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An eerie calm has been encroaching
as dawn's pale light approaches the realm
of what is usually a normal morning
but no songbirds are softly trilling today
They've all taken shelter from the storm
the one that rumbles ever nearer... she comes

One of nature's evil forces is on her way
a strengthening femme fatale I fear
has set her course due north
Her compass arrow pointed right at me
She churns Gulf waters and raises tides
gulping it down as if it were an elixir
from which her hurricane winds swirl 
She comes to inflict harm and pillage
among coastal villages and cities

Not a drop of rain has fallen, but she comes.
No traffic can be heard, not a single word
from children waiting for a school bus.
It's declared a stay home from work day
Francine will rule our southern coast
boasting as her pressure drops 
and nothing can stop her chosen path
Her wrath will be done... she comes
this evening, she comes for us

Copyright © | Year Posted 2024




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Date: 9/12/2024 5:13:00 AM
Dear Lin, I hope that you are all right and this might storm does very little damage. I have seen it on TV coming your way. Your poem brought out the power, destruction and the fear for the storm and filled me with prayers for those in the path. My Prayers are With You! - Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel
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Date: 9/12/2024 7:02:00 AM
Thank you for your concern and prayers, Daniel. I'm ok, just a lot of debris to clean up. Usually, the day after such a storm, it's bright and sunny. Not today.
Date: 9/11/2024 10:56:00 AM
Time to hunker down Lin, and hope for the best, I usually envy your balmy climate, but not today for there is a price to pay living on the Gulf, you have set the stage quite powerfully of an eerie calm before the storm, the line (nothing can stop her chosen path) has a certain inexorable doom, (hopefully not)! but makes great poetry, best of luck riding it out, cheers David
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Date: 9/12/2024 7:00:00 AM
It was a rough 6 hours of rain and wind, some gusts of 90 mph, but I'm fine and so is my apartment. Thanks, David.
Date: 9/11/2024 6:09:00 AM
You have captured the tension, the expectation and sense of helplessness before the destructive power of nature...each stanza builds on the pressure and culminates in the revelation of its target...us, (me and you)....holy crap ! That sets the heart racing. Dear Lin, just brilliant. You have set the scene and placed it in the realm of the believable. This is what good poetry is about.
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Date: 9/11/2024 6:13:00 AM
Thank you for your review, Paul. I felt the tension building in me again by reading your thoughts. Unfortunately, this weather is a reality for me this morning as Hurricane Francine makes her way towards my home.
Date: 9/11/2024 6:02:00 AM
I just hope it doesn't do much damage and worse cause fatalities, I've often seen news reports and the devastation it causes, it's heartbreaking. Tom
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Date: 9/11/2024 6:10:00 AM
It's truly heartbreaking, Tom. I've been through many that were categorized much stronger, but a hurricane at any strength does terrible damage. Besides deaths, one of the worst parts is losing electricity that sometimes takes days or weeks to recover. Thanks, Tom.

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