Debbie Guzzi Poet Rhyme

Dolly

There was a tree I remember that
Though the house seemed dark I swear.
Father had left us months ago
Now Christmas time was here.

Sister, well, she was only three
and knew not much of presents
I cried for many things that year
one of them loving parents.

On Christmas morning beneath the tree
a special Dolly waited
with joints that moved and eyes of glass
sorrow had abated.

Dolly, well she was an real angel
for she’d brought my Daddy home.
Convinced was I by twinkling eye
and sparkling golden comb.

Magical Dolly with moving hands,
no matter a bit broken,
the token Daddy gave to me
love had truly spoken.

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Nick Bagnall January 12, 2011 at 8:29 AM heart breaking, very emotive, and apparently congratulations too

Carol Sunshine Brown January 5, 2011 at 5:09 AM Congratulations Deborah on your win in the "Toyland" contest by Linda-Marie. Love, Carol

Dr.Ram Mehta January 4, 2011 at 5:01 AM Congratulations on this well deserved win in the contest of Linda. Nice write on the daddy's token

Nette Onclaud January 4, 2011 at 3:34 AM a real wonder, deborah! applause to you on your win :) nette

Nette Onclaud January 4, 2011 at 3:34 AM a real wonder, deborah! applause to you on your win :) nette

Nette Onclaud January 4, 2011 at 3:33 AM a real wonder, deborah! applause to you on your win :) nette

Andrea Dietrich January 3, 2011 at 10:17 PM A sweet poem and tenderness shown for your dad. congratulations, Deb.

Tahera Mannan January 3, 2011 at 8:19 PM Many congratulations for this success Deborah. it is a real touching poem.

Constance La France January 3, 2011 at 6:32 PM Congratulaltions Deborah with your win in Linda's contest with this really lovely poem~~

Carrie Richards January 3, 2011 at 5:47 PM This poem grabbed my heart the first time I read it.....it still does once again. No matter a bit broken.............love is what counts and what we take with us for the rest of our lives, however, and whenever it is given. :)

Linda-Marie Sweetheart January 3, 2011 at 5:19 PM Congrats Debbie on your success in my Toyland contest... my winners list finally posted tonight luv..

Sidney Beck December 28, 2010 at 2:06 PM Debbie, I very much like this sort of poem which you are so skilled at writing....sort of Walt Whitman but more heartfelt.....I remember writing once to you about a poem which you felt was your best or one of your best( remember?), I didn't think it reflected your real talent Deb......however this poem DOLLY does reflect that talent,,,,kinda shows the inner or perhaps real "you",,,that's just my feeling...maybe you disagree? sincerely Syd

Daver Austin December 17, 2010 at 2:06 PM A truth - little girls need their daddy. I like this poem mucho. Love, Dave

Colleen Bono December 17, 2010 at 1:16 PM Hello,asking a favor from a few poets.My 11 yr old wrote her first poem for a class called Christmas Bliss.She wants to see how many comments she gets.Could you take a peak and leave her a comment.Happy holidays.

Michael Gelb December 17, 2010 at 7:00 AM Nice poem

Andrea Dietrich December 16, 2010 at 8:58 PM Sweet one, Deb. And wrapped around it is the story of how you felt abandoned by your dad. Mine was not there for us either in our childhood. I really need to take time to do these contests even though I have no clue yet how to do them! thanks for the favs. I appreciate it. LUv, Andrea

Linda-Marie Sweetheart December 16, 2010 at 3:56 PM Debbie u may use your own title for your entry.. and if this is it good luck...I will read in full at judging time ... and enjoy ..with luv..

Daniel Cheeseman December 16, 2010 at 1:27 PM So touching Deborah, nice to read your work again

Carolyn Devonshire December 16, 2010 at 1:13 PM It must have been tough growiing up without loving parents, Deb. How wonderful that the "Magical Dolly" brought your father home to you. Delightful thoughts from a child's perspective. Best wishes in the "toys" contest, Deb. Love, Carolyn

Carrie Richards December 16, 2010 at 12:31 PM How you have just melted my heart......wow....no other words.

Deb Radke December 16, 2010 at 12:28 PM Oh Deborah. A sad childhood memory for you also. This is very moving. I like your use of rhyme inside some of the lines. It's an intriguing use of rhyming and rhythm. Very good. ps. soup mail to you