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For Bitesize Contest No 105 Poetry Contest sponsored by Line Gautier

EEG

You'll pick up the sound of gray footfalls
echoing through empty halls,
but you'll not hear a laugh or bell,
just a soft moan from a well,
and a tune, whistled by each bone
through which the wind has blown.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2025

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Woods Avatar
March 27, 2025 at 4:19 AM
Quite spooky actually! I love that! Such descriptive phrases and so much said in few words. That's talent. Xoxo
Crandall Avatar
March 27, 2025 at 7:36 AM
Thanks Crystol - yes, that's how I thought of it too - spooky!
Foster Avatar
March 27, 2025 at 12:28 AM
Very descriptive. I can almost see the needle on the graph weaving to the tune. icongratulations on your win with this fine piece. David . :)
Crandall Avatar
March 27, 2025 at 7:35 AM
Thanks Margaret!
Layne Avatar
March 26, 2025 at 10:41 AM
Congratulations on your writing! I was trying to decipher this one. I have never had an EEG done before, and it had such a strong auditory appeal—every line. I started wondering about what that procedure is like. Good stuff, David.
Crandall Avatar
March 26, 2025 at 3:50 PM
hi Trina - thanks for your kind feedback! I haven't had one and don't know much about it, but I think it's when they measure your brain waves and put it on a graph - a way to measure your brain's health. I called it EEG, because it was supposed to represent the inside of someone's brain - I think it's a little grim.
Jones Avatar
March 25, 2025 at 8:57 AM
Congratulations on your top win!!!
Crandall Avatar
March 25, 2025 at 10:14 AM
Thanks Karen!
Mckeithan Avatar
March 25, 2025 at 8:50 AM
Congrats on the 1st place finish Dave. A lot of mystery in this poem. Great imagery.
Crandall Avatar
March 25, 2025 at 10:14 AM
Thanks Oliver!
Kauffman Avatar
March 17, 2025 at 11:09 AM
What a great element of mystery and mysticism in your lines. Like Terry, I have read this several times to savor the depth of your artistry. Sending you blessings.
Crandall Avatar
March 17, 2025 at 2:40 PM
Wow - thanks Sam!
Miller Avatar
March 17, 2025 at 9:20 AM
I really like this one David I keep reading it over. Is it for constance's contest? If so GL
Crandall Avatar
March 17, 2025 at 9:22 AM
Thanks, Terry! I kind of liked it too. I entered something else in Constance's contest. I might enter it in the next round of Line's 6 liner contests.
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