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Entertainer-Anacreontic Couplets

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December 26, 2023
Placed 1st: Anacreontic Couplets Contest
Seven Syllables Per Line (HMS.com)
Sponsor: Silent One

Charmed by her exotic glance She enchants a sexy dance In costumed display of art Strumming rhythms of joyful heart Choreographing slow grooves In graceful, musical moves As gestures paint passion themes And song of love stokes their dreams When desires-enamored spree Hypnotized in tunes of glee But look closely, watch her sigh Hear the bawl of tearless cry When crowds deceitful extol Exhibit of anguished soul As smiles aesthetic hide pain And feigned visage cries disdain Cheer for her to turn the page For she longs to leave this cage Leave realms inebriated Of drunk notions, ill-fated

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Kim Rodrigues

Date: 1/3/2024 7:16:00 PM

What looks beautiful and enticing often has a dark side. Congratulations, Vijay, on your win!

Susan Ashley

Date: 1/1/2024 6:11:00 PM

Dear Vijay, the artistry of your poetic pen paints a stunning and woeful portrait of a caged "entertainer". The anguish is palpable, and so is one's hope for her to turn the page. Congratulations for your excellent win in Silent One's contest. Warmest wishes for a happy new year, my friend.. ~Susan

Silent One

Date: 1/1/2024 10:56:00 AM

You did this one so well, it rhymes and flows and in point with the form.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest..

Silent One

Date: 1/1/2024 10:56:00 AM

You did this one so well, it rhymes and flows and in point with the form.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest..

Sotto Poet

Date: 1/1/2024 9:20:00 AM

Vijay, your remarkable poem is full of beauty and emotional depth. The juxtaposition of a concealed sorrow beneath a seemingly brilliant grin evokes a profound sense of melancholy. The atmosphere, rhythm, vivid imagery, and carefully chosen words in the poem all work together to create a sublime and profoundly powerful masterpiece. The anguish of isolation is depicted masterfully, with lyrics expressing a wide spectrum of emotions. May you be blessed. Splendid year 2024

Evelyn Judy Buehler

Date: 12/30/2023 2:06:00 PM

This poem is an awesome contest contender, with its beauty and raw emotion, Vijay. So sad when a smile covers sadness. This is a fave for me. Best wishes for a win. :)

Sara Kendrick

Date: 12/30/2023 5:32:00 AM

Reads like a good contender to me for the contest. Way to go. Thanks for sharing this one with us and for dropping by my page. Sara K

Joe Dimino

Date: 12/29/2023 4:20:00 AM

"Strumming rhythms of joyful heart Choreographing slow grooves In graceful, musical moves" Lovely, enchanting poetry. This poem makes me feel young again, reminded of dance and righteous singing...and the not so pleasant hangovers...therefore older I feel but wiser. The heartache of isolation. You cover the gantlet of emotions with this one. Great writing! Blessings my friend. Have a Very Happy New Year.

Hilo Poet

Date: 12/28/2023 1:53:00 AM

Oh, Vijay, yours will surely make a joyful noise with the contest 'quiet' sponsor, I'm sure of it. A brilliant teasing that startles a lulled envisioning. Tour-de-France mon ami, at midway the racecars are crashing. Methinks they took the wrong turn at the vineyards of Chardonnay. Lol, much enjoyed Fave my friend. Aloha, William

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/29/2023 11:47:00 AM

You are so very kind, my friend. Much appreciate your insights and certainly your FAVE. Many thanks, William.

Suzanne Delaney

Date: 12/27/2023 6:53:00 PM

This paints a captivating picture of an entertainer. Sometimes we forget the human inside the glitz and how they have to act and perform the same thing over and over. Excellent entry for the contest. SuZ

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/29/2023 11:45:00 AM

Many thanks SuZ--much appreciate.

Janice Canerdy

Date: 12/27/2023 3:51:00 PM

Vijay, this vivid description of a tortured lady yearning to escape her circumstances is so moving. Janice

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/29/2023 11:45:00 AM

Much appreciate your visit, Janice--many thanks.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/27/2023 9:56:00 AM

Reminds me of the girls in the guilded cages that were sung about in late 1800's. Great job with this challenge.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/29/2023 11:44:00 AM

Thank you Andrea--much appreciate.

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 12/27/2023 8:28:00 AM

Vijay, your poem is a captivating plethora of sensuality and hidden sorrows. It dances with enchantment, portraying a costumed display of art that strums the strings of a joyful heart. The skilled moves, painted with passion, tell a story of love and dreams. Yet, your keen observations reveal a poignant duality—beneath the dance, a tearless cry and anguished soul. We cheer for her liberation from a cage of illusions, a journey away from inebriated realms towards a destiny less ill-fated. -Daniel

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/29/2023 11:44:00 AM

Much appreciate your visit and comments, Daniel. Many thanks for your kind remarks.

