Nette - as an Army brat who has often 'gone back', I so well know that feeling and have often tried to capture it in words. Your write is loaded with talent, the opening sentence is fantastic and it just keeps drawing the reader in. I could go on and on about how very good it is. Congratulations on your well-deserved win - just beautiful ... CayCay

Skat A November 28, 2015 at 3:12 PM Nette, :) A nice and creative win. Love SKAT

Robert Lindley November 28, 2015 at 1:10 PM EPIC WRITE MY FRIEND. Such great creativity and poetic talent you display with each and every poem you present here! A7

Scott Thirtyseven November 28, 2015 at 6:54 AM I'm tweeting links to the winners of this great contest.

Connie Marcum Wong November 27, 2015 at 1:23 PM Nette, you have outdone yourself on this beauty! A fave for me! #7 Congratulations on your well deserved first place!

Dan Cwiak November 27, 2015 at 10:16 AM Great imagery and write, Nette. Congrats on a well deserved win.

Scott Thirtyseven November 27, 2015 at 7:24 AM Magnificent win. A powerful write.

Dr. Upma A. Sharma November 26, 2015 at 9:32 PM Eloquent write nette... congrats on first place win!

Heather Ober November 26, 2015 at 3:02 PM Nette, this is outstanding - an instant fav for me!! Such a touching topic, one that many can relate to. Your haiku sparkle like gems throughout. Congratulations!

James Inman November 26, 2015 at 12:22 PM Wonderful write Nette, Emotional and deep.

David Mohn November 26, 2015 at 11:39 AM stunningly graced with melancholic brilliance...congrats on a well deserved #1 Nette

Balveen Cheema November 26, 2015 at 10:37 AM Nette, congrats on your placement! A nostalgic write!

Jan Allison November 26, 2015 at 6:41 AM absolutely beautiful Nette such an emotional poem congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx

Charlotte Puddifoot November 26, 2015 at 6:39 AM nette, this is beautifully written with poignancy, excellent use of language, too many striking images for me to pick out just one; that second haiku is particularly lovely - congrats on your 1st place win in my contest!

Kayod5 Kayode November 26, 2015 at 6:38 AM Congrats on the win nette...hugs

Duke Beaufort November 21, 2015 at 7:31 AM Well, you are his flower. Your thoughts of him and your tears are a real tribute. We are only just visiting this wonderful world.

Arthur Vaso November 20, 2015 at 2:40 PM absolutely loved this poem

Leon Enriquez November 19, 2015 at 4:23 PM Dear Nette: Lovely read. Lovely write. Simply lovely. Glad I found time to visit you my friend. You have a way with words that touch profoundly. ;) Leon.

Poet Tacito November 19, 2015 at 11:36 AM I truly miss a good Haibun. This was majestic, to say the least.

Carol Eastman November 19, 2015 at 11:13 AM An amazing write!

Ralph Sergi November 19, 2015 at 7:10 AM Hi nette: I'm not familiar with this form but you encouraged me to attempt to write one. I love the way you presented it .

Leon Datu November 18, 2015 at 8:22 PM And to make my heart throb as this gripping scene " overtakes me." Poetically supreme!

Frederic Parker November 18, 2015 at 4:41 PM Your grand-father would have smiled at this poem, for only a man whose heart is open could have his grand-daughter love him so much.I can only hope when my grand-daughters grow up they will look back on me with such love.This poem is what life is made of.

Thomas Martin November 18, 2015 at 4:16 PM Should be a winner! Very good haibun, excellent imagery with attention to feelings.

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