Eulogy In My Heart

Out in the middle of a large farmland, I become a girl of old charm and unexpected songs again. Past the flanks where cluttered rows of hyacinths and ferns quiver, disarranged huts begin to shake as the rough wind wheezes. And on this late July, mounds of dust remind me of summers back in my grandfather’s hometown. Yet, a different vanishing overtakes me.

a season passes…
carrying all its flowers
to emerge as buds

Watching for thrushes that grow moist from dusky froth , my heels trek along deepened clay. As I lay on haystacks listening to stars chiming, the inky moon sinks its riddled face through a veil. Somehow, I feel alone...abandoned  like the  opera of a heart which seems to fall into a tragic ending. Yes, Grandpa isn’t around any longer, as a eulogy of tears swells.

on this barren field…
a solitary twig cracks
from one glittered tree

The nightfall drools looking for the yellow among clouds. For a while, the hazy outlines of strangers--native women and children ---disturb my old revelries  when Grandpa would linger by the porch dipping tunes from his violin. Through calm intervals of laughter, we sway together;  fire to air, salt to honey. Much as I need to inhabit this space, it no longer belongs to me, or to him. But twilight comes brimming with all the glistened jewels of our own world.

between two lifetimes
is a haunting melody…
like a song unsung


11/19/2015
Creative Haibuns Contest
For Charlotte Jade Puddifoot
Copyright © | Year Posted 2015


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Date: 12/15/2015 12:09:00 AM
This piece is too beautiful for me to analyse with my mortal thoughts... this is absolutely breathtaking ~ J.R.
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Date: 12/1/2015 9:02:00 PM
I could cry ..."..need to inhabit this space, it no longer belongs to me..." Oh, Nette - as an Army brat who has often 'gone back', I so well know that feeling and have often tried to capture it in words. Your write is loaded with talent, the opening sentence is fantastic and it just keeps drawing the reader in. I could go on and on about how very good it is. Congratulations on your well-deserved win - just beautiful ... CayCay
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Date: 11/28/2015 3:12:00 PM
Nette, :) A nice and creative win. Love SKAT
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Date: 11/28/2015 1:10:00 PM
EPIC WRITE MY FRIEND. Such great creativity and poetic talent you display with each and every poem you present here! A7
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Date: 11/28/2015 6:54:00 AM
I'm tweeting links to the winners of this great contest.
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Date: 11/27/2015 1:23:00 PM
Nette, you have outdone yourself on this beauty! A fave for me! #7 Congratulations on your well deserved first place!
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Date: 11/27/2015 10:16:00 AM
Great imagery and write, Nette. Congrats on a well deserved win.
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Date: 11/27/2015 7:24:00 AM
Magnificent win. A powerful write.
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Date: 11/26/2015 9:32:00 PM
Eloquent write nette... congrats on first place win!
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Date: 11/26/2015 3:02:00 PM
Nette, this is outstanding - an instant fav for me!! Such a touching topic, one that many can relate to. Your haiku sparkle like gems throughout. Congratulations!
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Date: 11/26/2015 12:22:00 PM
Wonderful write Nette, Emotional and deep.
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Date: 11/26/2015 11:39:00 AM
stunningly graced with melancholic brilliance...congrats on a well deserved #1 Nette
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Date: 11/26/2015 10:37:00 AM
Nette, congrats on your placement! A nostalgic write!
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Date: 11/26/2015 6:41:00 AM
absolutely beautiful Nette such an emotional poem congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 11/26/2015 6:39:00 AM
nette, this is beautifully written with poignancy, excellent use of language, too many striking images for me to pick out just one; that second haiku is particularly lovely - congrats on your 1st place win in my contest!
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Date: 11/26/2015 6:38:00 AM
Congrats on the win nette...hugs
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Date: 11/21/2015 7:31:00 AM
Well, you are his flower. Your thoughts of him and your tears are a real tribute. We are only just visiting this wonderful world.
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Date: 11/20/2015 2:40:00 PM
absolutely loved this poem
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Date: 11/19/2015 4:23:00 PM
Dear Nette: Lovely read. Lovely write. Simply lovely. Glad I found time to visit you my friend. You have a way with words that touch profoundly. ;) Leon.
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Date: 11/19/2015 11:36:00 AM
I truly miss a good Haibun. This was majestic, to say the least.
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Date: 11/19/2015 11:13:00 AM
An amazing write!
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Date: 11/19/2015 7:10:00 AM
Hi nette: I'm not familiar with this form but you encouraged me to attempt to write one. I love the way you presented it .
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Date: 11/18/2015 8:22:00 PM
And to make my heart throb as this gripping scene " overtakes me." Poetically supreme!
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Date: 11/18/2015 4:41:00 PM
Your grand-father would have smiled at this poem, for only a man whose heart is open could have his grand-daughter love him so much.I can only hope when my grand-daughters grow up they will look back on me with such love.This poem is what life is made of.
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Date: 11/18/2015 4:16:00 PM
Should be a winner! Very good haibun, excellent imagery with attention to feelings.
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