Dusk

birds wing back to homes
scarlet tint colors the sky
twilight blurs the scene 
a creepy stillness descends,
as the Sun elopes with Light

English Tanka
Rhyme scheme.. 5-7-5-7-7

lightromancesunsettanka

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Sara Kendrick

February 27, 2024 at 12:53 AM

I really like the last line, Valsa. I am sure a beautiful scene at the end of a day. Thanks for sharing it with us and for dropping by my page. Sara K

JC Brul

January 31, 2022 at 5:39 AM

You painted a masterpiece dear friend. I am feeling to get my brush,paint and canvas and paint the scene you vividly portray in this stunning tanka.

Christuraj Alex

January 26, 2022 at 10:35 PM

A beautiful five-lined poem. Congratulations!

Malabika Ray Choudhury

January 26, 2022 at 3:16 PM

Such a lovely descriptive poem, Valsa. The picture of dusk ending with the phrase "Sun elopes with Light" is mesmerizing! Congratulations on your win. BW ~ Mala

Marshall Iftekhar Ahmed

January 14, 2022 at 8:39 AM

How many skills have you got! as if nothing seems to be uncharted for you. as if just by a mere glance, you can easily write a great poem in any structure of poetry! why creepy! Dusk is so poetically gloomy, grey, painful, etc but creepy! I am seeing you in a new light! ha ha ha! (just joking) "As the Sun elopes with Light" there, there is my amazing poet! Beautiful as always! Thanks, Marshall

Victor Buhagiar

January 14, 2022 at 8:16 AM

May Spring come. We'll see more birds coming home. And we will enjoy the joyous dance of spring. Blessings

P.S. Awtry

January 14, 2022 at 7:27 AM

Valsa I am wowed with this! Thank like the “creepy stillness” and that last line just—wow!

Sotto Poet

January 14, 2022 at 7:24 AM

Valsa, your depictions of birds migrating to their nests against a crimson backdrop are lovely, as is your eloquent vocabulary.

Anil Deo

January 14, 2022 at 7:02 AM

In the "stillness" of dusk, "Sun elopes with light." then Edison invented the light bulb, thank heavens. A Thanks to relish, plumb the depths. Thanx Valsa.

Anil Deo

January 14, 2022 at 7:01 AM

In the "stillness" of dusk, "Sun elopes with light." then Edison invented the light bulb, thank heavens. A Thanks to relish, plumb the depths. Thanx Valsa.