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Drifting In the Gloaming

melancholy thoughts drifted in the gloaming, whispered for the night as the waves were foaming her words, as unpredictable as the sea, echoed with the pathos of a discordant timpani his valiant attempt to bring harmony to his thoughts only frosted his thinking and made him more distraught it was crystal clear that he'd love her forevermore whether here or on a distant shore She would come to him in the moonlight's gleaming whispering in the night, while he was dreaming -- 8/8/17

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Date: 8/20/2017 12:25:00 PM
Wow! We were on the same wave length with this contest. Congratulations Joseph, I enjoyed your poem.
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Date: 8/19/2017 8:24:00 PM
Beautiful poem Joseph! Great use of the required words into great imagery. Congratulations on your placement! :)
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Joseph May
Date: 8/20/2017 5:11:00 AM
Thank you Susan
Date: 8/19/2017 7:22:00 PM
Wonderful write Joseph congrats on a very good placement!
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Joseph May
Date: 8/19/2017 7:58:00 PM
Thank you for my placement John..and thanks for the inspiration
Date: 8/14/2017 8:57:00 AM
Great use of the given words, Joseph:)
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Date: 8/10/2017 9:42:00 PM
Joseph, you did fantastic with the words. I love this.
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Joseph May
Date: 8/10/2017 10:28:00 PM
Thank you Andrea.,.
Date: 8/10/2017 2:52:00 PM
you light the page with this heartfelt piece, joseph... i like!..huggs
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Joseph May
Date: 8/10/2017 6:22:00 PM
Thank you Nette
Date: 8/10/2017 11:31:00 AM
Indeed the melancholic air that pervades these lines gives them added poetic beauty, Joseph. Regards // paul
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Joseph May
Date: 8/10/2017 6:22:00 PM
Thank you Paul
Date: 8/10/2017 7:48:00 AM
Excellent. Very well penned. Thanks for sharing it.
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Joseph May
Date: 8/10/2017 8:48:00 AM
Thank you Ravi
Date: 8/9/2017 5:58:00 PM
Beautifully done my friend...best of luck...god bless...^WW^
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Joseph May
Date: 8/10/2017 8:47:00 AM
Thank you Winged Warrior
Date: 8/8/2017 11:51:00 PM
I just came across this poem by sheer accident. Glad I did, really enjoyed the ocean reference and the sadness of distant love. Regards, Craig
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Joseph May
Date: 8/9/2017 12:28:00 PM
Thank you Craig
Date: 8/8/2017 4:45:00 PM
WOWWEE, Joseph, one of yours that I love it most! Very gorgeous indeed :) hugs, Kina :)
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Joseph May
Date: 8/8/2017 6:24:00 PM
Thank you so much Akkina
Date: 8/8/2017 3:43:00 PM
Adrift and distraught for sure Joseph, as you meant it to be, I'm assuming. Well done...
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Joseph May
Date: 8/8/2017 6:24:00 PM
Thank you Charlie...
Date: 8/8/2017 3:40:00 PM
I second that! Wow! This is an amazing poem. Actually a favorite. I love it. Well done Joseph. :)
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Joseph May
Date: 8/8/2017 6:23:00 PM
Thank you so much for your comments and for faving it Heidi...
Date: 8/8/2017 3:27:00 PM
wow, this is gorgeous melancholy at its best, I'd say!!
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Joseph May
Date: 8/8/2017 3:28:00 PM
Thank you so much Andrea...hugs

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