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The stars will fade again this morning They died a million years ago As if to give a little warning... you've lost your way back home You left me here without a fire as if desire has turned to stone When stars come out to light the evening they're ghosts of stars, that leave without a song The moon, ..was drifting,.... watching for the sunrise, while waiting for the light of dawn While I was watching at the window..... however, knowing ... ....you wouldn't come While, there are dreams that last forever.... some dreams will simply fade away, And treasured times that we remember we must surrender in the light of day ..............interlude music................. I've watched the sun unlatch the gate to morning I hesitate to leave the window's ledge Your pillow lies untouched beside the bed The stars up in the sky... have long been dead One star is telling me it is morning It seems the others simply strayed Some things we want to last forever are illusions we have cherished, but will often fade away will often fade away........ as if they're made to stray away....... _________________________________________________ 9/6/14 For Craig's Contest: Written for the music by Kevin Kern "I Love You" www.youtube.com/watch?v=vAbytYD5KHw

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Date: 12/22/2015 4:05:00 PM
carrie, Congrats on your STAR theme. Love LINDA
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Date: 12/22/2015 1:41:00 AM
Lovely write n win Carrie.. big congrats!
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Date: 12/21/2015 11:57:00 PM
carrie, Congratulations on your win. Thank you for supporting my contest. SKAT
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Date: 9/28/2014 7:14:00 PM
Very beautiful Carrie. Congratulations on your top win.
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Date: 9/28/2014 6:28:00 PM
Hey Carrie, Congratulations on the top spot.
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Date: 9/28/2014 9:29:00 AM
I love the blend of love and stars, so romantic, well deserved first place, hugs
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Date: 9/28/2014 9:17:00 AM
Very big congrats to you, Carrie. This is the kind of poem I could get lost in!
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Date: 9/28/2014 12:36:00 AM
Lovely lyrics Carrie! Loved the way u did it n the top place win! Congrats dear!
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Date: 9/27/2014 8:54:00 PM
congrats on your first place, loved the lyrics...Seren
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Date: 9/27/2014 3:29:00 PM
such a sad poem beautifully penned, many congrats on your top place:-) hugs jan xxx
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Date: 9/27/2014 3:17:00 PM
Congratulations on your first place win in Craig's contest Carrie. Superlative write... Verlena
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Date: 9/27/2014 3:12:00 PM
CONGRATULATIONS ON YOUR FIRST PLACE WIN.
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Date: 9/27/2014 3:11:00 PM
This is brilliant Carrie you have to send this to some artist/producer who will find someone else to write original music for it. Unless you can do that yourself.
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Date: 9/10/2014 9:00:00 AM
Sad poem... Like the stars...
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Date: 9/9/2014 8:23:00 PM
very sad yet well done piece Carrie. I agree it would be very difficult to write something happy to this heart wrenching music, yet somehow the beauty even in sadness comes out.
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Date: 9/7/2014 7:10:00 AM
Beautiful, sad, yearning, and so lyrical.
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Date: 9/6/2014 4:52:00 PM
You gave me 'that feeling' of playing on the strings of my guitar again with this sad lyrical beautiful song my sweet Carrie.Ahh that pillow..that empty pillow.Fantastic post...May the star in your life never fade away.Big hug!!
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Date: 9/6/2014 4:17:00 PM
Oh, Carrie. Devastating in its beauty. Oh...to compare a lost love to the stars that "have long been dead" is pure genius. I'm not flattering. I love how you did this. Beautiful. I'm sure Craig will love I too. Hugs
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Date: 9/6/2014 4:14:00 PM
I feel like I've in that same place.
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