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Don'T Dawdle, Lil' Flower

She breaks away and builds the framework And dances outside of the lines "Consider the future, don't dawdle, lil' flower" But she ignores their fears and signs Like a bird that knows no direction Or a horse who runs 'gainst the wind But can still remember a life once lived She lives a life unattached - unpinned From the life given to her by her fathers Who only said one meaningful phrase 'Consider the future, don't dawdle, lil' flower" No good intentions, no love, no praise. And here, still building the framework Of a world that just might collapse But could it lead to a greater life? Outside of their lies and their traps. Dance away, don't dawdle lil' flower Build the framework of a life untamed Like a bird that knows no direction A work of art, a beauty - unashamed. 3-12-18 8 Word Challenge

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Date: 3/15/2018 9:29:00 PM
Wonderful imagery in your poem, Juli , and written very well using the required words. Congratulations on your win! Hugs ~`*
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Date: 3/15/2018 1:05:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. Wonderful rhyme. Great pen. Enjoyed immensely.
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Date: 3/14/2018 11:51:00 PM
Just a gorgeous write, and so charming! Sincere congratulations on your well-deserved win, Juli-Michelle - blessings, and keep up the great work, friend! :-)
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Date: 3/14/2018 9:14:00 PM
This is lovely, Juli-Michelle, well done! Viv x
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Date: 3/14/2018 3:59:00 PM
I love this advice and love the fact that she "dances outside of the lines" and will very likely continue to. A very lovely poem, Juli-Michelle. Love it.
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Date: 3/13/2018 12:08:00 AM
If my interpretation is correct this is about chasing a dream. In which case it is a most enjoyable read. If not please don't burst my bubble. I liked the poem, Juli-Michelle.
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Date: 3/12/2018 3:03:00 PM
I like the message and the line you used...don't dawdle lil' flower" All the best Juli-Michelle
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Date: 3/12/2018 2:27:00 PM
I wrote a poem about a flower also today, but a little different... I like how you used the 5 words, this poem is really uplifting..
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