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For Bitesize Contest No 105 Poetry Contest sponsored by Line Gautier

You'll pick up the sound of gray footfalls echoing through empty halls, but you'll not hear a laugh or bell, just a soft moan from a well, and a tune, whistled by each bone through which the wind has blown.

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Crystol Woods

Date: 3/27/2025 4:19:00 AM

Quite spooky actually! I love that! Such descriptive phrases and so much said in few words. That's talent. Xoxo

David Crandall
Date: 3/27/2025 7:36:00 AM

Thanks Crystol - yes, that's how I thought of it too - spooky!

Margaret Foster

Date: 3/27/2025 12:28:00 AM

Very descriptive. I can almost see the needle on the graph weaving to the tune. icongratulations on your win with this fine piece. David . :)

David Crandall
Date: 3/27/2025 7:35:00 AM

Thanks Margaret!

Trina Layne

Date: 3/26/2025 10:41:00 AM

Congratulations on your writing! I was trying to decipher this one. I have never had an EEG done before, and it had such a strong auditory appeal—every line. I started wondering about what that procedure is like. Good stuff, David.

David Crandall
Date: 3/26/2025 3:50:00 PM

hi Trina - thanks for your kind feedback! I haven't had one and don't know much about it, but I think it's when they measure your brain waves and put it on a graph - a way to measure your brain's health. I called it EEG, because it was supposed to represent the inside of someone's brain - I think it's a little grim.

Karen Jones

Date: 3/25/2025 8:57:00 AM

Congratulations on your top win!!!

David Crandall
Date: 3/25/2025 10:14:00 AM

Thanks Karen!

Oliver Mckeithan

Date: 3/25/2025 8:50:00 AM

Congrats on the 1st place finish Dave. A lot of mystery in this poem. Great imagery.

David Crandall
Date: 3/25/2025 10:14:00 AM

Thanks Oliver!

Sam Kauffman

Date: 3/17/2025 11:09:00 AM

What a great element of mystery and mysticism in your lines. Like Terry, I have read this several times to savor the depth of your artistry. Sending you blessings.

David Crandall
Date: 3/17/2025 2:40:00 PM

Wow - thanks Sam!

Terry Miller

Date: 3/17/2025 9:20:00 AM

I really like this one David I keep reading it over. Is it for constance's contest? If so GL

David Crandall
Date: 3/17/2025 9:22:00 AM

Thanks, Terry! I kind of liked it too. I entered something else in Constance's contest. I might enter it in the next round of Line's 6 liner contests.