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Eden

As our world lies in havoc she waits deep in the inticingly dark forest she glances upon us though to her we are but a bleak glimmer of misery on the horizon our world begins to crumble our oceans dry and turn to puddles and the earth cracks and begins to break away below our feet and as we starve she picks ripe succulent fruits from lush strong vines she plunges her teeth through the skin and flavorful juices roll down her tongue she runs and plays throughout the forest and skips through rolling streams and the sound of her wet feet slapping on rocks echo's through the woods she cherishes every thing in her world while the brutal few still in ours ravage what is left of it they victimize the weak and weary for them to survive is to fight is to kill while the weaker waste away or survive by taking from the corpses that litter the earth burned crisp by the seering sun but she sings enchantingly through the black mass of thick trees and dances elegantly with fire flies for years she watches us with little intrest until one intensely dark night she looks upon our world and thinks this could be a sad shame but she never feels sadness and she knows that everything happens for a reason.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 4/15/2013 6:06:00 AM
A gr8 poem and i like the reference to Eden. We believe we have to till d earthly garden well if we r to enjoy d garden of Eden. Fab way u have put it in freeverse pal.
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Date: 10/22/2012 4:17:00 PM
Very touching work of art Joanna. I can only imagine the amount of despair and intutaiveness you had while writing this poem. I can very much relate to this poem and the feeling that lies beneath the surface.
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Date: 7/22/2012 11:17:00 AM
Deep write here, Joanna! Gave me chills
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Date: 3/26/2011 1:23:00 AM
VERY TOUCHING hey just so you are aware next time you come on i replied to your forum post under need to talk and then carey!?!
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Date: 12/22/2010 6:28:00 PM
very moving peace loved the flow and the meaning please read some of my pomes on here and tell me how to make them better your writing is moving and graffic yet so free flowing it moves me
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Date: 12/8/2010 9:05:00 AM
Hi Joanna Eden has a multifaceted concept that leads one divine process. Well crafted with a pulse that beats across the page. We are made in his likeness and the earth was made in the reflection of heavens glory. Mankind was created to be the caretakers of the land and the earthen vessels we possess. We have been given endless chances to seed,grow and encourage both soil. Yet all worsens. Your insight into the new creation is very paralleled. Excellent read my friend Love Cookie
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Date: 3/21/2010 4:03:00 AM
No explanation needed here- beautiful poem
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Date: 3/13/2010 7:12:00 AM
very good, constuction flows with the emotion keep writting,,,, Johnathon :)
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Date: 3/10/2010 4:14:00 PM
I like this one, very good imagination. I bet u had fun writting this one...
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Date: 3/3/2010 6:15:00 PM
I love this one, It reminds me of the ones i write, very good. keep these ones coming
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Date: 3/3/2010 2:52:00 PM
Interesting topic and theory that you have written and described in this write. Keep the creative pen flowing. Sara
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