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Eris Redux

Do not count the times my truant tongue spoke As though counting spring lambs high on the hill! Can a fire rage aflame with ash and oak And not yield it's embers to the dawn's chill? A sabre’s errant challenge to confront With parochial Envy at its root Now presented again, both dull and blunt That turns, by parried defense, to be moot. Again, with mirth, I engage thine outrage, Though tire from its false theme of affront As rote as the actor’s lines from his stage, No more to win than the fox in the hunt. Rest thy rage, it to mellow by the morn To soften thy brow, no longer forlorn.

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Date: 7/15/2021 12:56:00 AM
Ken, I'm just getting acquainted with your poems. This sonnet works well for me because the language and images are fresh. I never would have guessed it was your first attempt! Best, Thomas Wells
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Ken Rone
Date: 7/15/2021 8:30:00 AM
Yours is a very kind comment. It honors me that you have revisited this older work. Yes, it was my first and the feedback has taught me a lot. I am pleased to become acquainted with you. Best - Ken
Date: 5/12/2021 5:30:00 PM
This sonnet is wonderful Ken. You certainly don’t need any advice from a novice like me. As I said, the rhythm and rhyme will come the more sonnets you read from the masters. No one would know this is your first attempt. Bravo my friend! Please forgive my slow reply. I have been very busy at home. Blessings Connie
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Date: 5/12/2021 8:18:00 PM
Well, as you can see I have some work to do but thanks to Andrea, i understand what my issues are. All the more in awe of you folks that can pull it off.
Date: 5/9/2021 11:27:00 PM
I agree with Vijay about the tone and the vocabulary. It sounds very elegant, like a classy poem, Ken. For first sonnet, you did really well.
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Ken Rone
Date: 5/12/2021 8:19:00 PM
Your help has been invaluable. Correcting this work is almost incomprehensionable. Perhaps I best start anew.
Date: 5/6/2021 1:47:00 PM
This is very layered and meaningful, I like the contrasts of the gentle spring lambs and the fire's rage, also the mirth/outrage and false/affronts very striking, yes some people just like drama for drama's sake I guess~
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Date: 5/12/2021 8:21:00 PM
i am so relieved that the message and theme came through. It sounds ike you got it! Thanks - Ken
Date: 5/5/2021 9:16:00 AM
I am quite impressed with your sonnet Ken. Your tone, meter, vocabulary-- are quite appropriate for the theme you chose. Wish I could write as well as you do.
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Ken Rone
Date: 5/5/2021 9:23:00 AM
I am always in your debt of gratitude Vijay, Thank you for the encouragement on this, my very first attempt at Sonnet.

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