Eris Redux

Do not count the times my truant tongue spoke 
As though counting spring lambs high on the hill!
Can a fire rage aflame with ash and oak 
And not yield it's embers to the dawn's chill?

A sabre’s errant challenge to confront 
With parochial Envy at its root 
Now presented again, both dull and blunt 
That turns, by parried defense, to be moot.

Again, with mirth, I engage thine outrage,
Though tire from its false theme of affront
As rote as the actor’s lines from his stage,
No more to win than the fox in the hunt.

Rest thy rage, it to mellow by the morn
To soften thy brow, no longer forlorn.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2021

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Wells Avatar
July 15, 2021 at 12:56 AM
Ken, I'm just getting acquainted with your poems. This sonnet works well for me because the language and images are fresh. I never would have guessed it was your first attempt! Best, Thomas Wells
Rone Avatar
July 15, 2021 at 8:30 AM
Yours is a very kind comment. It honors me that you have revisited this older work. Yes, it was my first and the feedback has taught me a lot. I am pleased to become acquainted with you. Best - Ken
Marcum Wong Avatar
May 12, 2021 at 5:30 PM
This sonnet is wonderful Ken. You certainly don’t need any advice from a novice like me. As I said, the rhythm and rhyme will come the more sonnets you read from the masters. No one would know this is your first attempt. Bravo my friend! Please forgive my slow reply. I have been very busy at home. Blessings Connie
Rone Avatar
May 12, 2021 at 8:18 PM
Well, as you can see I have some work to do but thanks to Andrea, i understand what my issues are. All the more in awe of you folks that can pull it off.
Dietrich Avatar
May 9, 2021 at 11:27 PM
I agree with Vijay about the tone and the vocabulary. It sounds very elegant, like a classy poem, Ken. For first sonnet, you did really well.
Rone Avatar
May 12, 2021 at 8:19 PM
Your help has been invaluable. Correcting this work is almost incomprehensionable. Perhaps I best start anew.
Faulkner Avatar
May 6, 2021 at 1:47 PM
This is very layered and meaningful, I like the contrasts of the gentle spring lambs and the fire's rage, also the mirth/outrage and false/affronts very striking, yes some people just like drama for drama's sake I guess~
Rone Avatar
May 12, 2021 at 8:21 PM
i am so relieved that the message and theme came through. It sounds ike you got it! Thanks - Ken
Pandit Avatar
May 5, 2021 at 9:16 AM
I am quite impressed with your sonnet Ken. Your tone, meter, vocabulary-- are quite appropriate for the theme you chose. Wish I could write as well as you do.
Rone Avatar
May 5, 2021 at 9:23 AM
I am always in your debt of gratitude Vijay, Thank you for the encouragement on this, my very first attempt at Sonnet.
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