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Distant Shores

Come feel the pulsing, exotic sounds, reverberating upon those distant shores where loud voices wail without restraint shouting staccato cries with utter abandonment. How solemn are the pounding drums, with heavy hands beating haunting, hypnotic rhythms. A ceremonial crowd of mourners follow the well trodden pathway leading to makeshift sailboats made with sails of flour sacks sewn together, then tied to wooden tree masts. A dirge of death passes by weighed down in its weary task while a swath of fiery clouds splash boldly across a golden sunset, hovering over the Indian Ocean. See the light, cotton robes wrapped loosely around the darkly tanned, young men rippling gently in the breeze as they carry the deceased above and away, into the sea. A solemn ritual, a cultural divide separated by a hemisphere of oceans and sky. Written on 6/19/2018

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Date: 8/3/2018 1:15:00 PM
You have described the scenery very well in this write. I have never been to the Indian Ocean area, but I now feel like I have been there after reading your work.
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Date: 7/28/2018 9:53:00 PM
I love that custom and it reminds me of ours here in Hawaii when we light our lanterns and float them out to sea by the thousands. It is a very emotional ceremony. You have expressed this Indian custom brilliantly in your lovely poem Laura. : )
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Laura Leiser
Date: 7/28/2018 10:20:00 PM
Thank you, Connie. I enjoyed writing about something different than I normally write.
Date: 7/4/2018 12:25:00 PM
beautifully written my friend
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Laura Leiser
Date: 7/4/2018 12:29:00 PM
Thanks, Al. :)
Date: 6/24/2018 6:37:00 PM
Congratulations on your distant shores poem. I felt like I was right there - your imagery is spectacular.
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Laura Leiser
Date: 6/24/2018 8:36:00 PM
Thank you, Susan! I hoped this poem would evoke an awareness of the different ways people live in foreign lands...
Date: 6/20/2018 2:38:00 PM
Love that last stanza it is really profound... Great poem for the contest..
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Laura Leiser
Date: 6/20/2018 5:05:00 PM
Hi Silent! Thank you for your encouraging comments! I haven’t written much of anything lately...was uninspired until this topic arose. Hope all is well with you :)
Date: 6/20/2018 2:24:00 PM
how you entice, laura... poignantly beautiful!... huggs
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Laura Leiser
Date: 6/20/2018 5:09:00 PM
Thank you, Nette, for your kind comments! Glad you liked this poem :)
Date: 6/20/2018 8:58:00 AM
Wonderful write Laura, amazing imagery, I could visualize the whole scene!
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Laura Leiser
Date: 6/20/2018 11:19:00 AM
Thank you, John. Yes, I was trying to paint a picture, and I have a picture of the boats described in my home...
Date: 6/19/2018 11:53:00 PM
Beautiful but sad verse Laura, you gave us a colourful image, great write. Good luck. Tom.
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Laura Leiser
Date: 6/20/2018 11:17:00 AM
Thank you, Tom. Yes, I penned this for the contest...with a different slant.