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I dreamt. I hated it. Why can't dreams leave me alone? Oh yes, you were there, sitting on the half-broken deck chair beautiful, alone, vacant eyes, searching the horizon far away. I was there a few yards before you but you saw me not. Your lips moved soundlessly. What did you need to say? “Have courage? Are you so devoid of love? Or care?” Then I woke up. The night was hot. Sweat ran down my spine. Yet you slept on. I was drowning in a hot sweat. Yet I was happy For you were there. Smelling like the dawn.

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Date: 7/2/2021 9:11:00 PM
oh wow, I really like this one a lot. Especially how you ended it. Brilliant
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Date: 7/2/2021 2:30:00 PM
Nightmares are easier to cope with when you wake and your loved one is there. An impressive write Victor. Sweet dreams, Belle
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Date: 7/2/2021 3:49:00 AM
The thoughts of the past pleasant as long as your loved one is there. God bless you, sweet friend!
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Date: 7/1/2021 6:24:00 PM
Very sweet thoughts; dream on.
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Date: 7/1/2021 9:46:00 AM
Very well penned about your dream using vivid imagery. Victor, All the best!
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Date: 7/1/2021 9:45:00 AM
- We have many strange dreams ... - happiness is waking up with his loved one by his side ... a lovely poem, Victor - Stay cool :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 7/1/2021 9:21:00 AM
This is lovely Victor. It speaks of contentment. Good stuff. God Bless, JB
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Date: 7/1/2021 8:48:00 AM
Some dreams are so awful that you are utterly relieved to awaken. You have so vividly captured the nightmare, and the joy of awakening, Victor. I enjoyed the poetic telling. :)
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Date: 7/1/2021 6:53:00 AM
You have penned a nice dreamscape Victor, with a satisfying end. I quote: Yet I was happy For you were there. Smelling like the dawn. Delice
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Date: 7/1/2021 6:04:00 AM
Emotions of two--well captured, Victor. It is comforting when a loved one is near when the night roils us sometimes.
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Date: 7/1/2021 4:24:00 AM
That is truly wonderful, Victor. Your words paint a vivid picture and the imagery you use fits that moment of lust perfectly.Blessings and kindest regards
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Date: 7/1/2021 2:30:00 AM
Your pictures and those aptly written verses for those pictures capturing moments of love and life... amazing Victor... God bless.. ~ Ani
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Date: 7/1/2021 12:51:00 AM
Those kind of dreams unerve you, then you wake realising everything is ok. Tom
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Date: 7/1/2021 12:43:00 AM
A strange dream and sweet reality, well penned, Victor:)
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