Brandy Nicole

Date: 12/26/2023 7:24:00 PM

' She longs to leave this cage, cheer for her to turn the page. ' Yes, even the strong stand behind words that glitter, in order to hide the pain. Sometimes, opening another chapter, turning the page, helps in many ways. Your thoughts are deep and powerful, yet, there's hope within. My best to you, Vijay. Hugs, Brandy

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/27/2023 9:15:00 AM

Yes--turning the page helps. Your thoughts always resonate with me my friend. Much appreciate, Brandy. Many thanks. Hugs to you as well.

The Situation

Date: 12/26/2023 6:17:00 PM

I knew when I saw the name it would be something I'd enjoy. I love the rhyming NOT the story telling. Good work.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/27/2023 9:14:00 AM

Thank you for stopping by. Much appreciate--many thanks.

Bill Baker

Date: 12/26/2023 5:33:00 PM

Excellent entry for the contest, Vijay. Well written to form and you've woven your usual wisdom into the layers within your words. It reminds me of an old song, "Katy's Clown" the story of my teen years. Everyone wanted me at their party because I was outgoing, entertaining, and fun; but always went home alone. Sad but true. The dancer smiles, it's their job. Behind the mask is often pain and sadness. Good luck in the contest, my friend. Bill Oops! I forgot to mention, a FAV for my list.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/27/2023 9:13:00 AM

Not familiar with the song, but I will look it up. Always went home alone--that tugs the heart, my friend. Somehow I think of you as the heart of the party. Much appreciate your kindness and goodwill, Bill. I appreciate your insights, my friend--and of course your FAVE. Many thanks.

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 12/26/2023 4:37:00 PM

a powerful poem of how one thing can appear beautiful and exotic but the reality is quite different for this dancer who reminds me of a caged bird, one trapped by circumstance. A poignant read, Vijay. Have a great evening, Sara

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/27/2023 9:08:00 AM

That is a very good analogy, Sara. Much appreciate your visit, as always. Many thanks for your kind remarks.

Judy Ball

Date: 12/26/2023 3:38:00 PM

Hmmmmm Sounds like an exotic dancer who wants to find a better job. Nicely done. You encourage the reader to walk a mile in her shoes before judging. Well done. God Bless, JB

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/27/2023 9:07:00 AM

Yes indeed! Thank you Judy--much appreciate your visit and comments.

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 12/26/2023 3:00:00 PM

This is very well done Vijay, you excel in many forms gl with this one

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/27/2023 9:06:00 AM

Thank you my friend. Much appreciate your visit, Vienna.

Tom Cunningham

Date: 12/26/2023 10:21:00 AM

Sadly many find themselves in this 'cage' seeing it as the only way to survive but longing for an alternative. Best of luck in the contest Vijay. Tom

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/26/2023 12:38:00 PM

Yes indeed--they feel trapped. I wanted to offer a glimmer of hope in the ending lines. Much appreciate, Tom. Many thanks.

Jay Narain

Date: 12/26/2023 9:38:00 AM

Nice poem. Realistic description of an entertainer.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/26/2023 12:36:00 PM

Thank you Jay--much appreciate.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 12/26/2023 8:47:00 AM

I’m not familiar with the form but I like the result. Well done, good luck in the contest.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/26/2023 12:36:00 PM

So kind of you, Richard. Much appreciate you stopping by. Many thanks.

Heidi Sands

Date: 12/26/2023 8:45:00 AM

This is an excellent rhyme. The lines, but look closely, watch her sigh, hear the bawl of tearless cry ...wow ..it grips me in the turn of the poem. Well done :)

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/26/2023 12:35:00 PM

Glad you liked the poem, my friend. Much appreciate your supportive comments, as always, Heidi. Many thanks for being there.

Hiya Sharma

Date: 12/26/2023 4:44:00 AM

Oh my, this is a poignant and soul stirring write with vivid hues of evocative emotions, melancholic atmosphere and sombre wordplay just us the second part began.. The first part is so full of mystical imageries, describing her glory with utmost fascination.. But all the shimmers turned to ashes as the anguish behind her smile reflected in those words... That's heart-aching.. How she longs to fly away from this cage and spread her wings..That ending really hits hard and is so powerful..Love this

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/26/2023 12:34:00 PM

I am in debt of your generous feedback, Hiya. Your kindness resonates in every word. Much appreciate your visit and your FAVE--so special coming from a gifted poet! Many thanks.

Hiya Sharma
Date: 12/26/2023 4:45:00 AM

A FAV for me.. deeply resonating!

Ink Empress

Date: 12/26/2023 4:41:00 AM

Whoa! I am in awe of your ability to rhyme in such an effortless manner dear vijay! Ah you’ve done this form so well in a theme that silent one would really love. I am loving the flow of this and the depth of your lines throughout too, especially “ Choreographing slow grooves In graceful, musical moves“ so exquisite and so captivating. “ As smiles aesthetic hide pain And feigned visage cries disdain“ the depth in those lines truly is impeccable and so soul stirring’ and the ending resonates.FAVE

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/26/2023 12:29:00 PM

So wonderful to hear that from you, my friend. You amaze me with your goodwill thoughts, as I read your feedback, to so many I visit, here on Soup. Much appreciate your presence on my page, your kind feedback, your FAVE. Many thanks for being there, Ink.