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Dual Personality

In a flash, coals of darkness strike the night, her teeth grating... pinched by a rage screaming on walls that resound from her lungs; her face spitting out a whorl of madness in a verbal lash of ten or more whips, mocking all the way down to the veins… A furnace of rage disconnects her from some sense of reality: the raw edge of irreverence at every turn... panting, cussing, and cutting sliced words like broken glass, as though her heart is unaware of her sense of duality. She taste the tears of both wrath and liberation, plunging down the sunken pit in a hazy blur; until she hears a voice,” it's alright, girl”... for her borders cannot see the difference between another time, another place, where gentle sighs and harsh language cannot blend as she hardly responds. For John Lawless: Minced Words Contest 6/24/2016

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Date: 10/31/2016 9:49:00 PM
I really enjoyed this, well in fact we both did! :)
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Date: 6/29/2016 5:30:00 AM
What an excellent piece, congrats on your win Nette. Hugs Rick.
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Date: 6/29/2016 3:31:00 AM
Hi Nette. Congrats on your placement with this wonderful piece!! ;-)
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Date: 6/28/2016 3:58:00 PM
Nette: Awesome description of passionate rage. Congrats on your placement, dear. SuZ
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Date: 6/27/2016 9:40:00 AM
Nette, in this powerful poem, you have chillingly described the out-of-control mindset that often results in crimes of passion and life in prison for someone. Congrats on your WELL-deserved win. Janice
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Date: 6/27/2016 8:54:00 AM
Nette, I got a sense of rage, dementia, Alzheimers like entrapment in this one. Thank you for participating in the contest.
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Date: 6/26/2016 1:13:00 PM
Beautifully expressed the duality. Good luck in the contest my lovely smiling friend. Loved always, bl
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Date: 6/26/2016 9:28:00 AM
Pow wow for duality of words-- stinging or swinging depending on one psychological state. Methinks this is astounding!
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Date: 6/25/2016 9:24:00 AM
I like your take on the contest. Impressive entry!
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Date: 6/24/2016 1:14:00 PM
Stinging, amazing poetry bordering on blind anger and then normalcy. Extraordinary approach to the theme! You didn't mince lines and expression here!
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Date: 6/23/2016 10:55:00 PM
This is about real release for me! Such depth Nette! The best to you in this contest!
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Date: 6/23/2016 10:16:00 PM
Potent use of words capturing mood swings; quite bipolar in nature. Your poem is brilliant!
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Date: 6/23/2016 7:03:00 PM
Another fantastic write, nette. Sometimes it's best to just let it out.
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